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When Silence Speaks

"When Silence Speaks" poetry contest.
Sponsor: Craig Cornish 
2nd Place. 
Date Submitted: 07/05/2024


the air conditioner soothing my heated skin
fire brick curtains with their red dyed orange 
bumblebee rays peeking through gaps in between,
they have so much to say
so much to say to me

ghosts of muffled laughter snuggling my ears
crinkled edges of faded eyes and scratchy rugs beneath my feet
labored breaths running after a face resembling my own,
your lingering warmth has so much to say
so much to say to me

a hand in mine and a skip in my step
wandering, marveling at street vendors, the bustling market
lavender dreams blooming under our eyelids,
that quiet understanding has so much to say
so much to say to me

heaving shoulders in a dimly lit bathroom,
tear tracks melding into the glass of a splintered mirror 
this lonely silence has howled its piece,
now I have nothing to say
nothing to say to me.

Copyright © Hiba Junaid | Year Posted 2024

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Charlotte Puddifoot Date: 5/16/2024 7:47:00 AM an excellent poem; vivid images with just the right amount of descriptive language, great word combos, and i like how you've ended each stanza with the call and echo effect - congrats on your well deserved win in craig's contest, and thanks for your inspiring comment today on my poem :) Login to Reply Hiba Junaid Date: 5/16/2024 8:33:00 AM Thank you so very much Charlotte <33 I am honored to have you visit my page.

Matt Caliri Date: 5/13/2024 5:22:00 PM Love your style. Fantastic descriptive writing with a satisfying "call back" with the refrain of "something to say" then opposingly "nothing to say." And easy ride of a read with a wonderfully tight structure. Login to Reply Hiba Junaid Date: 5/13/2024 11:35:00 PM Thanks so much for sharing your invaluable thoughts. Much Blessings <3333

Sara Kendrick Date: 5/13/2024 2:48:00 PM Interesting winner. Congratulations. Sara K Login to Reply Hiba Junaid Date: 5/13/2024 11:35:00 PM Thank you! <3

Mark Massey Date: 5/12/2024 5:57:00 AM This is haunting. Well done Hiba. Congrats as well Login to Reply Hiba Junaid Date: 5/12/2024 7:02:00 AM Thanks so much! <33

Sotto Poet Date: 5/11/2024 7:53:00 PM The poem is superb because it makes the reader reflect on their feelings and reminisce about other times. A deep sensation of solitude and quietness is the result. Nostalgia, desire, loneliness, and connection are some of the topics explored in the poem. Some examples of phrases that elicit sensual feelings include "fire brick curtains," "bumblebee rays," and "lavender dreams." Congratulations on your win! Login to Reply Hiba Junaid Date: 5/11/2024 11:39:00 PM Thank you so, so very much!!!!!! for taking the time out to write a comment and such a motivating one at that. I really appreciate it <333

Ink Empress Date: 5/10/2024 1:01:00 AM Now i have nothing to say, what a line to end this heart touching and moving writ that flows with such creative lines. I felt so much reading this, the angst and suppressed thoughts as well as the longing, for so much more. I especially loved the lines “ lavender dreams blooming under our eyelids,” “ ghosts of muffled laughter snuggling my ears crinkled edges of faded eyes and scratchy rugs beneath my feet“ you have a very descriptive way with words dear hiba! Pleasure reading this! Best wishes Login to Reply Hiba Junaid Date: 5/10/2024 2:08:00 AM I am so moved by your kind and encouraging comment. I am glad that you were touched by my words - it is the greatest compliment. Be Blessed.