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Fibonacci Contest hosted by Ink Empress 1/18/24

Winter Approaches

Gold
leaves
flutter
to the ground
Winter approaches ~
Maple tree branches are naked,
awaiting gloomy graphite clouds to clothe them with snow
They languish in stoic stasis, deciduous and disrobed until budding in spring

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Terry Miller

January 28, 2024 at 7:22 AM

Excellent, congratulations

Lin Lane

January 28, 2024 at 7:31 AM

Thank you for your kind thoughts, Terry.

David Drowley

January 27, 2024 at 9:19 AM

Wonderful write. This one flows!

Lin Lane

January 27, 2024 at 11:17 AM

Thank you very much, David.

Ink Empress

January 27, 2024 at 4:15 AM

Dear Lin, I absolutely loved this fibonacci, so well articulated with descriptive diction, painting such vivid imagery in such eloquence, i especially love your subtle use of alliterations too, and how i can see through your words what you’ve delivered in a seamless manner, love the way you’ve started the poem too, theres a delicate elegance in your word weaving that makes this poem stand out for me. congratulations on your win. Well deserved. Thank you for sharing this

Lin Lane

January 27, 2024 at 11:17 AM

Thank you very much for the kudos and placement in your contest, Ink. It's an honor to have my words described as having a "delicate elegance."

Paul Willason

January 19, 2024 at 4:58 AM

Words can only come together like this when you have the ability to enter into the subject, feel intensely, almost become what is being observed.....the poem achieves this. Another little gem reflecting the world.

Lin Lane

January 27, 2024 at 11:16 AM

What supportive comments you always leave for me, Paul and always greatly appreciated. Thank. I imagine myself in the scene, as I'm sure you do, and then just write what I see, or would like to see.

Jay Narain

January 18, 2024 at 10:43 AM

Nice one, we all wait for the spring glory.

Lin Lane

January 18, 2024 at 12:44 PM

It's always pleasant to see a resurgence of life. Thanks, Jay.

Sam Kauffman

January 18, 2024 at 10:33 AM

Such a feeling of the seasons, Lin, in the remnants of autumn waiting for winter yet dreaming of renewal in spring. Love your "gloomy, graphite clouds." Perfect description. And your "disrobed" image of the trees leaving nothing to the imagination as they stand "naked" ready to be clothed by the hand of winter in snow. Enjoyed the alliteration! Best wishes for the contest! Blessings of health and happiness to you.

Lin Lane

January 18, 2024 at 12:45 PM

Thanks a lot, Sam. Was I naughty to leave them unclothed? lol I'm glad you liked how this one turned out and thanks for your well wishes. I'm sending you soup mail.

Tom Cunningham

January 18, 2024 at 10:17 AM

Brrr I can feel the chill Lin, spring can't come quick enough. Good luck in the contest. Tom

Lin Lane

January 18, 2024 at 12:44 PM

Thank you very much, Tom. It's been sub-freezing here for two days. A little warmer now, but rain makes it just as gloomy.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

January 18, 2024 at 9:55 AM

Hello, Lin. What a well-laid short winter poem. It made me smile today about the weather. We are expecting snow tomorrow. - Blessings, Daniel!

Lin Lane

January 18, 2024 at 9:59 AM

I once lived in a land of snow. The first fall was beautiful and anticipated... just the first. Glad to be back home in the South. Thank you for your thoughts and well wishes, Daniel.

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