When Snowy Petals Fell Ct

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I smiled when snowy petals fell,
So cold and wet against my eye.
The frost of age — its spellbound knell.
My waning wake; it’s densely spry.

My age old tongue catches the drift.
Soft wrap, about my arms, a gift.
Fresh scent, a lift — newborn adorned.
The clefts, where light does land, forewarned.

When I smiled, snowy petals fell
Against my eye, so cold and wet.
The spellbound knell, its frost of age,
It’s densely spry, my waning wake.

My wobbly knees snowspent,* they cry
To gentle Lord before I die.


9/3/2020
Contest - Charonnet
Sponsor - Charles Messina
8 syllables per line - howmanysyllables.com

*snowspent - my word - drained of energy, and falling

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Jan Allison

Date: 10/13/2020 10:02:00 AM

such delicate imagery Kim, Many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/13/2020 4:48:00 PM

Thank you, Jan!

Jo Chamberlain

Date: 10/13/2020 8:07:00 AM

I enjoyed your poem, congratulations on your placement. :-)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/13/2020 4:47:00 PM

Thank you, Joanna!

Charles Messina

Date: 10/13/2020 7:08:00 AM

Kim, beautiful poetry as usual. It's probably my fault for not explaining it well enough, but the format was just a little off (My apologies). Anyway, congratulations on your placement in my contest. I hope all is well. Hugs Charlie

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/13/2020 4:46:00 PM

Thanks, Charlie! In what way? Send me email. Thanks.