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Yellow Submarine

I took a dive
And saw the fish. 
A star fish too…
I made a wish.

An octopus,
A scuttling crab,
The ocean’s floor
Is never drab.

As mermaids sing
And dolphins play,
I wish this was
My holiday.

A treasure chest,
A sunken ship.
Now time to leave -
But what a trip.

I can’t believe
The things I’ve seen;
I wish I owned
This submarine.

For Heather’s Beatlemania contest

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Danesh Morgan

Date: 8/22/2013 6:38:00 PM

Congrats on you win, but why yellow! lols

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/16/2013 12:19:00 PM

Jack.. Congratulations on your win :-) PD

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 3/15/2013 1:27:00 PM

Many congrats Jack, sorry its a wee bit late xx

Audrey Haick

Date: 3/13/2013 9:13:00 PM

Congratulations on a great win, JMH! Well done and I'm not surprised, my friend. Always, Annalise

Robert Heemstra

Date: 3/13/2013 4:32:00 PM

Love that song congrats on your win! Nicely done.

David Williams

Date: 3/13/2013 3:34:00 PM

jack congrats on your win, good fun poem this ...David

Carrie Richards

Date: 3/13/2013 2:34:00 PM

This makes me want to sing it to my grandkids!!! What a cute twist on a favorite Beatle song!!

Heather Ober

Date: 3/13/2013 12:50:00 PM

Jack, "Yellow Submarine" was the first song I ever heard (and I mean ever! I was probably two or three years old.) You maintained the innocent essence of the original and turned it into a fun, unique piece. Great job! Congrats on your win in my contest :)

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 3/7/2013 9:53:00 AM

You find lot's of treasures in the deep, I think a mermaid is waiting for you!

Audrey Haick

Date: 3/6/2013 5:02:00 PM

You are so good! A definite winner in my book, my friend Jack... Best wishes for the Winners' List! Always, Annalise

Tim Ryerson

Date: 3/6/2013 2:55:00 PM

Well Jack, I had several Beatles songs in mind for this contest including 'Yellow Submarine' but I think I shall certainly mark THAT off my list...Perfect! - Tim

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 3/2/2013 3:43:00 PM

Awesome write jack, good luck in the contest! Hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/1/2013 7:47:00 AM

Write MORE!!! and thanks for taking time to see so many of my poem, dear friend.

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 2/26/2013 9:32:00 AM

A beauty to read Jack, sounds like an experience on the reef. I only get to see it on the computer but your way is the best. Wonderful write! LOve, Lizzie

Constance La France

Date: 2/26/2013 6:11:00 AM

Jack, it is just fabulous, the flow is like a wave, I love it, best of luck in the contest, Constance

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 2/25/2013 12:46:00 PM

This made me chuckle and what a wonderful ride that would be. Hard to believe we saw the Beatles make their debut in the sixties. Look at the music they made. CLASSIC. Awesome write. love phyl

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/24/2013 12:52:00 AM

What a cute and clever way to do the Beatlemania contest. I really enjoyed this one a lot, Jack. Wanted to thank you for taking the time to catch up with so many of my recent poems. I know some were a bit long. Yours are always so succinct, just like i love poetry to be.

Debbie Duncan

Date: 2/23/2013 10:20:00 PM

Awesome as Donna says ;}

Donna Jones

Date: 2/23/2013 8:01:00 PM

AWESOME!

Russell Sivey

Date: 2/23/2013 7:16:00 PM

Wow, this one really impressed me my friend, I really enjoyed reading this incredible poem this evening! You have written a masterful piece, grand showmanship here, beautifully portrayed, Great Work!!

Tim Ryerson

Date: 2/23/2013 4:48:00 PM

How dare you Jack!...I was gonna do that one!...However, 'Penny Lane' is in my ear and in my eye (very strange!) Good stuff my friend - Tim

Terry O'Leary

Date: 2/23/2013 4:18:00 PM

Oh, this fits perfectl, Jack... good luck in the contest... Terry