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Wrong-Sized Shoes - a Pantoum

You don’t really know me, Lover.
You, shoving wrong-sized shoes on my feet,
Then you say, “Run!  Run with me!”
Those shoes hurt!  Too small.  Too large.  Blisters!
You shoving wrong.  Sized shoes on my feet.
I’m not your mother, with her child favorites or worse betrayals.
Those shoes hurt too!  Small to large blisters!
Or your past women who cheated you of your trust, broke your love into a million shards of glass.
You shoving wrong sized shoes on. My feet!
Then, you say: "Run!"  Run with me?
I’m not your mother (with her child favorites.) Or worse betrayals?
You shoving wrong-sized shoes on.  MY feet!!

4-2-16

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Poet Destroyer A Date: 4/20/2016 2:44:00 AM Elisa Christensen, nicely done. Glad to read your poem today. XoX *Linda*" Login to Reply Elisa Christensen Date: 4/25/2016 8:03:00 PM Thank you so much Linda!! ??????

Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2016 2:14:00 PM lovely but sad pantoum Elisa - You have been with him for 2 1/2 years ... I hope his behaviour doesn't drive you apart in the end relationships are based on trust :-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Elisa Christensen Date: 4/25/2016 8:06:00 PM Hi Jan, We both ended up with trust issues, unfortunately. It almost recently destroyed us, but our love pulled us through. We are really working together hard on it. He's just so phenomenal in so many ways that I've been willing to withstand the distrust. I'll post another one of my favorites now, titled, "Thrilled" that I wrote about him. And maybe another favorite too. Thank you so much for the personal feedback! Elisa

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores Date: 4/3/2016 6:38:00 AM Excellent pantoum Elisa. Welcome to Poetry Soup. Login to Reply Elisa Christensen Date: 4/25/2016 8:07:00 PM Nayda,, Thank you so much! Your feedback means a lot to me! Elisa

Poet Destroyer A Date: 4/3/2016 1:28:00 AM Elisa, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@ Login to Reply Elisa Christensen Date: 4/25/2016 8:08:00 PM Linda, Thank you so much! I was just so delighted with the feedback people took the time to submit and that my poem was featured on the front page! I'll submit more. I love Poetey Soup! Elisa