When I Go Down

WHEN I GO DOWN

the thing that I hate more
than anything else is
the way I am powerless
to dictate my own moods

so many things could 
have been so much more
praying problems go away
in wasted breathless curse 

taking everything                                                                                                                      I've learned                                                                                                                          to teach destructive disregard                                                                                                                        going down to hit the bottom                                                                                                                           heavy load that got me there

clear myself of clouded mind
and watch myself settle down 
into places where peace can
search me ready to be found 

control slips through weak hands
as ever-present conscience shakes
its moral  head and reprimands 
blaming all ill on selfishness

exhaling briefly I hear Your voice 
it gives hope and hope  gives life
my words hardly making a noise
a fallen soul praise hath pried

assuring me I’m not dead and gone
my life is worthy and I belong


© Kim van Breda—June 2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 6/20/2014 5:14:00 AM
deep heavy powerful, great read
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Date: 6/17/2014 9:53:00 PM
This hit home. Many will feel this so deeply. This was indeed quite vital. Excellent!
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