Jan Allison Poet Free verse

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When the Dust Finally Settles

Oh why oh why don't you clean your room
I wish I had heeded my mother’s words
For I’m sure many a mother has said this to their child
But fate intervened and the dust still hasn’t settled -
In fact I’ve not spoken to my mother for over a week

 
Last weekend I met the man of my dreams – James
Tall, dark and oh so handsome, like a young George Clooney
His number was etched in the thick layer of dust on the dresser


My mother took matters into her own hands
She decided to dust and tidy my room
HOW COULD SHE DO THIS TO ME!
His number is erased forever  - 
I have no way of contacting him
Guess I have learned a VERY valuable lesson
NEXT time I meet someone …
I will write his number in my diary!


25th February 2015
Fictional write for the Gathering Dust’ Contest  - John Lawless

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Jerry Swana February 27, 2015 at 6:33 PM This poem awesome Jan. Pure entertainment it kind of reminds me of an episode of the MTV sow Daria lol Jan Allison February 27, 2015 at 6:35 PM Thanks Gerald - its not a show I am familiar with - would make a good short film script lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Janet Eaton February 26, 2015 at 6:04 AM This is so cute Jan. Great write. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Janet Jan Allison February 26, 2015 at 6:23 AM Thanks Janet - I am still retaining my sense of humour:-) Hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser February 25, 2015 at 8:54 PM witty witty JAn.. :)! awesome write.. :)! Jan Allison February 26, 2015 at 1:49 AM Thanks Olive:-) Always a pleasure to see your beautiful smile:-) Hugs Jan xx

M. L. Kiser February 25, 2015 at 6:37 PM Well, it was great and convincing. Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 7:06 PM Thank you so much again ML:-) Hugs jan xx

M. L. Kiser February 25, 2015 at 5:35 PM Oops! I would opt for the diary, too. Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 6:05 PM LOL - pure fiction write - just needed a bit of humour at the moment:-) Hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick February 25, 2015 at 3:41 PM Enjoyed reading this one today..I got a chuckle..Thanks for stopping by..I am sorry that you are sick..The illnesses floating around this year seem to come on and linger..I hope that you are fully well soon..Sara Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 3:45 PM I have a fluey cold - never a good time but especially now when I have so much to deal with for dad's funeral. Glad you enjoyed my poem and thanks for commenting Sara:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich February 25, 2015 at 2:28 PM this was such a very cute idea you had for the contest. Gosh, I hope I can come up with something just as witty. GREAT poem, Jan. Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 3:10 PM I wrote it in 10 mins before I went to bed at 3am this morning - my cold was keeping me up and I couldn't settle - thought I would go for humour for a change lol - despite everything Andrea I can still laugh:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus February 25, 2015 at 1:37 PM Don't worry Jan...sprinkle some flour over the top, blow it away and what was written will appear as if by magic! George Clooney, eh!! and I thought it was me:) .. as Arthur would say! hugs // paul Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 3:08 PM Of course Paul - you are next in line after George ;-) lol :-) Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud February 25, 2015 at 1:09 PM darn!... do the tricks, jan-- look for his names in the phone directory, hire an investigator!.. so charming, playful!.. huggs as I pray for your healing.. Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 1:30 PM Just a bit of fun Nette - I am in need of humour in my life at this sad time so I went for a fun aspect for the contest:-)

James Peranteau February 25, 2015 at 10:14 AM Now that's perfect ! You sure the dust mites didn't eat it ! ;) Great write dear poet...have a wonderful week.....much love, james Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 10:22 AM Thanks James - just a fun write:-) Hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez February 25, 2015 at 10:13 AM I'm glad this is a fictional write, Jan. You really have bounced back. I see you are in your element! A 7. GL in the contest! :D Kim Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 10:22 AM I still have mys sense of humour Kim - I just write for contests and hope for the best - am used to N/A these days lol :-) Hugs jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam February 25, 2015 at 6:32 AM Excellent. Very beautifully carved. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 7:22 AM Thanks Ravi:-) Hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen February 25, 2015 at 4:29 AM - Yes, learned a lesson ........ or not :))) - Good luck in the contest! - (My thoughts are with you in your sorrow ) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 4:40 AM Thanks Anne Lise - I am coping ok so far:-) Hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith February 24, 2015 at 11:28 PM Lol....love it Jan...they never clean their room unless you start doing for them. Then magically they appear and complain you are doing it wrong.....hugs Tim Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 1:38 AM Thanks Tim - I must add 'Irony' to my categories for the poem:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shane Cooper February 24, 2015 at 10:16 PM Great write Jan. I don't suppose there would be much chance of this happening these days God bless the mobile smart Phone! One press of a button and you have his life's history. On the other hand it may give Mother a bit more to worry about than just the dust. Stay safe. Love Shane xxx Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 1:37 AM As you know Shane I am a technological dinosaur Shane lol - but I have to agree 100% with your comment:-) Hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso February 24, 2015 at 9:52 PM This poem will clean up in the contest for sure!!!! Jan Allison February 25, 2015 at 1:36 AM LOL Arthur - my humour isn't always appreciated here ! Hugs Jan xx

Lei Strauss February 24, 2015 at 8:36 PM You always never fail to write beautiful poems like this Jan! A 7 from me! Jan Allison February 24, 2015 at 8:40 PM Thank you for your support Lei:-) hugs Jan xx