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Wilted Echoes

Opened the doors wide, To the soft morning light, And the grey windows too, For the morning breeze. Love alone, we thought, Will teach them the 'hows' To pat-hug with gentle care, While holding them dear. Let it slide and slip away, we told our silly selves— let the slimy words go, Numb the heavy hands. Turn a little deaf today, To all the bruising noise, Turn a little blind again, To the subtle glaring eyes. Because we believed we were truly loving them, Because we believed we cherished them alone. If poured long enough, Love would soften them. If patted with patience, Their edges would smooth. But love without fences, Is like a garden left bare, Trampled by ugly, dirty feet, Dragged in by our hands. Allowing comfort to breed, Nothing but sour contempt, Saying, "It's fine, my dear," When it really, really hurts. Carving cornered holes, Where resentment blooms, Not toward the dirty hands, But the pitiful mirrored self. The self that stayed cold, When it needed to spark. The self that stayed mute, When it needed to roar.

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Date: 5/14/2025 3:54:00 AM
This feels sad, with an edge of warning. I like the ambiguity: is it about taming a wild creature, children, lovers..? It could be any, but says that boundaries are part of loving care. The message has a ring of lived truth. The cutting line is 'the pitiful mirrored self'. Your poem lets a reader feel the weak and dark side of self , and the need to speak up to keep the spark of love. A moving write. J :)
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Salma Malik
Date: 5/18/2025 6:57:00 AM
Thank you so much, J. Your interpretation truly warms me. You’ve captured the heart of what I hoped to express, the quiet erosion that happens when love forgets to honour itself, and how silence can sometimes dim the very light it longs to preserve. I'm especially moved that 'the pitiful mirrored self' resonated with you. It means a lot that you felt the undercurrents and ambiguity, because yes, it could be about any kind of relationship where care begins to blur into self-erasure. Grateful for your kind words and insight.

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