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Abaft the beam the aberration spun Below the turbid surface like a pearl Commanding all attentions, overrun Dissolving as colloidal midst the swirl Encircled tons of matter as dissolved Fierce vortices, toroidal in their whorl Gesticulating with his mates, involved Hypotheses suffused the captain's ire Intense 'twas this anomaly, unsolved Just as a jester moon dipped to retire Kinetic phosphorescence flit the mast Low on the mizzen, as St. Elmo's fire Miraculous, a beam shone in its caste Now tying ship to sea by water brake On deck the crew were timidly aghast Pervading all, their need to undertake Quick means to thus escape adversity Relinquishing to flee that eddy's wake Surmising that the undertow would be Too close to e'er escape its pearly skin Unhesitant the captain plunged the sea Virulent, boiled the brine, he in its spin With sword held tight, defiantly above Xiphoidals sliced the vortex from within Yet with the ebbing sea his crew thereof Zeus in his glory, never knew such love. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the "Quirky Tercets" Poetry Contest, Nina Parmenter, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 3rd Place ~ in the "Abecedarian Contest" Poetry Contest, Caren Krutsinger, Judge & Sponsor. ( This form is called "ABC" or "Abecedarian", and it's also an Epic Terza Rima in Iambic Pentameter, with 10 syllables/line, counted @ HowManySyllables.com )

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Date: 3/7/2020 2:11:00 PM
This is so impressive Greg. I am happy this made the list. Mine didn't make it. This form shines with your expertise! Congratulations on your win! xxoo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/9/2020 12:40:00 AM
What a sweet comment - thank you so much, Connie - I so appreciate it, Dear Poet! :o) <3
Date: 3/4/2020 12:20:00 AM
Great write, Greg, not only a 10 syllable and rhyme verse. This would have been so difficult for me to do. Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/9/2020 12:39:00 AM
That's very kind of you, Eve, thank you so much, my friend! :o) <3
Date: 3/3/2020 7:00:00 AM
Brilliant, Greg! Congratulations on your placement. ~Mark
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/9/2020 12:39:00 AM
Many kind thanks to you, Mark! :o)
Date: 5/19/2019 6:53:00 PM
Took a bit of work you say!!! Mind blown by the complexity of this write, and the lexical execution. ABC plus terza rima(my fave form) in Iambic pentameter nonetheless!! I don't know anyone else who could pull this off. No more words, I'm not easily thrown off but...speechless!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/20/2019 1:16:00 AM
This means a lot to me, John, as your opinion always DOES, but also that you appreciate its complexity and intricate phrasing ... I honestly didn't think it would get many comments, so I am pleasantly surprised and so appreciative of all of you. This took some extra time, but was very rewarding, and I'm quite proud of it. Many thanks and blessings, Brother - much love & respect! :-)
Date: 5/3/2019 9:42:00 AM
Stunned! My first thought was HOW? And I see someone else said that! Brilliant! And congratulations!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/20/2019 1:07:00 AM
You are very kind, PS, I greatly appreciate it ... this was a bit intense, but very rewarding, and I'm so glad you enjoyed the result! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 4/29/2019 10:21:00 AM
Sweet heaven, tell me how, HOW can a human write such a poem? Are you a Terza Rima god, let say, Terza Rama? The human has no chance. Another contest lost.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/30/2019 11:16:00 PM
LOL - you are very kind, Kurt, and I got a chuckle from this wonderful comment ... I think you do me far too much credit, but I'm so pleased that you found my poem worthwhile - it was a labor of love. This is actually my first "true" Terza Rima ... I wrote one other, but I think it's the wrong meter, so this is really the first one to "officially" qualify. Many kind thanks and blessings, friend! :-)
Date: 4/28/2019 3:09:00 PM
Quick! Get me a dictionary! lol Wow, Greg, what a fantastic poem! Your imagination on overload....
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/30/2019 11:14:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Carole, that's very kind of you, and I'm so happy that you found this one worthy! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3