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When I Was Eighteen

When I was eighteen.... I gave up on you....and never fought to get you back I've let you down....When I know I should attack When I was eighteen.... I've lost my heart and I've lost my soul Aad people I care the most, I've lost them all When I was eighteen.... I've lost hope so , I've tried to change my fate But it seems that I've tried too late When I was eighteen.... I saw people around me changing into the best but I stood in my place I've failed in front of everyone, I've lost my water face When I was eighteen..... I wished to die very fast But if I'm gone now, nothing of my memory will last When I was eighteen..... I've lost faith in what I write I've tried hard to be out of sight All of this and more when i was eighteen I've wrote it down , so truth finally find the voice to scream

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Paul Callus

Date: 1/30/2016 5:05:00 PM

Hi Dalia....I'm not sure how old you really are, but you make 18 sound as something still very fresh in your mind, as if it was yesterday. And 18 appears to have been hard on you....hopefully life is much brighter now:) ~ Take care. // paul

Dalia Shahein
Date: 2/3/2016 1:05:00 AM

Thank you very much my dear for ur lovely comment and I'm 19 going 20 on April , lol , life always get better when we have faith...hugs / / :)

White Sage

Date: 1/17/2016 3:13:00 PM

you must have gone through so much when you were 18...though when I WAS EIGHTEEN too, I don't think I went through that much LOL...stay strong, surely soon, all will be well...love your poems D

Dalia Shahein
Date: 1/18/2016 6:19:00 PM

Thank you dear for ur supportive words , much appreciated, hugs / / :)

Vladislav Raven

Date: 1/5/2016 3:22:00 PM

Hi Dalia, your poetry is deep and thoughtful. This free verse wonder does touch me with its content. What your thoughts are now, to what they were then, i wonder how they would stand together? You do put a lot of thought into your poetry Dalia, in its own way it sings. May your words keep singing onto the page, A worthy seven rating....Vladislav.

Dalia Shahein
Date: 1/5/2016 4:20:00 PM

Thank you very much my dear for ur warm and delightful words , it do means alot for me and they motivate me to write even better poetry , thank u so much for your great feedback and ur nice visit....hugs / / :)

Eric Boddie

Date: 10/22/2015 3:56:00 PM

when I was 18....now, that feels like a dream....because I met 18 any way but gently....that was so long ago, I turned 18 last century....lol

Dalia Shahein
Date: 10/22/2015 3:58:00 PM

Lol........ Well I was eighteen 2 years ago ......still young....lol.. Thank u 4 stopping by....I'm glad you liked it...

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 10/22/2015 12:04:00 PM

Thoughtful contemplation, Dalia. I see a lot of talent and feeling in your writing. The last line is quite powerful.. Always, Laura

Dalia Shahein
Date: 10/22/2015 12:15:00 PM

Thank u very much for your supporting words , really thankful and really glad you liked it......I do appreciate it.... Hugs... :)