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With Hands

The heart sank
Into a tangible pose
Uptight and harbouring
The scantly ripened rose.

She spoke whispers
With lightly fragrant breath
Listening with vacant poise
The mind melts to hear.

Detailing sought emotions
Her words become robust
Writing onto lucid skin 
A novel written with hands.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 3/17/2009 2:00:00 PM
great poem Tony! Jim
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Date: 3/16/2009 11:57:00 AM
We have feeling, hearing, touching; the first verse is excellent. Something is bothering me, hmmmmm, I think when you say She only once, Perhaps, "Her heart sank..would tie all 3 verses together more strongly. or leave out the referrances to sex altogether. "The heart sank...."Spoken in whispers...Words become robust..Light & Love
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Date: 3/15/2009 7:25:00 PM
"Writing onto lucid skin" amazing! Love the way this one flows so smoothe and gentle. Great writing. I look forward to reading more of your work! Smiles from Lolita
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