When Loves Right

Don’t try so hard sweet girl
It rides on waves that curl
That shine like gems in light
By moon on seas at night

The joy you seek is here
This place has naught to fear
As fish in shade seem dark
But glow with sun’s sweet spark

Just reach with love in hand
And cast it in the sand
As grains join then to hide
Your love moves with the tide

It can’t be held that tight
Just wait it comes in sight
Then let the ebb and flow
Take hold and watch it grow

You’ll see true love in time
Grows depth like aged fine wine
So hold not tight my dear
Trust time to make it clear.
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2/8/2018

For 120 Word/Syllable Contest
Sponsor:  Silent One

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 6/8/2018 11:03:00 PM
Judith, I love your beautiful rhyming lines..much enjoyed!
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Date: 2/23/2018 2:15:00 PM
My dear friend Judy, your fantastic rhythm and rhymes glide me through your enchanting poem on silken tides of beautifully poetic lines.. a lovely poem of love with insightful depth. A belated congrats on your win with this alluring write. Warmest wishes my NE friend! ~Susan
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Date: 2/27/2018 11:18:00 AM
My dear NE friend!! I have been so absent from PS lately. And now I find your very beautiful comments on my poem. Thank you so much for your visits!!! I truly appreciate you :) ~Judy
Date: 2/14/2018 5:18:00 PM
Girl, was it write for you like it was for me, lol. I love you, Judith. Great job. Creative.
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Date: 2/27/2018 11:17:00 AM
Thank you Normie.
Date: 2/12/2018 4:04:00 PM
Congrats on your win Judith
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Date: 2/13/2018 2:01:00 PM
Thank you so much Joseph. ~ Judy
Date: 2/11/2018 8:26:00 PM
Congratulations on your winning write, Judith, enjoyed reading,,, it's not easy to use one syllable words and even harder with a rhyme .. Hugs Eve
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Date: 2/13/2018 2:01:00 PM
Thank you Eve! Best, Judy
Date: 2/10/2018 10:08:00 AM
Beautiful flow and rhythm. Congrats on your win, Judy.
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Date: 2/10/2018 9:18:00 PM
Thank you so much Line. Very much appreciate your visit :) ~Judy
Date: 2/10/2018 10:01:00 AM
Hi Judy, As your title and poem state so well, "When love is right" all is right. Good job.Congratulations on your winning write:-) Alexis
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Date: 2/10/2018 9:17:00 PM
Thank you Alexis! I always appreciate your kind support and visits :) ~Judy
Date: 2/10/2018 9:27:00 AM
Nicely written, Judy, as the song goes "you can't hurry love, you just have to wait" and the perfect love is worth waiting for. Congrats on your win. John
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Date: 2/10/2018 9:16:00 PM
I know the song John! :) Thanks so much for your kind comments and visit :) ~Judy
Date: 2/10/2018 9:15:00 AM
When love is right, it is perfect.. Congratualtions on your placement in the contest Judy..
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Date: 2/10/2018 9:15:00 PM
Thank you so much Silent One. I love participating in these contests you've created with strict requirements. ~Judy
Date: 2/9/2018 11:36:00 AM
A very lovely poem ... Good luck...
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Date: 2/10/2018 9:14:00 PM
Thank you so much for your visit Pashang. ~Judy
Date: 2/9/2018 7:21:00 AM
Tender and profound poem cheering the heart dear, Judith!
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Date: 2/10/2018 9:11:00 PM
Thank you so much Demetrios! ~Judy
Date: 2/8/2018 4:00:00 PM
beautiful, time for everything, i loved the flow of this one, good luck in the contest, cheers :)
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Date: 2/10/2018 9:08:00 PM
Thank you my Aussie friend :) ~Judy
Date: 2/8/2018 3:06:00 PM
- A wonderful description of love, Judy "Grows deep like aged fine wine" - Excellent poem !!! - Best wishes in the contest ... a winning poem in my eyes and heart :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/10/2018 9:08:00 PM
Thank you dear Anne-Lise :) You are always so supportive! ~Judy
Date: 2/8/2018 2:54:00 PM
Solid advice...I like the message...All the best Judith
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Date: 2/10/2018 9:07:00 PM
Thank you, as always, for your kind comments Arturo. ~Judy
Date: 2/8/2018 12:49:00 PM
Excellent poem Judy. You did so well with your theme..a loving depiction from start to finish, despite the six word constraint. Instead of saying good luck, I will say congrats on this lovely piece.
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Date: 2/10/2018 9:06:00 PM
Thank you so very much Vijay for your always supportive and wonderful comments. ~Judy
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