Dalia Shahein Poet Free verse

When I Was Eighteen

When I was eighteen....
                   I gave up on you....and never fought to get you back
                      I've let you down....When I know I should attack
                                            When I was eighteen....
                               I've lost my heart and I've lost my soul
                           Aad people I care the most, I've lost them all
                                             When I was eighteen....
                             I've lost hope so , I've tried to change my fate
                                     But it seems that I've tried too late
                                              When I was eighteen....
             I saw people around me changing into the best but I stood in my place
                        I've failed in front of everyone, I've lost my water face
                                               When I was eighteen.....
                                               I wished to die very fast
                              But if I'm gone now, nothing of my memory will last
                                               When I was eighteen.....
                                            I've lost faith in what I write
                                         I've tried hard to be out of sight
                                  All of this and more when i was eighteen
                    I've wrote it down , so truth finally find the voice to scream

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Paul Callus January 30, 2016 at 5:05 PM Hi Dalia....I'm not sure how old you really are, but you make 18 sound as something still very fresh in your mind, as if it was yesterday. And 18 appears to have been hard on you....hopefully life is much brighter now:) ~ Take care. // paul Dalia Shahein February 3, 2016 at 1:05 AM Thank you very much my dear for ur lovely comment and I'm 19 going 20 on April , lol , life always get better when we have faith...hugs / / :)

White Sage January 17, 2016 at 3:13 PM you must have gone through so much when you were 18...though when I WAS EIGHTEEN too, I don't think I went through that much LOL...stay strong, surely soon, all will be well...love your poems D Dalia Shahein January 18, 2016 at 6:19 PM Thank you dear for ur supportive words , much appreciated, hugs / / :)

Vladislav Raven January 5, 2016 at 3:22 PM Hi Dalia, your poetry is deep and thoughtful. This free verse wonder does touch me with its content. What your thoughts are now, to what they were then, i wonder how they would stand together? You do put a lot of thought into your poetry Dalia, in its own way it sings. May your words keep singing onto the page, A worthy seven rating....Vladislav. Dalia Shahein January 5, 2016 at 4:20 PM Thank you very much my dear for ur warm and delightful words , it do means alot for me and they motivate me to write even better poetry , thank u so much for your great feedback and ur nice visit....hugs / / :)

Eric Boddie October 22, 2015 at 3:56 PM when I was 18....now, that feels like a dream....because I met 18 any way but gently....that was so long ago, I turned 18 last century....lol Dalia Shahein October 22, 2015 at 3:58 PM Lol........ Well I was eighteen 2 years ago ......still young....lol.. Thank u 4 stopping by....I'm glad you liked it...

Laura Breidenthal October 22, 2015 at 12:04 PM Thoughtful contemplation, Dalia. I see a lot of talent and feeling in your writing. The last line is quite powerful.. Always, Laura Dalia Shahein October 22, 2015 at 12:15 PM Thank u very much for your supporting words , really thankful and really glad you liked it......I do appreciate it.... Hugs... :)