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You Echoed My Voice

Look to the sky to witness morning glory
As rising vision writes an amorous story
Painting cosmic canvas delightfully spry
To witness morning glory, look to the sky

Listen to the birds for message they heard
As the horizon lit-up when emotions stirred
Blowing cheery winds chanting your words
For message they heard, listen to the birds 

Every day goes by without you by my side
Waiting to decide, I see you teary eyed
Trust the answer you have, don't ask why
Without you by my side, every day goes by 

Heeding my advice you echoed my voice
Leaning on destiny you made your choice
Trusting my friendship won't exact a price
You echoed my voice, heeding my advice 

June 20, 2018
Placed 1st: Late June 2018 standard contest by Brian Strand
NOTE:
This poem is a Swap Quatrain. This form was created by Lorraine M. Kanter.
Within the Swap Quatrain each stanza in the poem must be a quatrain (four lines) where the 
first line is reversed in the fourth line. In addition, line 2 must rhyme with line 1, and line 3 
must rhyme with line 4 and so on, BUT not repeat the same rhyming pattern on subsequent 
stanzas. Rhyming pattern: AABB, CCDD, and so on.

Copyright © Vijay Pandit | Year Posted 2018

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Valsa George Date: 4/28/2022 2:23:00 AM This, I guess is so difficult a form to compose. Still you have done your best to stick to the norms and the outcome is a marvel of a poem. Great Vijay ! Login to Reply

Vladislav Raven Date: 10/28/2018 5:31:00 PM Hi Vijay, another creative wonder from your pen. This did read like a winner and I see it was, belated congratulations once more Vijay. Another gentle song of love's grace my friend. It is an honour to call such a talented poet as yourself friend. It is a pleasure to read this excellent piece of poetry today. A fave. Have a wonderful Sunday. your friend always....Mike. Login to Reply

Besma Riabi Dziri Date: 6/29/2018 12:03:00 PM A wonderful creative piece of art! A write cheering the beauty and glory of love! A great talent and a heart amazingly dipped in poetry! Thank you for sharing dear Vijay. Keep shining and stay blessed. Login to Reply

Susan Gentry Date: 6/23/2018 9:51:00 PM Congratulations on your win! I really like this form. Worked well with your well-written poem. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/24/2018 3:39:00 PM Thank you Susan.

Eve Roper Date: 6/21/2018 9:45:00 PM Very nice, Vijay, a masterpiece and I love it Hugs Eve ~' * Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/22/2018 5:29:00 PM Thank you Eve.

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 6/21/2018 8:50:00 PM This is very well done. The content deep and rich, the form splendid. I am glad I chose it as my last poem for the night. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/22/2018 5:29:00 PM Thank you Pixie.

Harry Horsman Date: 6/21/2018 4:17:00 PM A Worthy winner Vijay, congratulations. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2018 5:10:00 PM Thank you Harry..always appreciate your comments.

Roy Pett Date: 6/21/2018 12:54:00 PM Congratulations on your well deserved win Vijay, absolutely brilliant swap quatrain. :)) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2018 2:18:00 PM Thank you Roy.

Charlie Smith Date: 6/21/2018 10:52:00 AM Congratulations Vijay, on your mastery of this form, so very well done indeed... Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2018 12:39:00 PM Thank you Charlie.

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 6/21/2018 8:03:00 AM Ignored the form but I do not ignore your masterful writing and captivating verses ! Impressively beautiful my friend, Vijay! No surprise your TOP placement! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2018 12:39:00 PM Thank you Demetrios...always happy to read your kind feedback.

Mike Gentile Date: 6/21/2018 7:40:00 AM Congrats on your top placement, Vijay !!! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2018 12:38:00 PM Thank you Mike.

Line Gauthier Date: 6/21/2018 7:11:00 AM Congrats on your top win, Vijay. Well done. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2018 12:38:00 PM Thank you Line.

Heidi Sands Date: 6/21/2018 6:33:00 AM I agree this is an interesting form and you have done well with it. Very nice Vijay :) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2018 12:38:00 PM Thank you Heidi.

Silent One Date: 6/21/2018 5:34:00 AM Interesting form, I had never seen one of these before.... You do rhyme so well Vijay.. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2018 6:31:00 AM I wrote a couple while you were away for a month or so. I love this form..many thanks Silent One.

Kudzai Mhangwa Date: 6/21/2018 5:09:00 AM Nicely done my friend Vijay! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2018 5:34:00 AM Appreciate your visit and comments Kudzai..many thanks.

Janice Canerdy Date: 6/20/2018 8:08:00 PM Very skillfully-written and moving, Vijay! Janice Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2018 5:33:00 AM Appreciate your visit and comments, always. Many thanks, Janice.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/20/2018 6:26:00 PM Very nice swap quatrian, Vijay. I adore this invention of Ms. Kantor. A long time ago I met her online! I 've used this form several times and even won a very nice award for one of my swap quatrains. keep up with them. They suit you! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2018 5:32:00 AM Fascinating that you met her, Andrea. With just a simple twist she made a quatrain an adorable form. Many thanks for the kind words..and certainly will follow your advice.

Gary Bateman Date: 6/20/2018 5:37:00 PM Hello Vijay, I've written Quatrain poems before, but never a "Swap Quatrain." This is a marvelously constructed and articulated write for sure with perfect balance and symmetry throughout the stanzas and verses. A very interesting theme as well. Superb Work!! Best Wishes, Gary (P.S. Thanks for your recent comment on my new political verse poem, "The Little Children are Crying.") Best Always, Gary Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2018 5:29:00 AM Appreciate your feedback Gary..always happy to read kind words. Your poem on children being separated from parents was grand in its sentiments and delivered the message very well.