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The willows have wept Lancet leaves, tears in the creek Dream in their prison of ice. White sycamore roots, Twisted and gnarled, form islands And pools, a necklace of pearls. The stream disappears – Magic of karst – to emerge Down valley, unexpected. December 31, 2016 For contest: Form C Sponsored by Broken Wings 5th place The most intricate Japanese Poetry form is the Choka, or Long Poem. The early form consisted of a series of Katuata joined together. This gives a choice of form structures of ..... 5 - 7 - 7 - 5 - 7 - 7 .. etc, or .. 5 - 7 - 5 - 5 - 7 - 5.. etc.

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Date: 7/23/2019 10:34:00 PM
To be honest, I haven't read a choka poem before. This one is creatively beautiful..
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Date: 7/23/2019 8:24:00 AM
A fine bit of poeming, full of delicate and apt imagery.
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Date: 7/22/2019 5:34:00 PM
Deep images! Enjoyed the tangle of nature’s words!
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Date: 7/22/2019 10:26:00 AM
Very deep and full of wonder. Congrats on your winning a contest. I hope to do that someday.
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Date: 7/20/2018 9:16:00 AM
Lovely imagery. Beautifully penned, Agnes.
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Date: 1/9/2017 6:48:00 AM
You constructed a wonderful Choka with beautiful descriptions. Congratulations!
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Date: 1/4/2017 3:35:00 PM
wow, I love this and I think Constance will too. Beautiful!!
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Date: 1/3/2017 2:51:00 PM
I love this Choka, Agnes. The subject matter and the emotions that come with it are captivating. I have a feeling Constance will fall for it! ~ Regards // paul
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Agnes Krampe
Date: 1/3/2017 6:05:00 PM
Thanks for your kind words, Paul.
Date: 1/2/2017 2:18:00 AM
Your poem is so creatively written Agnes! This short form is difficult for me to create. Some may think it is easy, but it is a challenge. You have conveyed a sadness of the tree's spirit poignantly, and I do believe they have a spirit, as does every living thing. Beautiful! 7 ; )
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Agnes Krampe
Date: 1/2/2017 7:12:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Connie.

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