Women In My Family

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*Image of Grandma and Mom by Family photos. Women In My Family Women in my family caused me to glance a spell and while paused, preferred my being warmly swathed, seek cause and effect lasts uncaused. I had a mom and sisters -- three, brought cheers and tears, now yearningly, their laughter echoes oh so sweet, their smiles made my days all complete, mom cleans, they played, I play solo, outhouse chase I, critters go bye, my turn waits I, was a slow go, held the flashlight as I stood by, beauty and taste e'er inherent, their love and mine, so transparent. 2022 July 12 *1st Place* Women in my family ~~Sotto Poet: Judged 2022 July 12 *RZ; aaaa, bbcc, dede, ff. HMS; 8 syllables per 14 lines.

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Valsa George

Date: 7/12/2022 11:29:00 PM

Your family bonded together in love, amity and mutual concern fulfills the concept of a beautiful family . The picture of your grandma and mom should be treasured like a family heirloom. Congratulations on your top placement in Sotto's contest, dear friend !

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/12/2022 11:37:00 PM

I am truly overwhelmed my dear, Valsa, for your words send me adrift e'er so closer -- exceedingly touching indeed my friend, Aloha~William

Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/12/2022 11:13:00 PM

A beautiful image of family filled with women of culture, love and care. Congratulations!

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/12/2022 11:29:00 PM

Thank you, Christuraj, for your generous thoughts my friend, Aloha~William

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/12/2022 5:10:00 PM

I love that you included this lovely photo of your mother and grandmother William. Your poem beautifully depicts your loving family. Congratulations on your First Place win. Blessings xxoo

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/12/2022 5:47:00 PM

Appreciated, Connie, a slight twist true to the sixties, I depicted the highly acceptable "flashlight" o'er the "kukuihelepo", hm? Thank you dearly my friend, Aloha~William

Sotto Poet

Date: 7/12/2022 4:51:00 PM

William, Congratulations to the outstanding winner of the contest. Your poetry was written with a great deal of talent, and it demonstrates your skills quite clearly.

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/12/2022 5:40:00 PM

Lasaad, you are truly a valued friend, along with your absorbing sentiments, they bold generously, reverberating hearts in passing, Aloha~William