Lisa Ricci Poet Free verse

With Thoughts of You

"with thoughts of you"

from the moment we part I count the time
the time when I see your face once again
such sands run slow almost as if knowing
knowing I wait to return to your embrace
when the moment arrives I view only you

such a garden built could never be finer
finer from a world full with all her charm
such sentiment I shall eternally express
express to you with diamonds and pearls
mindful of what stands before me is true

now the sands continue to fall once again
once again with them flowing steadily fast
realizing our time to part now lies before us
before us like skies shedding tears of rain
knowing passion grows with thoughts of you

SkyWatcher  -  05-23-17


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any and all repetition is intentional
thank you

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Paul Callus May 27, 2017 at 5:10 PM Lisa, posso darti del 'tu'! Sei una brava scrittrice....this poem is lovely and meaningful...simplicity of words is what brings the message clearly across, and your intentional repetition conveys the intended effect. Parting can be so sadly emotional, but it also makes the heart grow fonder! Anticipating his return and freshly renewed passion is something to look forward to. Regards // paul Lisa Ricci May 28, 2017 at 6:35 AM Morning Paul. Thank you once again for such generosity. Thank you also for saying its simplistic. Simplicity works for me (lol). Enjoy the morning and day and I will see you on your page.

Darren White May 26, 2017 at 2:48 AM i see what you did there with the repetition. I love that! I have done a few poems where the last part of evry sentence formed the first part of every next. I absolutely agree with Chris in this. Suck a beautiful poem my friend. A little bit sad, and a whole bit of wonderful. Lisa Ricci May 26, 2017 at 4:36 AM Morning Darren. Thank you very much. Honestly. I logged on briefly to respond. Your review means the world. I enjoy repetition. Have a wonderful afternoon. Stay well penguin. Sorry I've been missing your work.

Maria Williams May 24, 2017 at 6:40 AM A beautiful poem which brings back some memories Lisa. The words flow easily. A7+ Maria Lisa Ricci May 24, 2017 at 1:19 PM Good Afternoon Maria. Again, please forgive this short response. Words can not express my appreciation. Thank you so much. Enjoy the night. I will see you soon.

Anne-Marie Coreggia May 23, 2017 at 5:38 PM The enchanting flow of your thoughts had me under a spell from start to finish. It's gorgeous Lisa!:) Amitiés Lisa Ricci May 24, 2017 at 5:02 AM Oh my goodness. Buon Giorno Miss Anne-Marie. Thank you ever so much. How generous. Always do you enhance entries with your intake and feedback. Honestly. Where would we be without love. Nowhere. Have a wonderful morning and day. Thank you over and over once again. I will see you on your page.

Joseph May May 23, 2017 at 5:07 PM A creative use of repetition Lisa..Very nicely penned Lisa Ricci May 24, 2017 at 4:59 AM Good Morning Joseph. Thank you ever so much for your generosity and graciousness. Honestly. I believe in repetition at times within poetry. Have a wonderful morning and day. I will see you on your page.

Eve Roper May 23, 2017 at 4:49 PM repetition added to this wonderful poem and didn't take away.. ~* Lisa Ricci May 24, 2017 at 4:57 AM Good Morning Eve. Thank you Thank you. Honestly. I know there are some that don't believe in repetition in poetry. I however do.... Thus your intake and words mean the world. Have a wonderful morning and day. I will see you on your page.

Daniel Turner May 23, 2017 at 4:35 PM Ah,"True love stories, never have endings" and "absence makes the heart grow fonder" Nicely penned, Lisa:) Lisa Ricci May 24, 2017 at 4:56 AM Good Morning Daniel. How very true. Your intake is lovely and your review is generous. Thank you so much. Have a wonderful morning. I will see you on your page.

Carol B. May 23, 2017 at 3:52 PM The ache you feel when apart is torture. I know the feeling all to well. Loved this write .) Lisa Ricci May 24, 2017 at 4:53 AM Good Morning Carol. Thank you very much. Your review is most generous. May all know of love. Enjoy the morning and day.

Connie Marcum Wong May 23, 2017 at 12:35 PM Part of love is the longing for it....because the person of your affections is always on your mind anytime you are parted from them. Some can't seem to keep their mind on work. I so enjoyed this little reminder of crazy love Lisa. ; ) 7 Lisa Ricci May 23, 2017 at 2:51 PM Hello Connie. Thank you very much. I so agree with your intake on this situation and thought. How true. Your review is very generous. May all know of love. Enjoy the night. I will see you on your page.

Chris Green May 23, 2017 at 11:37 AM It is the repetition that makes this poem so cool, well, besides the expression of love and waiting for their return. I just adore how you did this, the repeating phrases just enhance the feelings and emotions you are sharing. Wonderfully gorgeous Lisa, wonderfully gorgeous. Lisa Ricci May 23, 2017 at 11:53 AM PS: I forgot to say Thank you. Thus Thank you. Lisa Ricci May 23, 2017 at 11:52 AM Hi Chris. Oh my goodness. I'm reading your intake and words but I'm speechless. Honestly. Coming from you as I always say I am very honored Chris. Very honored. It's been another wacky day in the neighborhood with the seniors. I will return to your page later on. Have a wonderful afternoon. I can't tell you how pleased I am you enjoyed the entry for you write of this theme with perfection. -- s m i l e --