Jack Horne Poet Quatrain

Yellow Submarine

I took a dive
And saw the fish. 
A star fish too…
I made a wish.

An octopus,
A scuttling crab,
The ocean’s floor
Is never drab.

As mermaids sing
And dolphins play,
I wish this was
My holiday.

A treasure chest,
A sunken ship.
Now time to leave -
But what a trip.

I can’t believe
The things I’ve seen;
I wish I owned
This submarine.

For Heather’s Beatlemania contest

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Danesh Morgan August 22, 2013 at 6:38 PM Congrats on you win, but why yellow! lols

Poet Destroyer A March 16, 2013 at 12:19 PM Jack.. Congratulations on your win :-) PD

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 15, 2013 at 1:27 PM Many congrats Jack, sorry its a wee bit late xx

Audrey Haick March 13, 2013 at 9:13 PM Congratulations on a great win, JMH! Well done and I'm not surprised, my friend. Always, Annalise

Robert Heemstra March 13, 2013 at 4:32 PM Love that song congrats on your win! Nicely done.

David Williams March 13, 2013 at 3:34 PM jack congrats on your win, good fun poem this ...David

Carrie Richards March 13, 2013 at 2:34 PM This makes me want to sing it to my grandkids!!! What a cute twist on a favorite Beatle song!!

Heather Ober March 13, 2013 at 12:50 PM Jack, "Yellow Submarine" was the first song I ever heard (and I mean ever! I was probably two or three years old.) You maintained the innocent essence of the original and turned it into a fun, unique piece. Great job! Congrats on your win in my contest :)

Elizabeth Wesley March 7, 2013 at 9:53 AM You find lot's of treasures in the deep, I think a mermaid is waiting for you!

Audrey Haick March 6, 2013 at 5:02 PM You are so good! A definite winner in my book, my friend Jack... Best wishes for the Winners' List! Always, Annalise

Tim Ryerson March 6, 2013 at 2:55 PM Well Jack, I had several Beatles songs in mind for this contest including 'Yellow Submarine' but I think I shall certainly mark THAT off my list...Perfect! - Tim

Cecilia Macfarlane March 2, 2013 at 3:43 PM Awesome write jack, good luck in the contest! Hugs

Andrea Dietrich March 1, 2013 at 7:47 AM Write MORE!!! and thanks for taking time to see so many of my poem, dear friend.

Elizabeth Wesley February 26, 2013 at 9:32 AM A beauty to read Jack, sounds like an experience on the reef. I only get to see it on the computer but your way is the best. Wonderful write! LOve, Lizzie

Constance La France February 26, 2013 at 6:11 AM Jack, it is just fabulous, the flow is like a wave, I love it, best of luck in the contest, Constance

Phyllis Babcock February 25, 2013 at 12:46 PM This made me chuckle and what a wonderful ride that would be. Hard to believe we saw the Beatles make their debut in the sixties. Look at the music they made. CLASSIC. Awesome write. love phyl

Andrea Dietrich February 24, 2013 at 12:52 AM What a cute and clever way to do the Beatlemania contest. I really enjoyed this one a lot, Jack. Wanted to thank you for taking the time to catch up with so many of my recent poems. I know some were a bit long. Yours are always so succinct, just like i love poetry to be.

Debbie Duncan February 23, 2013 at 10:20 PM Awesome as Donna says ;}

Donna Jones February 23, 2013 at 8:01 PM AWESOME!

Russell Sivey February 23, 2013 at 7:16 PM Wow, this one really impressed me my friend, I really enjoyed reading this incredible poem this evening! You have written a masterful piece, grand showmanship here, beautifully portrayed, Great Work!!

Tim Ryerson February 23, 2013 at 4:48 PM How dare you Jack!...I was gonna do that one!...However, 'Penny Lane' is in my ear and in my eye (very strange!) Good stuff my friend - Tim

Terry O'Leary February 23, 2013 at 4:18 PM Oh, this fits perfectl, Jack... good luck in the contest... Terry

Sara Kendrick February 23, 2013 at 3:50 PM I remember that song..Enjoyed reading this one today..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for the visits..Very uplifting to have you stop by..Sara

Joe Maverick February 23, 2013 at 3:36 PM Aah yes Jack, that's what we all could do with a submarine to conjure just like this.

Barbara Gorelick February 23, 2013 at 2:15 PM This is just adorable..and this is one of my favorite Beatle tunes. I think children would love this..BG

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