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Richard Lamoureux

Poet Dramatic Monologue

When You

When

When you smiled
I thought "How beautiful you are."
When you cried
I witnessed the depth of you
When you were angry
I recognized that you had been hurt
When you laughed
I could feel you healing
When you played
I remembered how to be a child
When you danced
I felt my heart flutter
When you left
I wished I had known you better..

Copyright © Richard Lamoureux | Year Posted 2017

beautybereavementchildhoodsuicidedramatic monologue

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Vladislav Raven

November 6, 2018 at 4:25 PM

Hi Richard, with perfection you play the heartstrings with this excellent work. You write from the heart and your words caress the heart of the reader. Your golden pen will forever sing Richard. Another poetic gem my friend. The words paint a living canvas. Have a wonderful Monday. Your friend always....Mike.

Richard Lamoureux

November 6, 2018 at 10:55 PM

Thanks for the uplifting comment.

December 10, 2017 at 5:04 PM

Awwww...Richard. A beautifully written piece reminding us to appreciate the people in our lives.

Richard Lamoureux

December 15, 2017 at 8:07 AM

Thanks for visiting Rhoda.

December 6, 2017 at 11:59 PM

Simple & Sweet.

Richard Lamoureux

December 7, 2017 at 8:55 AM

Thanks again Afzal.

Kristina Whitmore

December 2, 2017 at 3:06 AM

A serenade to my poetic heart. I love the passion of using 'I' throughout and the effort of noticing a significant other. Like a sweet yet sad love note. Enjoyed reading!

Richard Lamoureux

December 2, 2017 at 9:02 AM

Thanks Kristina, it has been nice having you visit this morning.

November 23, 2017 at 7:00 AM

Simple lines, but touching, Richard:)

Richard Lamoureux

November 27, 2017 at 3:07 PM

Thanks Jo.

November 21, 2017 at 9:35 AM

A surprise ending! So sad. LOVED reading this Richard. ~ Judy

Richard Lamoureux

November 21, 2017 at 1:48 PM

Thanks Judith.

November 19, 2017 at 1:53 PM

so touched by this beautiful and sensitive work, rich...i felt this from the heart!..huggs

Richard Lamoureux

November 21, 2017 at 1:49 PM

Thanks Nette, hugs back.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

November 18, 2017 at 11:09 PM

Exceptional emotional write, Richard. Seems like a DM form poem to me ... dramatic monologue. A dark, sad and heart piercing poem. Pure poetry. Love and joy always.

Richard Lamoureux

November 19, 2017 at 12:20 AM

Thanks, I’ll go with that Freddie. Hugs Rick.

November 18, 2017 at 12:17 PM

This is so sad Richard.. I hope this is not a personal experience.. So sad when a child dies..

Richard Lamoureux

November 18, 2017 at 3:30 PM

no, it is not a personal experience. Thanks for the concern. This could be any number of scenarios from someone leaving a relationship to suicide or someone passing on. Maybe even a child leaving home. Each reader will insert their own meaning. Thanks for commenting.

November 18, 2017 at 7:34 AM

Wow, the emotional twist at the end is heart-wrenching my friend! I am saddened by the incredibly downward feeling at the end, but the main part of the write, the heart of it all, was very heart-warning, so beautifully crafted! Then ending just brings it all down to reality...the way we truly think of the situation, and what really happens when our loved ones leave us! What a grandiose piece, Great Work Rick!!

November 17, 2017 at 9:15 PM

Very touching poem, Richard. I like it very much. It is extremely endearing.

Richard Lamoureux

November 18, 2017 at 3:30 PM

Thanks Line.

Elizabeth Kinch

November 17, 2017 at 4:21 PM

Such an emotional end to a wonderful write Richard.

Richard Lamoureux

November 17, 2017 at 5:56 PM

Thanks Elizabeth.

November 17, 2017 at 4:03 PM

That's such a touching poem and a fav.

Richard Lamoureux

November 17, 2017 at 4:05 PM

Thanks Arthur.

November 17, 2017 at 3:40 PM

A very powerful poem Richard. And it touches upon the survivor guilt of those wishing they could have known more and done more to stop it. Well written!

Richard Lamoureux

November 17, 2017 at 4:05 PM

Thanks Heidi.

Anne-Lise Andresen

November 17, 2017 at 2:59 PM

- We are always wise after the event ... but that's what we learn from - A lovely poem, Richard - Best wishes for a great weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Richard Lamoureux

November 17, 2017 at 3:01 PM

Thanks Anne-Lise. Hugs Rick.

Eileen Manassian

November 17, 2017 at 1:31 PM

Good write, dear. If only....I'm a bit gloomy of late. Was thinking of writing a poem about it...I'm not even inspired to do that. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux

November 17, 2017 at 1:35 PM

Sorry to hear you are gloomy. I hope the clouds separate and that your spirits rise to greet the sky. Hugs Rick.

November 17, 2017 at 1:10 PM

Such an emotional poem Richard which can apply to the break up of a relationship but also to suicide:-( that final couplet is so heartbreaking and made me think if only i could have done more. :-( hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

November 17, 2017 at 1:17 PM

Hugs back Jan. Your response is perfect, that was my intention for this piece. I wrote it for our mental health centre in Kelowna.

November 17, 2017 at 12:43 PM

Well written, Richard--you depicted so many emotions!

Richard Lamoureux

November 17, 2017 at 12:53 PM

Thanks Vijay.

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