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You were always on my mind

Why am I so lonely, Why didn't I share love and time? Why couldn't I make death wait longer? You were always on my mind. I would have shaped myself better, Controlled my stubbornness and drive, Listened to you, ignored conflicts, You were always on my mind. I would have reset my life's course, Repenting past mistakes, Heard your whispers of love so clear, You were always on my mind. Through days swiftly passing, You were always on my mind, In silent nights, your face appears, A phantom of regret. With tenderness, I'd hold you close, Cherish each fleeting breath, For every beat my heart has missed, You were always on my mind.

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Miranda Hawley

Date: 6/3/2024 6:49:00 PM

Thank you for this example of what you expect in your contest. When I was younger I might have written a poem like this after relationships ended with guys that I dated but did not marry. If I was to write something like that now days I'd change were into ARE and mean it about my loving husband. I am considering your contest.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 5/31/2024 8:05:00 PM

This is sad and romantic. It's too bad when disagreements pull people apart. Your poem is a poignant story of loss.

Crystol Woods

Date: 5/31/2024 5:25:00 PM

How beautiful... very tender and sweet. Xo

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 5/31/2024 3:42:00 PM

Very moving Jay, the one you love is always on one’s mind… Beryl

Constance La France

Date: 5/31/2024 8:59:00 AM

Jay, such an emotional and soulful write, and great example for your contest, hope I can write a poem worthy, hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/30/2024 4:40:00 PM

Oh wow. I see you are even doing a contest on this theme. So nice

Deb M

Date: 5/30/2024 1:47:00 PM

Oh that is just lovely Jay! Debx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/30/2024 12:56:00 PM

Very nice, Jay. Did you ever hear the country called You Were Always on My Mind? Your poem is lovely like Willie nelson's poem of the same title.

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 5/30/2024 10:40:00 AM

Hello Jay, A wonderful poem you created about a love you once had , now thinking of often. Enjoy your day my friend. /Darlene/

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 5/30/2024 10:37:00 AM

Hello Jay, I felt your heartfelt verses as they ache with longing and regret. The haunting refrain, "You were always on my mind," is like a solemn mantra. I love how through exquisite metaphor and imagery, you capture the timeless yearning to cherish loved ones while we can. Jay, this melancholic yet beautiful piece tugs at the heartstrings with its emotional honesty. Powerful work. - Blessings, Daniel

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/30/2024 9:44:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your lovely yet sad write. A wonderful ending... Have A Blessed Day Writing Away..........