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When You

When

When you smiled
I thought "How beautiful you are."
When you cried
I witnessed the depth of you
When you were angry
I recognized that you had been hurt
When you laughed
I could feel you healing
When you played
I remembered how to be a child
When you danced
I felt my heart flutter
When you left
I wished I had known you better..

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Vladislav Raven Date: 11/6/2018 4:25:00 PM Hi Richard, with perfection you play the heartstrings with this excellent work. You write from the heart and your words caress the heart of the reader. Your golden pen will forever sing Richard. Another poetic gem my friend. The words paint a living canvas. Have a wonderful Monday. Your friend always....Mike. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/6/2018 10:55:00 PM Thanks for the uplifting comment.

Rhoda Tripp Date: 12/10/2017 5:04:00 PM Awwww...Richard. A beautifully written piece reminding us to appreciate the people in our lives. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/15/2017 8:07:00 AM Thanks for visiting Rhoda.

Afzal Nusker Date: 12/6/2017 11:59:00 PM Simple & Sweet. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/7/2017 8:55:00 AM Thanks again Afzal.

Kristina Whitmore Date: 12/2/2017 3:06:00 AM A serenade to my poetic heart. I love the passion of using 'I' throughout and the effort of noticing a significant other. Like a sweet yet sad love note. Enjoyed reading! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/2/2017 9:02:00 AM Thanks Kristina, it has been nice having you visit this morning.

Joanna Daniel Date: 11/23/2017 7:00:00 AM Simple lines, but touching, Richard:) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/27/2017 3:07:00 PM Thanks Jo.

Judith S Date: 11/21/2017 9:35:00 AM A surprise ending! So sad. LOVED reading this Richard. ~ Judy Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/21/2017 1:48:00 PM Thanks Judith.

Nette Onclaud Date: 11/19/2017 1:53:00 PM so touched by this beautiful and sensitive work, rich...i felt this from the heart!..huggs Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/21/2017 1:49:00 PM Thanks Nette, hugs back.

Freddie Robinson Jr. Date: 11/18/2017 11:09:00 PM Exceptional emotional write, Richard. Seems like a DM form poem to me ... dramatic monologue. A dark, sad and heart piercing poem. Pure poetry. Love and joy always. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/19/2017 12:20:00 AM Thanks, I’ll go with that Freddie. Hugs Rick.

Silent One Date: 11/18/2017 12:17:00 PM This is so sad Richard.. I hope this is not a personal experience.. So sad when a child dies.. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/18/2017 3:30:00 PM no, it is not a personal experience. Thanks for the concern. This could be any number of scenarios from someone leaving a relationship to suicide or someone passing on. Maybe even a child leaving home. Each reader will insert their own meaning. Thanks for commenting.

Russell Sivey Date: 11/18/2017 7:34:00 AM Wow, the emotional twist at the end is heart-wrenching my friend! I am saddened by the incredibly downward feeling at the end, but the main part of the write, the heart of it all, was very heart-warning, so beautifully crafted! Then ending just brings it all down to reality...the way we truly think of the situation, and what really happens when our loved ones leave us! What a grandiose piece, Great Work Rick!! Login to Reply

Line Gauthier Date: 11/17/2017 9:15:00 PM Very touching poem, Richard. I like it very much. It is extremely endearing. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/18/2017 3:30:00 PM Thanks Line.

Elizabeth Kinch Date: 11/17/2017 4:21:00 PM Such an emotional end to a wonderful write Richard. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/17/2017 5:56:00 PM Thanks Elizabeth.

Arthur Vaso Date: 11/17/2017 4:03:00 PM That's such a touching poem and a fav. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/17/2017 4:05:00 PM Thanks Arthur.

Heidi Sands Date: 11/17/2017 3:40:00 PM A very powerful poem Richard. And it touches upon the survivor guilt of those wishing they could have known more and done more to stop it. Well written! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/17/2017 4:05:00 PM Thanks Heidi.

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 11/17/2017 2:59:00 PM - We are always wise after the event ... but that's what we learn from - A lovely poem, Richard - Best wishes for a great weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/17/2017 3:01:00 PM Thanks Anne-Lise. Hugs Rick.

Eileen Manassian Date: 11/17/2017 1:31:00 PM Good write, dear. If only....I'm a bit gloomy of late. Was thinking of writing a poem about it...I'm not even inspired to do that. Hugs Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/17/2017 1:35:00 PM Sorry to hear you are gloomy. I hope the clouds separate and that your spirits rise to greet the sky. Hugs Rick.

Jan Allison Date: 11/17/2017 1:10:00 PM Such an emotional poem Richard which can apply to the break up of a relationship but also to suicide:-( that final couplet is so heartbreaking and made me think if only i could have done more. :-( hugs jan xx Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/17/2017 1:17:00 PM Hugs back Jan. Your response is perfect, that was my intention for this piece. I wrote it for our mental health centre in Kelowna.

Vijay Pandit Date: 11/17/2017 12:43:00 PM Well written, Richard--you depicted so many emotions! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/17/2017 12:53:00 PM Thanks Vijay.