When Summer Is Gone

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*1st Place*
When summer was gone
Poetic Form: Free Verse
Contest Judged: 2024 July 24
Sponsored by: Jcb Brul
I searched 'ere the dawn, where could it have gone, for now, it possesses me, as a mystery, till dawn met me. I've no rhyme or reason that a loved entity goes awry, having to comb with despair and melancholy choking air, hence, I must cease or I will be deceased. I choose to be, than not to be, mid the numbers of worth--counting. Now that I've deduced the severance of said company, to be amiss, or, lost as in unrecoverable. So, I will forge ahead, much like this climbing star training its new day as it's backpacking a whole quarter welcoming--it's Fall. Oh my, much ado has gone awry, high and low, 'neath a crooked sky. My thorough efforts abandoned my fruit of labor, with harvest ripening fields, and the forests crispy hues. I have forsaken a driven entity that proposes life. A ray of hope, beaming from a drifting star hovering over the lost, now found. There is still a sliver of time enough. I must tighten the notches so that its stretch will be of favor to the distant ones who'll all rise across the seven seas, for I am the soloist. The powers that made me, an Indian, task Summer to stay awhile to hear my drumbeat.

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Date: 8/5/2024 1:59:00 PM
Congratulations on your winner in this very interesting contest. Way to go. Sara K
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Hilo Poet
Date: 8/5/2024 10:05:00 PM
Thank you, Sara, you are a good soul. Aloha William
Date: 7/25/2024 1:27:00 PM
Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your summer write again. Have a wonderful day writing away................
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Date: 7/25/2024 1:42:00 PM
Paula, I emphasize agreement, tho' I know it's pride and scriptrually it kills from within and it's 1 of the 7 deadlies, yet there's pride in knowing The Word, ergo, pride can be directed for good, as well as, evil. So the 7 sins are survivable if one control themselves. Aloha William
Date: 7/15/2024 4:49:00 PM
nicely arranged with poetic restraint about bidding summer goodbye...sometimes we feel the need not to get emotional abt farewells...good job, hilo
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Hilo Poet
Date: 7/15/2024 9:04:00 PM
Nette, I appreciate your thought-filled sharing, most kind of you, Aloha William
Date: 7/15/2024 11:46:00 AM
I enjoyed reading about your summer write. What a great ending. "Good Luck"  Looks like we both did this one. Have a blessed day writing away.....................
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Date: 7/15/2024 4:19:00 PM
Oops, sorry, thought I left a post. I read your mention, and left post-haste, a worthy departue--and return, Mahalo Paula, Aloha William
Date: 7/15/2024 10:57:00 AM
Wonderful poem.
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Hilo Poet
Date: 7/15/2024 12:40:00 PM
Mahalo Jay. Aloha William
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