Within Ripples

Every year from spring through fall, if you peered between the cattails you could see the swans in the center of the pond, head to head, their love peering back. On the pond's edges, from the tops of lily pads, frogs were singing of love's song as dragon flies frolicked gleefully above. We would sit and watch them countless hours, day after day as they gracefully swayed to the rhythm encircled in the reflections of love. One year in the dawning of spring, he returned alone, we watched him slowly swim with downcast head to the center of the pond, within the shadows of lost love he'd pause in the ripples that surrounded him, his sadness reaching the edges of the pond, where abandoned lily pads tilted downward caught in the spirals of his lonely tears. He still comes to the pond, muddied and alone from spring through fall, through clouded eyes we still watch him swim, wreathed within his pain we taste his loneliness.


head downcast, he swims enclosed in the pond's ripples his tears splashing back
October 12, 2019 Writing Challenge, October, 2019 -Bird- Sponsor, Dear Heart - Wiishkobi Ode
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La France Avatar
October 21, 2019 at 9:15 PM
Sandra, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this exceptional poem, I love swans and you did your Haibun perfectly, and your images are great too !
Adams Avatar
October 22, 2019 at 9:27 AM
Thank you so much....i love swans too, and it is sad to see... thanks for the win and for hosting another wonderful contest :) hugs
Allison Avatar
October 20, 2019 at 5:32 PM
your touching poem sure tugged at the heartstrings, it must be heartbreaking to see him all alone:-( many congrats on your win Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx
Adams Avatar
October 20, 2019 at 6:21 PM
Thank you Jan....it is heartbreaking to see, especially because they were paired together for many years...you can feel his sadness... hugs
Roper Avatar
October 20, 2019 at 4:48 PM
Great verse, Sandra, congratulations on your win. Hugs
Adams Avatar
October 20, 2019 at 6:20 PM
Thank you so much Eve.... hugs :)
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October 20, 2019 at 1:36 PM
- This is sensitive and beautiful, Sandra - Congratulations on your great win :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Adams Avatar
October 20, 2019 at 1:57 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise...i had no idea the contest was judged... hugs
Gauthier Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 9:59 PM
Beautiful, Sandra.
Adams Avatar
October 20, 2019 at 1:56 PM
Thank you so much Line :) hugs
Green Avatar
October 14, 2019 at 7:21 AM
The sadness in this amazing poem is heartbreaking. To lose the one you dedicated your life to is devastating. Your words though beautiful, speak of this loneliness and the ache that comes with it.
Adams Avatar
October 14, 2019 at 9:41 AM
Thank you my friend, I could feel his sadness...it broke my heart to see him like that.... hugs
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October 12, 2019 at 10:13 PM
So beautifully expressed... I love swans and this is a poem I'll fave as I want to remember it for sure. It's an amazing write. I love it. God bless you always with much love, Gina
Adams Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 10:20 PM
Thank you Regina for your kindness and faving my poem... swans are so beautiful and graceful so to see him so sad was heartbreaking ..blessings and love to you! :) hugs Sandy
Wolf Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 9:32 PM
Beautifully envisioned, Sandra! Love this haiku. Warm wishes, Gershon (soup mail, please)
Adams Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 10:00 PM
Thank you Gershon, it truly broke my heart to see him so sad and lonely.... we watched the two of them for many years... hugs :)
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October 12, 2019 at 4:53 PM
Sandra, I like this Swan song of a poem. The simply beautiful way you create is a credit to your skills; perhaps life learned experience put to words. Oh Dear (Heart) ..this contest is going to be filled with so many talented writers. -Richard
Adams Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 6:12 PM
Thank you so much Richard....it was sad to witness....hugs
Hamilton Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 2:41 PM
An amazingly beautiful yet sad poem,(just the way I like it). If for a contest I see another top win, I know Constance will love this!
Adams Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 3:05 PM
Thank you John, they were beautiful to watch, and now it is so sad to see him alone, you can feel his sadness...hugs :)
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October 12, 2019 at 2:12 PM
Beautiful love story of life you have penned through your words!!
Adams Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 3:04 PM
Thank you so much Smita, for both your lovely comment and visit :)
There Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 1:18 PM
Oh no, this is heartbreaking ~ you brought us love and we sang, then you brought us loss and we... cry. Such a moving, beautifully written piece, my friend. Feeling blessed to have read it <3 a fave.
Adams Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 1:35 PM
Thank you my friend, sorry for the tears... after watching them for years to see him alone tugs at the heartstrings for sure. Hugs :)
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October 12, 2019 at 12:25 PM
WOW! This is so sad but elegantly told..a touching story that easily transcends to humans in your gifted words. Excellent, as always.
Adams Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 1:33 PM
Thank you Vijay. It tugs at my heartstrings to see him alone ... hugs
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October 12, 2019 at 10:32 AM
Wow! I adore this sad but beautiful piece. I have tears in my eyes :-) x
Adams Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 11:47 AM
Thank you...i feel bad for him when i see him swimming alone, it is so sad....hugs
Mcgee Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 9:36 AM
This brought a lump to my throat! I could feel his loneliness through your words. Wonderfully penned and expressive.
Adams Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 9:39 AM
Thank you so much Jeanne...it is sad to see, they say swans mate for life, we don't know what happened to his mate but for many years they came to a pond near my job and we all loved to watch them, one year he showed up alone and still swims in the same area, alone, but you can feel his sadness through his movements... hugs
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