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For JCB Brul's When Summer is gone poetry contest

 

Faint scents still linger, as summer slowly fades. Sun silently hides behind smoky clouds, as raindrops hum in a jaded symphony, plummeting against misty windows, vibrating against puddles upon pavements. Leaves drift in the chill, revealing bare branches, rustling in the breeze then soaking on the ground, as gloomy skies colour moonlight into monochrome. As shivery spirits seek shelter, swan song flowers soak in melancholic tones, reminiscent of a forgotten mother's lullaby, whispering softly, but never faltering. Nature's nakedness consumes the aura of my oasis, as cold ghosts reappear, reflecting in resentful regret. Ebony hues discolour the textured illusion of my rainbow, as my soul serenades its harmony for hibernation. Children of summer are like a leaf, vibrant with colourful hues in spring, but misplaced in Autumn, easily carried away with zephyrs.

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Date: 8/9/2024 7:19:00 AM
Congratulations on your poem being on the winners' list. Way to go. Great to see it there. Sara K
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Date: 7/25/2024 2:05:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your lovely "When Summer Is Gone" write. Many love the summer time & will cry in a few week when it is long gone. Do not worry for it will return next year. I will be very happy to see/feel Autumn with cooler days. Autumn is a great time of the year... Have a wonderful day writing away................
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Date: 7/19/2024 10:51:00 PM
Very enjoyed read! Have a wonderful day lovely Silent One ~ AA
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Date: 7/18/2024 4:41:00 PM
as gloomy skies colour moonlight into monochrome…what a great metaphor at the end! ((hugs))
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Date: 7/18/2024 4:32:00 PM
for some reason, I find the brooding tone of your summer to be quite delectable...a keeper this one, S!
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Date: 7/18/2024 4:26:00 PM
My favorite part “ As shivery spirits seek shelter, swan song flowers soak in melancholic tones, reminiscent of a forgotten mother's lullaby, whispering softly, but never faltering.” Another gem! Best wishes in the contest!
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Date: 7/18/2024 3:48:00 PM
You have described summer's departure so eloquently and profoundly. These metaphors used are amazing and relatable ." Sun silently hides behind smoky clouds, as raindrops hum in a jaded symphony, plummeting against misty windows, vibrating against puddles upon pavements." The mood of autumn is quiet and we may get distracted by it. "Cold ghost" could be pain, archived memories, losses. etc Great one Silent. Autumn is also a season where we reflect, rebuild and even get accolades on our fruits.
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Date: 7/18/2024 2:00:00 PM
raindrops hum in a jaded symphony,.. ooo brothaaa love that line !! vibrating against puddles upon pavements. Absolutely stunning imagery!! cold ghosts reappear, reflecting in resentful regret... alliterations r on fireeee!! You have woven such a colorful piece using just the bliss of elements!!! What a treat brothaaa !!..
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Date: 7/18/2024 1:55:00 PM
This is beautiful- nostalgic and sensitive, too- really enjoyed reading
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Date: 7/18/2024 1:41:00 PM
"As shivery spirits seek shelter, swan song flowers soak in melancholic tones, reminiscent of a forgotten mother's lullaby," -- Wow. Talk about forlorn, desolate. -- "Children of summer are like a leaf, vibrant with colourful hues in spring, but misplaced in Autumn" -- sums it up perfectly. Well done!
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Date: 7/18/2024 1:19:00 PM
Vividly descriptive and very expressive, S. O. Janice
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Date: 7/18/2024 12:27:00 PM
Very descriptive work for the contest. It reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Sara K
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Date: 7/18/2024 11:23:00 AM
Oh what a deep write! I am sure this must have been a quick scribble from you artistic mind and ink. I felt the depth of what youv depicted here in the most seamless manner. The flow and use of metaphors and imagery here is impeccable! I especially love the ending. How ones with naive and young hearts, are fragile, and are vibrant but misplaced in autumn, easily carried away. I think and feel like i can resonate with that. Your use of alliterations and colors and how youv also written “ swan song flowers soak in melancholic tones, reminiscent of a forgotten mother's lullaby,” how evocative! And soulfully moving! Pleasure reading this poetic gem! Best wishes!
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