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Wondrously Surprised

My folks said I have a gold butterfly, That lives within till the day I die To keep me safe from all adventures made; And guide my walkways as these fingers prayed. But while I grew in the movement of time My paths escaped me like splatters of grime, For this heart that endured a trail of cares Became torn with seasons’ weight of repairs. Across the glass pane, hues bathed on the mound Cocooned in her nest , a gold monarch crowned … Though feeling low from life's dreams unaddressed I wondered if she came , an omen blessed. My mouth froze, O this vision of surprise A pageant of twinkling gold butterflies! ------------------ 9/11/2017 Silent One’s Contest: Poems that paint a picture

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Date: 9/13/2017 7:55:00 PM
Congratulations Nette on your win with this excellent poem!
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Date: 9/13/2017 9:17:00 AM
Nette, CONGRATULATIONS on your placement with this wonderful and creative write
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Date: 9/13/2017 6:58:00 AM
Congrats nette!
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Date: 9/13/2017 6:32:00 AM
Interesting take on the contest Nette.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 9/12/2017 11:59:00 AM
Your comments box is open, Nette, so we can post... may a glitch in the net someplace. Hugs
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Date: 9/11/2017 6:15:00 AM
This is a professional poem Nette. Have you published it? I really liked it. May I ask, how come is this a Couplet and not a Sonnet? I get confused with all the forms. Lovely. Emma:)
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Date: 9/11/2017 5:03:00 AM
Wow, nette, another one of your masterful writes my friend! You may want to check the syllable count on line 2 (I count 9, you can use until for till)! I wish I could write such amazing lines as you do! You create such imagery within each line, and you masterfully produce a brilliant poem almost every time! I surely loved reading this delightful piece this morning, what a gorgeous poem, Great Work!!
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Date: 9/10/2017 6:56:00 PM
A gorgeous write Nette! Love the imagery. Good luck :)
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Date: 9/10/2017 5:45:00 PM
When signs come, good luck is on its way. I love happy surprises and this marvelous work!
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Date: 9/10/2017 5:16:00 PM
Imagery of is wonderful, Nette , enjoyed reading . Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 9/10/2017 5:13:00 PM
Incredible build-up of a poem's message. I would be pleasantly shocked as well.
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Date: 9/10/2017 4:04:00 PM
A very creative interpretation..lovely poem..well written as always, nette!
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