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When the Flowers of Youth Fell

When the Flowers of Youth Fell Winter stayed late that year courting Spring with a fury. Beautiful gifts of snow and dazzling ice, he gave her. It was during such courtship I found myself lost -- adrift in a place that once was .... decades from this century. Where mud and blood held hands beneath duty and honour and kindred flowers fell to sounds of bugle and drum. Smoke arose through Spring's tears. Images of Blue and Grey pilfered my breath as cannons rained thunder upon the brave. How was this happening? This was not where I belonged! My time was not this place and I wanted to go home. Where Winter courted Spring and snowmen fell -- not flowers -- upon the muddy ground as snow reigned upon the brave. The smell of gun powder danced about my head and nose like spirits for the faint -- arousing life ... far from home. "Get down! Get down! Get down!" The half-crazed voice plunged me into the mud and blood and I lay frozen in fear beneath his weight ... and the cold. So cold, no hearts were beating, no breaths were being drawn, just the smell of sweat and blood. The smell of rain and death. Clutched tightly in his pale fist a tattered blood-stained note bore the words, "Please ... for mama ...." I tried but could not scream. And, I felt daylight passing .... As shadows took the brave, Winter's folly tamed sweet Spring with final coats of snow .... and snowmen fell -- not flowers. ©deborah burch 3.08.2013

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Date: 11/19/2017 10:05:00 AM
A really beautiful poem, I truly don t have words for it, you ve explained everything beautifully and everything about this poem was perfect, continue to write beautiful poems like this
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Date: 4/2/2017 6:35:00 AM
Deborah this is a remarkable piece. How fiendishly clever to use flowers and muddy trenches and when you fell , we fell with you and saw the blood stained note. From a womens world of flowers to a mans domain is exceptional. A mix of the present and history with such emotive content is rare.
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Date: 3/11/2017 4:28:00 PM
HEAVY! This drew me in after the first stanza.
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Deborah Burch
Date: 3/11/2017 4:46:00 PM
:) thank you David. You're very kind. Hugggs.
Date: 2/8/2017 10:50:00 PM
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Deborah Burch
Date: 3/11/2017 4:46:00 PM
Thank you Donna:) hugs. deb
Date: 1/16/2017 7:35:00 AM
I love this poem. You did take me back so that I could smell and hear the grimness of war. Well done! Kathy
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Deborah Burch
Date: 3/11/2017 4:45:00 PM
Thank you Kathleen!! I appreciate your kindness!! Big Hugggs. Deb
Date: 9/6/2015 4:18:00 PM
A beautiful sentiment and story. We only hope that people will learn from the past.
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Deborah Burch
Date: 3/11/2017 4:44:00 PM
Thank you Duke!! Wouldn't it be nice if they did. Hugggs. Deb
Date: 7/5/2013 6:16:00 PM
And the rain wets both blue and gray - who live to fight another day - If thunder o'er the cannon roar - can it mean the war is o'er..... This is a great post and you are to be congratulated.... Jake
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Date: 6/1/2013 7:55:00 AM
Beautiful, mesmerizing. A well deserved win
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Date: 5/30/2013 9:48:00 PM
Deborah, Congratulations with your awesome winning free verse poem... xox~ LINDA
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Date: 5/30/2013 4:04:00 PM
Elements used in your poem made it extraordinary. Filled with visual descriptions that let me enter your dramatic penned words and held me there. Deborah a BIG congratulation on your well deserved 1st place win. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 5/30/2013 4:17:00 AM
I was sucked in and mesmerized after the first line...Stunning and eloquently written...How you do dat? - Toby
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Tim Ryerson
Date: 5/30/2013 4:21:00 AM
'Where mud and blood held hands'...Mercy me
Date: 5/29/2013 7:10:00 PM
This is wonderful...well deserved win!!!! Congratulations, Deborah!
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Date: 5/28/2013 9:22:00 PM
awesome write...congrats on your win
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Date: 5/28/2013 8:49:00 PM
HEY! This is well deserving of its top honours. THIS IS FANTASTIC. Congrats, hon, this is one that merits publication, somewhere! Its voice is so strong, its repetition BANG on and the cuts exactly were they should be... art! So glad I read this! Hugs, Cyndi
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Date: 5/28/2013 8:00:00 PM
How appropriate this fine poem should win on your memorial day weekend. Congratulations, Deborah.-Red
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Date: 5/28/2013 6:28:00 PM
BIG Congrad's on your win! Light & Love
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Date: 5/28/2013 6:24:00 PM
Deborah congratulation on your well deserve win. This is an exceptional and heartfelt poem. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 5/28/2013 6:11:00 PM
Beautiful Poem! Deborah Congrats on the win thanks for submitting to my contest. Please do so again. Kim
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Date: 4/29/2013 11:25:00 PM
Love , love , love this write, reminds me of North and South/ Patrice Swayze. fav's ;}
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Date: 4/19/2013 6:40:00 PM
ahh you put it here..fret..now it is published..Light & Love
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Date: 4/18/2013 10:54:00 PM
awesome write... enjoyed so very much...thank you dearest Deborah for sharing your charming poem <3 Sk
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Date: 4/17/2013 5:49:00 PM
This is but one more reason I am reluctant to try writing free verse. You set the standard alarmingly high. I thoroughly am in awe of talent like yours.... Fantastic!! to my favs Please don't laugh at my meager offerings..... Jake
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Date: 4/12/2013 1:48:00 PM
This is crazy good.....I will have to fave it
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Date: 4/11/2013 2:46:00 PM
powerful write, my friend. Congrats on your wins : )
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Date: 4/9/2013 8:08:00 PM
thank you for drawing me in with the first gripping image of a long winter stay... however, glad the flowers, will enjoy the spring... as I will...xox~ Linda
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