Wondrously Surprised

My folks said I have a gold butterfly,
That lives within  till the day I die
To  keep me safe from all adventures made;
And guide my walkways as these fingers prayed.

But while I grew in the movement of time
My paths escaped me  like splatters of grime,
For this heart that endured a trail of cares
Became torn with seasons’ weight of repairs.

Across the glass pane, hues  bathed on the mound
Cocooned in her nest , a gold monarch crowned …
Though feeling low from life's dreams unaddressed
I wondered if she came , an omen blessed.

My mouth froze, O  this  vision of surprise
A pageant of twinkling gold butterflies!


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9/11/2017
Silent One’s Contest: Poems that paint a picture
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Ashley Avatar
September 13, 2017 at 7:55 PM
Congratulations Nette on your win with this excellent poem!
La France Avatar
September 13, 2017 at 9:17 AM
Nette, CONGRATULATIONS on your placement with this wonderful and creative write
Pandit Avatar
September 13, 2017 at 6:58 AM
Congrats nette!
One Avatar
September 13, 2017 at 6:32 AM
Interesting take on the contest Nette.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
Roper Avatar
September 12, 2017 at 11:59 AM
Your comments box is open, Nette, so we can post... may a glitch in the net someplace. Hugs
Sivey Avatar
September 11, 2017 at 6:15 AM
This is a professional poem Nette. Have you published it? I really liked it. May I ask, how come is this a Couplet and not a Sonnet? I get confused with all the forms. Lovely. Emma:)
Sivey Avatar
September 11, 2017 at 5:03 AM
Wow, nette, another one of your masterful writes my friend! You may want to check the syllable count on line 2 (I count 9, you can use until for till)! I wish I could write such amazing lines as you do! You create such imagery within each line, and you masterfully produce a brilliant poem almost every time! I surely loved reading this delightful piece this morning, what a gorgeous poem, Great Work!!
Ashley Avatar
September 10, 2017 at 6:56 PM
A gorgeous write Nette! Love the imagery. Good luck :)
Marty Avatar
September 10, 2017 at 5:45 PM
When signs come, good luck is on its way. I love happy surprises and this marvelous work!
Roper Avatar
September 10, 2017 at 5:16 PM
Imagery of is wonderful, Nette , enjoyed reading . Hugs Eve ~`*
Ongado Avatar
September 10, 2017 at 5:13 PM
Incredible build-up of a poem's message. I would be pleasantly shocked as well.
Pandit Avatar
September 10, 2017 at 4:04 PM
A very creative interpretation..lovely poem..well written as always, nette!
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