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Oh why oh why don't you clean your room I wish I had heeded my mother’s words For I’m sure many a mother has said this to their child But fate intervened and the dust still hasn’t settled - In fact I’ve not spoken to my mother for over a week Last weekend I met the man of my dreams – James Tall, dark and oh so handsome, like a young George Clooney His number was etched in the thick layer of dust on the dresser My mother took matters into her own hands She decided to dust and tidy my room HOW COULD SHE DO THIS TO ME! His number is erased forever - I have no way of contacting him Guess I have learned a VERY valuable lesson NEXT time I meet someone … I will write his number in my diary! 25th February 2015 Fictional write for the Gathering Dust’ Contest - John Lawless

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Date: 2/27/2015 6:33:00 PM
This poem awesome Jan. Pure entertainment it kind of reminds me of an episode of the MTV sow Daria lol
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Date: 2/27/2015 6:35:00 PM
Thanks Gerald - its not a show I am familiar with - would make a good short film script lol:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/26/2015 6:04:00 AM
This is so cute Jan. Great write. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Janet
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Date: 2/26/2015 6:23:00 AM
Thanks Janet - I am still retaining my sense of humour:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/25/2015 8:54:00 PM
witty witty JAn.. :)! awesome write.. :)!
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Date: 2/26/2015 1:49:00 AM
Thanks Olive:-) Always a pleasure to see your beautiful smile:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/25/2015 6:37:00 PM
Well, it was great and convincing.
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Date: 2/25/2015 7:06:00 PM
Thank you so much again ML:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 2/25/2015 5:35:00 PM
Oops! I would opt for the diary, too.
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Date: 2/25/2015 6:05:00 PM
LOL - pure fiction write - just needed a bit of humour at the moment:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 2/25/2015 3:41:00 PM
Enjoyed reading this one today..I got a chuckle..Thanks for stopping by..I am sorry that you are sick..The illnesses floating around this year seem to come on and linger..I hope that you are fully well soon..Sara
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Date: 2/25/2015 3:45:00 PM
I have a fluey cold - never a good time but especially now when I have so much to deal with for dad's funeral. Glad you enjoyed my poem and thanks for commenting Sara:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 2/25/2015 2:28:00 PM
this was such a very cute idea you had for the contest. Gosh, I hope I can come up with something just as witty. GREAT poem, Jan.
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Date: 2/25/2015 3:10:00 PM
I wrote it in 10 mins before I went to bed at 3am this morning - my cold was keeping me up and I couldn't settle - thought I would go for humour for a change lol - despite everything Andrea I can still laugh:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/25/2015 1:37:00 PM
Don't worry Jan...sprinkle some flour over the top, blow it away and what was written will appear as if by magic! George Clooney, eh!! and I thought it was me:) .. as Arthur would say! hugs // paul
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Date: 2/25/2015 3:08:00 PM
Of course Paul - you are next in line after George ;-) lol :-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/25/2015 1:09:00 PM
darn!... do the tricks, jan-- look for his names in the phone directory, hire an investigator!.. so charming, playful!.. huggs as I pray for your healing..
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Date: 2/25/2015 1:30:00 PM
Just a bit of fun Nette - I am in need of humour in my life at this sad time so I went for a fun aspect for the contest:-)
Date: 2/25/2015 10:14:00 AM
Now that's perfect ! You sure the dust mites didn't eat it ! ;) Great write dear poet...have a wonderful week.....much love, james
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Date: 2/25/2015 10:22:00 AM
Thanks James - just a fun write:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 2/25/2015 10:13:00 AM
I'm glad this is a fictional write, Jan. You really have bounced back. I see you are in your element! A 7. GL in the contest! :D Kim
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Date: 2/25/2015 10:22:00 AM
I still have mys sense of humour Kim - I just write for contests and hope for the best - am used to N/A these days lol :-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 2/25/2015 6:32:00 AM
Excellent. Very beautifully carved. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs
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Date: 2/25/2015 7:22:00 AM
Thanks Ravi:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 2/25/2015 4:29:00 AM
- Yes, learned a lesson ........ or not :))) - Good luck in the contest! - (My thoughts are with you in your sorrow ) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/25/2015 4:40:00 AM
Thanks Anne Lise - I am coping ok so far:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/24/2015 11:28:00 PM
Lol....love it Jan...they never clean their room unless you start doing for them. Then magically they appear and complain you are doing it wrong.....hugs Tim
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Date: 2/25/2015 1:38:00 AM
Thanks Tim - I must add 'Irony' to my categories for the poem:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/24/2015 10:16:00 PM
Great write Jan. I don't suppose there would be much chance of this happening these days God bless the mobile smart Phone! One press of a button and you have his life's history. On the other hand it may give Mother a bit more to worry about than just the dust. Stay safe. Love Shane xxx
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Date: 2/25/2015 1:37:00 AM
As you know Shane I am a technological dinosaur Shane lol - but I have to agree 100% with your comment:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 2/24/2015 9:52:00 PM
This poem will clean up in the contest for sure!!!!
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Date: 2/25/2015 1:36:00 AM
LOL Arthur - my humour isn't always appreciated here ! Hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/24/2015 8:36:00 PM
You always never fail to write beautiful poems like this Jan! A 7 from me!
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Date: 2/24/2015 8:40:00 PM
Thank you for your support Lei:-) hugs Jan xx

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