You Took My Breath Away!
The style of this piece,
had me begging for more.
Your rhymes made me feel,
all of the wondrous lore.
The twists and the turns,
and that one murder scene.
Sent chills down my spine,
as the killing went unseen.
A metaphor or maybe two,
really made this lovely tale.
You took me for a ride,
on this misted ghostly trail.
I enjoyed the overall flow,
the way you caught my eye.
Words I would never use,
did often make me cry.
Silence in the ending line,
nothing too short of bliss.
The curtains fall on stage,
and the maiden gets a kiss.
Keep on writing fair poet,
share ideas with all ages.
And you will be remembered,
in time throughout your pages.
Copyright © Marcello Colasurdo | Year Posted 2010
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