David Kavanagh Poet Tanka

::Wonderstruck::

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                an all new design 
       as fluffy bumps become seen 
            how snowflakes collide 
          morphing into soft pillows
      and a child in bed dares dream



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David Kavanagh 
11/16/22

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FJ Thomas December 19, 2022 at 4:26 PM Well, being from the deep south, I can't say I have had the opportunity of a snow driven dream; but I can hope! Lol hello David. David Kavanagh December 20, 2022 at 1:09 AM We don’t see too much of the stuff here in Dublin either FJ, but never stopped me dreaming of a whiteout as a kid, still the dream came true on occasion, cheers David

Christopher Flaherty November 20, 2022 at 1:08 PM Dreamy David Kavanagh November 20, 2022 at 2:22 PM Who knows Christopher, it’s all pretty bonkers! Christopher Flaherty November 20, 2022 at 1:59 PM Well then i hope there winter coats came early this year. Global warming or climate change hey David Kavanagh November 20, 2022 at 1:10 PM Of a white Christmas, spare a thought for Buffalo, 6 feet of snow fell in the last few days, brrr!

Susan Ashley November 19, 2022 at 6:17 PM Dear David, I remember this enchanting wish.. that the snowstorm would surely deliver enough snow overnight to cancel school in the morning and have the whole day to play in the snow. Indeed, your beautiful poem captures this child’s dream of a snow day with lovely imagery. Congratulations for your excellent win in Brian’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan David Kavanagh November 20, 2022 at 12:54 AM Heya Susan, indeed this one was always about trying to find the right balance of imagery, in a short verse, I’m delighted you deem it worthy for a day off school, cheers David

I Am Anaya November 19, 2022 at 5:33 PM Love the title! David Kavanagh November 20, 2022 at 12:57 AM I was always wonder struck by snow falling Anaya, especially when it started to accumulate and miraculously change the surroundings, cheers David

Kim Rodrigues November 18, 2022 at 10:07 AM Dreamy! Congratulations! David Kavanagh November 18, 2022 at 11:33 AM Thank you Kim, a child loves to dream, cheers David

Linda Alice Fowler November 18, 2022 at 6:13 AM Ah, I love this David. Congratulations on your win! :) David Kavanagh November 18, 2022 at 6:29 AM Heya Linda, one of my best childhood memories looking out at the snow falling, and dreaming about the next day of endless fun, cheers David

Jenna Logan November 17, 2022 at 4:25 PM Snow is never in my dreams…. Not having it in my neck of the woods but I give praise to your artistic ability. David Kavanagh November 18, 2022 at 12:37 AM Heya Jenna, this one is more from my schoolday pov, dreaming of a heavy snowfall, and snow days, even though they were very fleeting, my artwork needs a little brushing up, cheers David

Tom Cunningham November 16, 2022 at 10:09 AM Don't seem to get the winters like we used to have, remember when it was really deep and the country ground to a halt and best of it was schools were closed. Tom David Kavanagh November 16, 2022 at 10:15 AM You’re not wrong Tom, even the flakes are smaller nowadays, I remember a full week off school, those were the days, cheers David

L Milton Hankins November 16, 2022 at 9:49 AM I really liked this one a lot, David. Very interesting. David Kavanagh November 16, 2022 at 9:55 AM Thanks Milton, I think the child is dreaming of a snow day tomorrow, and all the fun that comes with it, with a little metaphor perhaps embedded, cheers David