When Old Men Cry

when the brain is bold
the pen is pregnant;
and nine months stretch
out over an inch 
under the title still
like expectant father
waiting for a kick
and you’ll feel a flurry
but knowing this can be a trick,
those uterine lines
need nutrition,
don’t tear at that gut feeling:
let them gestate for
monday evenings
exceptional in convention
when your lady spills her drink
all over the bathroom floor,
and now your water’s breaking, too
all down your cheeks
and onto your
baby.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 3/23/2012 12:49:00 PM
Very interesting metaphor you develop. Nice work. Congratulations on being featured. - Chuck
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Date: 3/23/2012 6:42:00 AM
interesting way to compare writing a piece of work to having a child - like this very much!
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Date: 3/22/2012 7:03:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved featured write this week Samuel. Love,Carol
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Date: 3/19/2012 5:47:00 PM
This is very clever. I love how you used the common idea of pregnancy and incorporated into this interesting concept. Welcome to the website by the way. Brilliant. Always, Laura
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Date: 3/19/2012 7:28:00 AM
Dear Samuel, Thank you for your creative writing this morning. I've been reading and have been surprised and moved and loving it. This one, in particular, moves far beyond comparing the poet to a father. It holds images and thoughts so specific and illustrative that it begs to be read again and again. love, Kathy
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Date: 3/16/2012 1:31:00 PM
Hello from Norway Samuel :Welcome to P-Soup hope you will writing and reading alot poem here.Thank you for sharing this today.- oxox hugs Anne-Lise
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