Whirlwind

It was bright Red,
My blush.
My jacket.
My racing, pacing blood.

It was Halloween night,
Supposedly scary.
Supposedly different.
Supposedly dating was easy.

It was my first date.
Just couldn’t wait.
Just teenage ‘”fate.”
Just Dad driving us, embarrassingly.

It was so fast.
We were unprepared.
We teenagers assumed our calm.
We were fearsome pirates for a night.

It was a dance.
Who remembers the songs?
Who saw our discomfort?
Who knew we were stifling our immaturity?

It was an awkwardly normal door.
Why the sudden silence?
Why the bashful hug?
Why the inwardly sung victory?
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Dietrich Avatar
July 16, 2011 at 8:19 AM
This poem is indeed a whirlwind, giving us a taste of that first date's mood! Congrats on your win.
Mehta Avatar
July 15, 2011 at 3:47 PM
My congratulations on this win in the contest of Carol, Beth
Sweetheart Avatar
July 15, 2011 at 2:08 PM
Congrats Beth on your terrific third place win in first date with this awesome write luv...
Brown Avatar
July 15, 2011 at 12:56 PM
Congratulations on your placement in my contest and thank you for supporting my contest Beth. Love, Carol
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