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Words - Alouette

WORDS - ALOUETTE Nightmares in my skin; Scourging deep within. Blood and bones sizzling abreast... Aged tired nerves plead from words carving bleed to screams of cruel arrest. Head like tomb stillness chaining rock stiffness. Iron hurt span rumbling din. To endure, my gong, stopping a torch song. Hence, be far in any sin. ______________________________ CONTEST NAME: SCREWED SPONSOR: ROB CARMACK PLACED 3RD (c)O.E. Guillermo 10:52pm September 05, 2014

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Jan Allison

Date: 3/24/2015 2:56:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 3/30/2015 9:09:00 AM

thank you Jan.. :) hugs back.. :D

Paul Callus

Date: 3/24/2015 9:01:00 AM

Congratulations, Olive_eloi!!! Glad that this poem at last received the recognition that it deserves. Hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 3/30/2015 9:08:00 AM

im so glad it did.. :)! weeee

Rob Carmack

Date: 3/24/2015 1:02:00 AM

:) I love this poem. Thank you for giving me the chance to see it.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 3/30/2015 9:06:00 AM

thank you for placing this contest.. :)! i so appreciate it. :) weeeeeeee :)!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/9/2014 10:52:00 PM

Superb, this is amazing!!!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/10/2014 7:12:00 AM

Thanks much Arthur..:) GBU

Keith Merritt

Date: 9/9/2014 12:51:00 AM

This poem could be interpreted in so many ways dependent upon context. I see fear and pain, for sure, but on a deeper level I hear a cry for help. Stopping a torch song is a nice metaphor, and the inclusion of a gong crosses many cultural references in my mind. If this is indeed for a contest, you will give the judge something to wrap his or her mind around ! :) I send my love and adoration, Olive !

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/9/2014 7:23:00 AM

Thank you Keith for the generous remarks.. :) I appreciate it.. :) I hope I painted one good picture for hurtful words.. :)

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/8/2014 5:48:00 PM

excellent write love how you drew this

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/9/2014 7:21:00 AM

Thank you for dropping by :) GBU

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/9/2014 7:20:00 AM

Thank you for dropping by :) GBU

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 9/8/2014 5:41:00 PM

Hi Olive; This is very nice. Stopping a torch song. I like that. Is this for a contest? Have a blessed day... Lucilla

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/9/2014 12:37:00 AM

thanks much lovely Lucy.. :) hug hugs ..:) yes it is.. :) i hope i gave justice to my chosen topic..:D

Justin Bordner

Date: 9/7/2014 1:26:00 PM

This is poetry that really squeezes the mind good. Each line is a rich mystery, candied with such novel expressions...this is a treat Olive...J.A.B.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/8/2014 1:05:00 AM

Thanks much Justin..:) I appreciate your generous comment..:)

James Fraser

Date: 9/7/2014 11:20:00 AM

Hauntingly powerful & darkly deep Olive, loved it, James :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/8/2014 1:04:00 AM

Powerful words can either be sweet dreams or worst nightmares... To which in my poem I chose the bad careless spoken words...

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/8/2014 1:02:00 AM

All of us one way or another have different unique ways to accept such words.. Some choose to speak up but some chooses to maintain calmness and quietness to prevent any untoward consequences though/yet within isn't...

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/8/2014 1:00:00 AM

Thanks much James.. What I hope that readers will understand from this is that how words can greatly effect any individual... As some words hurts that some pleads to not hear it and more with such intense utterance some even have arrest as in extreme emotion

Paul Callus

Date: 9/5/2014 5:09:00 PM

Lovely alouettes, Olive_eloi, though I think the first one tips the scales. If I were to go for perfection, first 2 lines of 2nd stanza could rhyme better. gl in contest. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/7/2014 9:26:00 AM

Thanks Paul :) GBU

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/7/2014 9:25:00 AM

You got me there those first 2parts and last line of my second stanza... That took me,any times too think what words must I use...

Paul Callus
Date: 9/7/2014 9:03:00 AM

It is better now:)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/7/2014 4:00:00 AM

thanks much Paul.. :D but not much imagery huh to me also.. :D

Paul Callus
Date: 9/6/2014 5:13:00 AM

Yes, the imagery should please her; mine is more humor than imagery, so I'm not expecting any special result:)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/5/2014 7:35:00 PM

Aha. I really don't know how I'll attack my chosen topic Paul.. I hope I gave Andrea a good imagery..