Vijay Pandit Poet Quatrain

You Echoed My Voice

Look to the sky to witness morning glory
As rising vision writes an amorous story
Painting cosmic canvas delightfully spry
To witness morning glory, look to the sky

Listen to the birds for message they heard
As the horizon lit-up when emotions stirred
Blowing cheery winds chanting your words
For message they heard, listen to the birds 

Every day goes by without you by my side
Waiting to decide, I see you teary eyed
Trust the answer you have, don't ask why
Without you by my side, every day goes by 

Heeding my advice you echoed my voice
Leaning on destiny you made your choice
Trusting my friendship won't exact a price
You echoed my voice, heeding my advice 

June 20, 2018
Placed 1st: Late June 2018 standard contest by Brian Strand
NOTE:
This poem is a Swap Quatrain. This form was created by Lorraine M. Kanter.
Within the Swap Quatrain each stanza in the poem must be a quatrain (four lines) where the 
first line is reversed in the fourth line. In addition, line 2 must rhyme with line 1, and line 3 
must rhyme with line 4 and so on, BUT not repeat the same rhyming pattern on subsequent 
stanzas. Rhyming pattern: AABB, CCDD, and so on.

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Valsa George April 28, 2022 at 2:23 AM This, I guess is so difficult a form to compose. Still you have done your best to stick to the norms and the outcome is a marvel of a poem. Great Vijay !

Vladislav Raven October 28, 2018 at 5:31 PM Hi Vijay, another creative wonder from your pen. This did read like a winner and I see it was, belated congratulations once more Vijay. Another gentle song of love's grace my friend. It is an honour to call such a talented poet as yourself friend. It is a pleasure to read this excellent piece of poetry today. A fave. Have a wonderful Sunday. your friend always....Mike.

Besma Riabi Dziri June 29, 2018 at 12:03 PM A wonderful creative piece of art! A write cheering the beauty and glory of love! A great talent and a heart amazingly dipped in poetry! Thank you for sharing dear Vijay. Keep shining and stay blessed.

Susan Gentry June 23, 2018 at 9:51 PM Congratulations on your win! I really like this form. Worked well with your well-written poem. Vijay Pandit June 24, 2018 at 3:39 PM Thank you Susan.

Eve Roper June 21, 2018 at 9:45 PM Very nice, Vijay, a masterpiece and I love it Hugs Eve ~' * Vijay Pandit June 22, 2018 at 5:29 PM Thank you Eve.

Mystic Rose Rose June 21, 2018 at 8:50 PM This is very well done. The content deep and rich, the form splendid. I am glad I chose it as my last poem for the night. Vijay Pandit June 22, 2018 at 5:29 PM Thank you Pixie.

Harry Horsman June 21, 2018 at 4:17 PM A Worthy winner Vijay, congratulations. Vijay Pandit June 21, 2018 at 5:10 PM Thank you Harry..always appreciate your comments.

Roy Pett June 21, 2018 at 12:54 PM Congratulations on your well deserved win Vijay, absolutely brilliant swap quatrain. :)) Vijay Pandit June 21, 2018 at 2:18 PM Thank you Roy.

Charlie Smith June 21, 2018 at 10:52 AM Congratulations Vijay, on your mastery of this form, so very well done indeed... Vijay Pandit June 21, 2018 at 12:39 PM Thank you Charlie.

Demetrios Trifiatis June 21, 2018 at 8:03 AM Ignored the form but I do not ignore your masterful writing and captivating verses ! Impressively beautiful my friend, Vijay! No surprise your TOP placement! Vijay Pandit June 21, 2018 at 12:39 PM Thank you Demetrios...always happy to read your kind feedback.

Mike Gentile June 21, 2018 at 7:40 AM Congrats on your top placement, Vijay !!! Vijay Pandit June 21, 2018 at 12:38 PM Thank you Mike.

Line Gauthier June 21, 2018 at 7:11 AM Congrats on your top win, Vijay. Well done. Vijay Pandit June 21, 2018 at 12:38 PM Thank you Line.

Heidi Sands June 21, 2018 at 6:33 AM I agree this is an interesting form and you have done well with it. Very nice Vijay :) Vijay Pandit June 21, 2018 at 12:38 PM Thank you Heidi.

Silent One June 21, 2018 at 5:34 AM Interesting form, I had never seen one of these before.... You do rhyme so well Vijay.. Vijay Pandit June 21, 2018 at 6:31 AM I wrote a couple while you were away for a month or so. I love this form..many thanks Silent One.

Kudzai Mhangwa June 21, 2018 at 5:09 AM Nicely done my friend Vijay! Vijay Pandit June 21, 2018 at 5:34 AM Appreciate your visit and comments Kudzai..many thanks.

Janice Canerdy June 20, 2018 at 8:08 PM Very skillfully-written and moving, Vijay! Janice Vijay Pandit June 21, 2018 at 5:33 AM Appreciate your visit and comments, always. Many thanks, Janice.

Andrea Dietrich June 20, 2018 at 6:26 PM Very nice swap quatrian, Vijay. I adore this invention of Ms. Kantor. A long time ago I met her online! I 've used this form several times and even won a very nice award for one of my swap quatrains. keep up with them. They suit you! Vijay Pandit June 21, 2018 at 5:32 AM Fascinating that you met her, Andrea. With just a simple twist she made a quatrain an adorable form. Many thanks for the kind words..and certainly will follow your advice.

Gary Bateman June 20, 2018 at 5:37 PM Hello Vijay, I've written Quatrain poems before, but never a "Swap Quatrain." This is a marvelously constructed and articulated write for sure with perfect balance and symmetry throughout the stanzas and verses. A very interesting theme as well. Superb Work!! Best Wishes, Gary (P.S. Thanks for your recent comment on my new political verse poem, "The Little Children are Crying.") Best Always, Gary Vijay Pandit June 21, 2018 at 5:29 AM Appreciate your feedback Gary..always happy to read kind words. Your poem on children being separated from parents was grand in its sentiments and delivered the message very well.