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Words - Alouette

WORDS - ALOUETTE

Nightmares in my skin;
Scourging deep within.
Blood and bones sizzling abreast...
Aged tired nerves plead
from words carving bleed
to screams of cruel arrest.

Head like tomb stillness
chaining rock stiffness.
Iron hurt span rumbling din.
To endure, my gong,
stopping a torch song.
Hence, be far in any sin.
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CONTEST NAME: SCREWED
SPONSOR: ROB CARMACK
PLACED 3RD

(c)O.E. Guillermo
10:52pm
September 05, 2014

Copyright © Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser | Year Posted 2014

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Jan Allison Date: 3/24/2015 2:56:00 PM Dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs jan xx Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 3/30/2015 9:09:00 AM thank you Jan.. :) hugs back.. :D

Paul Callus Date: 3/24/2015 9:01:00 AM Congratulations, Olive_eloi!!! Glad that this poem at last received the recognition that it deserves. Hugs // paul Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 3/30/2015 9:08:00 AM im so glad it did.. :)! weeee

Rob Carmack Date: 3/24/2015 1:02:00 AM :) I love this poem. Thank you for giving me the chance to see it. Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 3/30/2015 9:06:00 AM thank you for placing this contest.. :)! i so appreciate it. :) weeeeeeee :)!

Arthur Vaso Date: 9/9/2014 10:52:00 PM Superb, this is amazing!!! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/10/2014 7:12:00 AM Thanks much Arthur..:) GBU

Keith Merritt Date: 9/9/2014 12:51:00 AM This poem could be interpreted in so many ways dependent upon context. I see fear and pain, for sure, but on a deeper level I hear a cry for help. Stopping a torch song is a nice metaphor, and the inclusion of a gong crosses many cultural references in my mind. If this is indeed for a contest, you will give the judge something to wrap his or her mind around ! :) I send my love and adoration, Olive ! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/9/2014 7:23:00 AM Thank you Keith for the generous remarks.. :) I appreciate it.. :) I hope I painted one good picture for hurtful words.. :)

Liam Mcdaid Date: 9/8/2014 5:48:00 PM excellent write love how you drew this Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/9/2014 7:21:00 AM Thank you for dropping by :) GBU Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/9/2014 7:20:00 AM Thank you for dropping by :) GBU

Lucilla Carrillo Date: 9/8/2014 5:41:00 PM Hi Olive; This is very nice. Stopping a torch song. I like that. Is this for a contest? Have a blessed day... Lucilla Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/9/2014 12:37:00 AM thanks much lovely Lucy.. :) hug hugs ..:) yes it is.. :) i hope i gave justice to my chosen topic..:D

Justin Bordner Date: 9/7/2014 1:26:00 PM This is poetry that really squeezes the mind good. Each line is a rich mystery, candied with such novel expressions...this is a treat Olive...J.A.B. Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/8/2014 1:05:00 AM Thanks much Justin..:) I appreciate your generous comment..:)

James Fraser Date: 9/7/2014 11:20:00 AM Hauntingly powerful & darkly deep Olive, loved it, James :) Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/8/2014 1:04:00 AM Powerful words can either be sweet dreams or worst nightmares... To which in my poem I chose the bad careless spoken words... Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/8/2014 1:02:00 AM All of us one way or another have different unique ways to accept such words.. Some choose to speak up but some chooses to maintain calmness and quietness to prevent any untoward consequences though/yet within isn't... Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/8/2014 1:00:00 AM Thanks much James.. What I hope that readers will understand from this is that how words can greatly effect any individual... As some words hurts that some pleads to not hear it and more with such intense utterance some even have arrest as in extreme emotion

Paul Callus Date: 9/5/2014 5:09:00 PM Lovely alouettes, Olive_eloi, though I think the first one tips the scales. If I were to go for perfection, first 2 lines of 2nd stanza could rhyme better. gl in contest. // paul Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/7/2014 9:26:00 AM Thanks Paul :) GBU Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/7/2014 9:25:00 AM You got me there those first 2parts and last line of my second stanza... That took me,any times too think what words must I use... Paul Callus Date: 9/7/2014 9:03:00 AM It is better now:) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/7/2014 4:00:00 AM thanks much Paul.. :D but not much imagery huh to me also.. :D Paul Callus Date: 9/6/2014 5:13:00 AM Yes, the imagery should please her; mine is more humor than imagery, so I'm not expecting any special result:) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/5/2014 7:35:00 PM Aha. I really don't know how I'll attack my chosen topic Paul.. I hope I gave Andrea a good imagery..

Jan Allison Date: 9/5/2014 1:20:00 PM Very deep and powerful Nette. Good luck. Hugs Jan xxx Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/7/2014 3:59:00 AM its okei Jan.. :D hug and hugs Jan Allison Date: 9/5/2014 7:49:00 PM OOOPPPs i am so sorry Olive:-( many apologies:-( forgive me for my error :-( Hugs Jan xxx Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/5/2014 7:46:00 PM Thanks much Jan but am olive..:) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/5/2014 7:43:00 PM It olive jan ..:) thanks much GBU

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 9/5/2014 12:12:00 PM Another beauty Olive! Good luck my dear! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/5/2014 7:36:00 PM Thanks much Dr. Upma :) appreciate your beautiful remark..:)

Poet Tacito Date: 9/5/2014 10:06:00 AM Powerful & sharply detailed. Intriguing last line. Nice work! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/5/2014 7:35:00 PM Thanks much Drake..:) appreciate this..:)