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When You Feel You'Ve Lost It All

When you feel you've lost it all When you feel weak, like you have no power Sometimes sadness is just too much to bear I'll be there with you, that moment that hour When you're all alone, and feel no one cares I know I know, you have made bad mistakes Hurt someone special, the one that you love Just one thoughtless word is all that it takes You're going to need, some help from above When you feel the loss, loved ones gone away Remember my friend, you're never alone When you feel you just can't take one more day I'll be there for you, you're not on your own You must make the effort, try every day Remember to call me, It's time to pray. August 26,2016 Sonnet 2 contest

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Date: 11/10/2017 10:02:00 PM
A beautiful, comforting and heartwarming write John. A wonderful sonnet about the meaning of 'being there' for someone when they're in need of your presence with a message of hope and love. Well done and enjoyed!
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John Hamilton
Date: 11/11/2017 3:01:00 PM
Thanks Susan for visiting my older poems, glad you enjoyed it!
Date: 9/1/2016 4:09:00 PM
Hi, reading the latest poems, but this one really was superb, bought tears to my eyes..We are not alone, prayer is essential at all times. Contest would be nothing with out this poem.. Love Mom.
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John Hamilton
Date: 9/1/2016 4:42:00 PM
Wow thanks Mom, I'm sure you recognized this from a few years ago, I'll comfort you the song. I'll be reading it at the concert so you will remember it for sure, thanks for the visit. Love you!
Date: 8/29/2016 3:12:00 AM
It is always so reassuring knowing that faith can help get us through anything. I really love the comfort that is felt in your poem John. This is beautiful! 7 ; )
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John Hamilton
Date: 8/29/2016 9:16:00 AM
Thanks Connie for your comments, it's reassuring as this is a rewrite from a song I wrote a few years ago.
Date: 8/27/2016 7:48:00 PM
A beautiful sonnet with a reassuring reminder that someone is always there to help when we are in need... Very well written, John. Good luck in the contest!
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John Hamilton
Date: 8/27/2016 9:52:00 PM
Thanks for your kind words, Kelly, this was a song I wrote a few years ago and I shortened it, and reworked it, I wasn't sure if it really worked with so many re-writes thought it may have lost it's luster, your comments help, really appreciated!
Date: 8/27/2016 4:44:00 PM
Very well written and heartfelt.
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John Hamilton
Date: 8/27/2016 4:51:00 PM
Thanks Tom you are kind!
Date: 8/27/2016 7:50:00 AM
what a wonderful message you convey John. Really enjoyed your uplifting lines:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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John Hamilton
Date: 8/27/2016 9:24:00 AM
Thanks Jan, I think because really I'm a songwriter trying to be a poet it does come across simplistic, but hey what did they say about Lennon and McCartney, simple lyrics are the best.
Date: 8/27/2016 12:27:00 AM
Excellent sonnet with a lovely couplet to end:) so simple but clear in what you want to convey, I like this kind of poetry the best:)
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Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2016 8:09:00 AM
When I first started here I got criticised and belittled by someone for writing 'simple' poems and not iambic pentameter (that's all greek to me lol) but that's the only way I know and that's the way I'll continue to write:-) hugs Jan xx
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John Hamilton
Date: 8/27/2016 7:43:00 AM
Thank you Jo That's me the simple poet, with a message, seems like some like it, so I'll keep going.

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