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When you smiled I thought "How beautiful you are." When you cried I witnessed the depth of you When you were angry I recognized that you had been hurt When you laughed I could feel you healing When you played I remembered how to be a child When you danced I felt my heart beating When you left I wished I had known you better..

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Date: 11/6/2018 4:25:00 PM
Hi Richard, with perfection you play the heartstrings with this excellent work. You write from the heart and your words caress the heart of the reader. Your golden pen will forever sing Richard. Another poetic gem my friend. The words paint a living canvas. Have a wonderful Monday. Your friend always....Mike.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/6/2018 10:55:00 PM
Thanks for the uplifting comment.
Date: 12/10/2017 5:04:00 PM
Awwww...Richard. A beautifully written piece reminding us to appreciate the people in our lives.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/15/2017 8:07:00 AM
Thanks for visiting Rhoda.
Date: 12/6/2017 11:59:00 PM
Simple & Sweet.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/7/2017 8:55:00 AM
Thanks again Afzal.
Date: 12/2/2017 3:06:00 AM
A serenade to my poetic heart. I love the passion of using 'I' throughout and the effort of noticing a significant other. Like a sweet yet sad love note. Enjoyed reading!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/2/2017 9:02:00 AM
Thanks Kristina, it has been nice having you visit this morning.
Date: 11/23/2017 7:00:00 AM
Simple lines, but touching, Richard:)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/27/2017 3:07:00 PM
Thanks Jo.
Date: 11/21/2017 9:35:00 AM
A surprise ending! So sad. LOVED reading this Richard. ~ Judy
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/21/2017 1:48:00 PM
Thanks Judith.
Date: 11/19/2017 1:53:00 PM
so touched by this beautiful and sensitive work, rich...i felt this from the heart!..huggs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/21/2017 1:49:00 PM
Thanks Nette, hugs back.
Date: 11/18/2017 11:09:00 PM
Exceptional emotional write, Richard. Seems like a DM form poem to me ... dramatic monologue. A dark, sad and heart piercing poem. Pure poetry. Love and joy always.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/19/2017 12:20:00 AM
Thanks, I’ll go with that Freddie. Hugs Rick.
Date: 11/18/2017 12:17:00 PM
This is so sad Richard.. I hope this is not a personal experience.. So sad when a child dies..
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/18/2017 3:30:00 PM
no, it is not a personal experience. Thanks for the concern. This could be any number of scenarios from someone leaving a relationship to suicide or someone passing on. Maybe even a child leaving home. Each reader will insert their own meaning. Thanks for commenting.
Date: 11/18/2017 7:34:00 AM
Wow, the emotional twist at the end is heart-wrenching my friend! I am saddened by the incredibly downward feeling at the end, but the main part of the write, the heart of it all, was very heart-warning, so beautifully crafted! Then ending just brings it all down to reality...the way we truly think of the situation, and what really happens when our loved ones leave us! What a grandiose piece, Great Work Rick!!
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Date: 11/17/2017 9:15:00 PM
Very touching poem, Richard. I like it very much. It is extremely endearing.
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Date: 11/18/2017 3:30:00 PM
Thanks Line.
Date: 11/17/2017 4:21:00 PM
Such an emotional end to a wonderful write Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/17/2017 5:56:00 PM
Thanks Elizabeth.
Date: 11/17/2017 4:03:00 PM
That's such a touching poem and a fav.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/17/2017 4:05:00 PM
Thanks Arthur.
Date: 11/17/2017 3:40:00 PM
A very powerful poem Richard. And it touches upon the survivor guilt of those wishing they could have known more and done more to stop it. Well written!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/17/2017 4:05:00 PM
Thanks Heidi.
Date: 11/17/2017 2:59:00 PM
- We are always wise after the event ... but that's what we learn from - A lovely poem, Richard - Best wishes for a great weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/17/2017 3:01:00 PM
Thanks Anne-Lise. Hugs Rick.
Date: 11/17/2017 1:31:00 PM
Good write, dear. If only....I'm a bit gloomy of late. Was thinking of writing a poem about it...I'm not even inspired to do that. Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/17/2017 1:35:00 PM
Sorry to hear you are gloomy. I hope the clouds separate and that your spirits rise to greet the sky. Hugs Rick.
Date: 11/17/2017 1:10:00 PM
Such an emotional poem Richard which can apply to the break up of a relationship but also to suicide:-( that final couplet is so heartbreaking and made me think if only i could have done more. :-( hugs jan xx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/17/2017 1:17:00 PM
Hugs back Jan. Your response is perfect, that was my intention for this piece. I wrote it for our mental health centre in Kelowna.
Date: 11/17/2017 12:43:00 PM
Well written, Richard--you depicted so many emotions!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/17/2017 12:53:00 PM
Thanks Vijay.