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With Bated Breath

Whispers curtailed into the cobalt sky Inspired by diminished reasons why Twisted into favorite memories Half bent over, weeping with willow trees Betrayal never mute when fear prevails Anticipation of my heart that wails Temptation shows no alleviation Expecting all that resents creation Decreasing heartbeat; devoid elation Barren fields mourn, for I am left breathless Regretting my past, leaving me restless Eroded lava brick engraved my soul And bated me until I turned to coal Thirsty for oxygen so I can live- Hungry for my purity to forgive 10 syllables in each line August 21, 2019 "WITH BATED BREATH" Edward Ibeh

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David Drowley

Date: 9/9/2019 4:02:00 PM

LuLoo, Congratulations on you win! Excellent rhyming. David

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/7/2019 9:47:00 PM

This is awesome. I am so glad you won the contest. Many blessings.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/7/2019 6:50:00 PM

Wow Luloo! Congratulations on your deserving First Placement! An amazing write! : ) xxoo

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/7/2019 2:48:00 PM

- Impressive acrostic with rhyming ... beautiful, L.L. :) - Congratulations on your TOP win :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Edward Ibeh

Date: 9/7/2019 11:45:00 AM

Beautiful poetry, Luloo!:-) Congratulations on winning first place in my contest!

Lu Loo
Date: 9/7/2019 2:18:00 PM

thank you so much I am honored dear Edward, I loved the theme I chose. be blessed :)-luloo

John Hamilton

Date: 8/23/2019 2:49:00 PM

Another great rhyming acrostic, I remember I used to do acrostic contests, maybe I should start them again, yours has really piqued my interest again!

Lu Loo
Date: 9/7/2019 2:18:00 PM

so sorry for late response, I just saw this. Thank you and I loved your acrostic contests, actually all your contests really. Thanks dear John :)-luloo

Sandra Adams

Date: 8/21/2019 8:23:00 PM

and yet another beautifully penned acrostic that rhymes...your talent always shines through in all of your writes... some acrostics lack flow...yours is spot on! Great write :) hugs

Lu Loo
Date: 9/7/2019 2:17:00 PM

sorry for late response, thank you sweet Sandra :)-luloo