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Worlds of Ice

Winter's whimsical nature comes with
     fickle freeze, cold pervading every fibre
How I remember you, red hot
     against the white snow
Smoking volcano
     against permafrost desolation
How your aura lingers in my brain
     fleeting perfume, breeze of ozone 
The sweet sweaty scent of long nights
     leathery lines grafted in my skin
The fragile steps we took, tension
     of our vulnerability in closeness
Sweet brokenness, tender hurt...
     Worlds of ice can not find my
Duvet of snowflakes, simulation of
     soft warm goose down
Mirroring remnants of our souls
     that sleep in dreamless reminiscence


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May 17, 2017 
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Maria Williams Date: 5/24/2017 7:24:00 AM I keep telling you, you are a word master, a title I dont give lightly to anyone. You are truly exceptional my young friend. A7++ and a fav.... Maria Login to Reply Darren White Date: 5/24/2017 7:28:00 AM That really warms my heart my dear friend, thank you SO much.

J-Mag Guthrie Date: 5/22/2017 5:31:00 AM "abyss" is not the word you want--it is emptiness--maybe you mean tundra? I'd also entitle it something else--that doesn't give it away at the beginning. (That's because I think it works better as a delicious discovery ... I think an innocuous title dealing with winter or snow would tempt the reader without giving away the substance.) There is some muddle in the midlines about "Worlds of ice can not detect me" I'm not sure "detect" is the word you want--maybe "find". Login to Reply Darren White Date: 5/22/2017 5:46:00 AM Hmmm, aren't there any abysses with permafrost? Guess not then, I wanted it opposite the vulcan-mountain... I'll opt for "desolation" instead. You are right about that one sentence Worlds of Ice and so on. I need something different. As well as a title, yes. Thanks!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 5/20/2017 6:58:00 PM seven xomo :) Login to Reply Darren White Date: 5/20/2017 11:50:00 PM Thanks ma mo :)

Funom Makama Date: 5/20/2017 12:47:00 PM This is excellent, precised and highly intellectual. A huge 7 for me. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 5/20/2017 12:59:00 PM Thank you Funom, for your wonderful compliment, and for the 7 :)

Gregory Richard Barden Date: 5/18/2017 4:00:00 PM Oh, this is exquisite, my friend ... libidinous and sultry, yet the icy surroundings and the contrast it creates INCREASES the sensuality of it ... I adore that sort of ambiguity, especially where "physicality" is concerned, (I did similar with "2 Read U", but in relation to "reading" another with ones hands). This is, for me, my favorite genre, and one that you have an extraordinary grasp of. This is a seven and a fav, for sure - love, LOVE it! :-) Login to Reply Darren White Date: 5/18/2017 10:12:00 PM Woot Greg, thanks! It is exactly that contrast, that ambiguity in sesnses and surroundings I love too, and I know you do too. Not everyone loves that looming darkness in poetry, but I love to play around with it. Wonderful, thanks for the 7 and the fav my friend :) Steal the picture if you like, I stole it too ;) Gregory Richard Barden Date: 5/18/2017 4:05:00 PM And that photo is gorgeous! Must steal! ;-)

Chris Green Date: 5/18/2017 3:36:00 PM WOW!!!! What an amazing and affecting piece of writing my friend. You truly are a master of words and phrases, you have painted the most wonderful and vibrant picture here using very little color at all. This I amazing Darren. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 5/18/2017 10:08:00 PM Thanks so much my friend, that you say this to me makes me so proud :) It's so important to me to know your opinion on my poems

Anne-Marie Coreggia Date: 5/18/2017 8:47:00 AM What an exquisite poem, and I love the picture you chose. It provides a perfect backdrop for your poem with the soft, duvet like snow falling onto a dense, almost impenetrable forest. Opposites attract, but sometimes they cannot stay together:) Amitiés Login to Reply Darren White Date: 5/18/2017 10:06:00 PM Indeed Anne-Marie, those opposites stand out indeed. Thank you for liking my poem.

Sara Ella Date: 5/17/2017 8:44:00 PM A sweet and sorrowful memory that you have painted in beautiful, artful, heartfelt images. <3 Login to Reply Darren White Date: 5/17/2017 10:43:00 PM Thanks Sara, it's a little abstract, don't you think?

Emile Pinet Date: 5/17/2017 3:31:00 PM This is a hauntingly beautiful poem, full of metaphors and painted imagery. You paint the scene with descriptive words, that bring the essence of your experience into our conscious mind, and we too can walk in your shoes for a short time and feel what you feel. Well written. Emile. #7 Login to Reply Darren White Date: 5/17/2017 10:42:00 PM Thank you Emile, you always have such wonderul comments for me :)

Tim Smith Date: 5/17/2017 8:46:00 AM This is great my friend. So many great lines. Cherish that aura lingering...a definite fav Login to Reply Darren White Date: 5/17/2017 9:04:00 AM Thanks Tim, my friend! Also for the fav :)