Winter of Deception

The eddy pulls hard against my torso
panic rises and surfaces, my vsion starts to zigzag
I swim harder in the strong currents of confusion

How did my life become a battle
My father once seemed to love all his children
Now where is the love?
We have to be the dictator to prevent suicide/murder
Begrudgingly he submits to the will of the family
Unforgiving, ungrateful, rebellious
time has the last laugh, my son shouts
I hate you, I never loved you, you are so mean!!
My father shouts, you don't love me, you just want my stuff
You are so selfish!
Tears fall....A heart breaks!

Will this trial end?

Mother says, my daughter has not been to see me in so long, I want to see my baby.
Mom I am here, I was here yesterday! I brought you food! don't you remember?

Life cycles around the eddy, swirls and swirls with no end...

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 10/26/2010 6:27:00 AM
Wow, it has a capital letter at the beginning...... But woW beautifull. Ryan
Login to Reply
Date: 10/20/2010 7:11:00 AM
thankxxx Doris for your always cute comments especially this morning luv.. enjoyed an uplifting comment today..luv..thankxxx.. and hope all is well luv..
Login to Reply
Date: 10/19/2010 6:18:00 AM
I'm sorry for you and the family. Thank's for reading and commenting on my poem.
Login to Reply
Date: 10/18/2010 8:33:00 PM
This situation must be really tough for your family. Sorry you are going through this, Doris. Thanks for your kind comments. Best to you --Diane
Login to Reply
Date: 10/18/2010 8:00:00 PM
Hi, Doris. Thanks for explaining the situation. Still it must be hard for you. I'm doing okay. Hope things get better for your family. Love, Carolyn
Login to Reply
Date: 10/18/2010 8:57:00 AM
Oh, Doris, this is so sad. Now my heart is breaking for you. I'm so sorry your mother can't remember you, dear. Karen O'Leary went through this with her father and I know it must be very difficult. A new favorite poem for me. Love, Carolyn
Login to Reply
Date: 10/18/2010 12:22:00 AM
very emotional this Doris, i don't think the trial ever ends, i guess we hve to just manage the best we can, excellent poem though. Harry
Login to Reply
Date: 10/17/2010 9:04:00 PM
A wonderful write Doris and thankxxx for answering my questions yesterday luv.. this is very touching and very heartfelt luv.. when trials come.. break throughs are right behind them.. hang in there my friend.. enjoyed tonight..with luv.
Login to Reply
Date: 10/17/2010 7:52:00 PM
.this is sad but so true to life ..have alzheimers affecting my family also.. take care~Deb
Login to Reply
Date: 10/17/2010 7:23:00 PM
Smile ~ This is one of the most amazingly profound poes of "Your Beauties" which I have viewed "Dear, 'Lovely & Precious Doris Culverhouse!!!'" ~ I hope that "You" are doing well dear &, that these moments are fictional creative writing but if not then, that they shall correct themselves about that eddy soon I pray ~ "My Love & Warmth to 'You Always' &, All You Love," John! ~ Smile, "Sweet Dreams;" Bye!:) ~
Login to Reply
Date: 10/17/2010 6:13:00 PM
Thank you Doris Bless your heart and your family! Very truly touching write! Peter K.
Login to Reply
Date: 10/17/2010 3:31:00 PM
I'm sorry for the turmoil. I hope life sorts itself out...if it ever does.
Login to Reply
Date: 10/17/2010 3:13:00 PM
That is the sweet complain every mother would make for love's sake, and that is life, very introspective thoughts, Doris
Login to Reply
Date: 10/17/2010 12:46:00 PM
God bless you and yours during this tough time, Doris.
Login to Reply
Date: 10/17/2010 12:42:00 PM
Well, I don't know if this is about your in-laws or just using recent happenings mixed with what has happened in our families with the alzheimers robbing some of who they are...I am glad that you wrote this one for we all need to be reminded that this demon spirit of alzheimers can hit any home..Mom
Login to Reply
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Reflection on the Important Things

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetics
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
Store
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter