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Young Love

Empty promises whispered to stars
Sitting on the porch while it rains
Midnight dancing to the sound of guitars
Road trips spent singing on trains
Smoke filled rooms that smell like cigars
Blindfolds and handcuffs playing games
Ecstasy high feeling like superstars
Sharing stories of sadness and pains 
Watching tail lights of speeding cars
Alcohol and drugs running through veins
Broken hearts and open scars
Blood stained sheets and bruised forearms
Speeding on highways and switching lanes
Drunk fist fights in closing bars
Morning after popping pills for migraines 
Experience altering young adult brains

Copyright © Laurice S. | Year Posted 2017

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Richard D Seal Date: 11/30/2017 2:52:00 PM Sounds like a good Saturday night out to me, ok, not really lol. I’d call this form quatrain. Very well written, I like it, you’re a natural rhymer. Take care, Richard Login to Reply Laurice S. Date: 12/1/2017 7:54:00 AM hahaha it does sound like a good Saturday night at the beginning! Thank you for taking the time to read it, I really appreciate it especially since I read some of your wonderful work. You are an amazing writer <3

Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/30/2017 8:51:00 AM For me this is your best so far. Bravo! Login to Reply Laurice S. Date: 12/1/2017 8:46:00 AM Thank you so much <3

Faraz Ajmal Date: 11/30/2017 8:13:00 AM A very beautiful written poem, I really enjoyed reading it, seems like you ve recently started to write poems so your poetry skills are definately going to increase over time, just continue to write and yeah I ve a favour, I ve recently started to write poems and I also have many poems on similar topic( love), so I ll really appreciate if you could find time to read my poems and let me know how they are, good luck Login to Reply Laurice S. Date: 12/1/2017 8:46:00 AM Thank you! i'll definitely check your poems out <3

Lewis Raynes Date: 11/28/2017 4:32:00 PM Wow, to me, this starts so innocent and beautiful but quickly becomes excessive, you've shown how life can spiral out of control so quick. great writing :) Login to Reply Laurice S. Date: 12/1/2017 8:47:00 AM It did take a bad turn really quickly <3 thank you