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If I last another day longer than you, you WILL be in my memories. If not, perhaps I'll be in yours.  Blessings all.

When I Dream Deep

As the mornings sun - begins to shine 
And memories of yesterday - I leave behind 
I get to see - another rising sun 
And store more memories - when the day is done
 
Thoughts in my mind- Which I hold true 
My life - what I've been through 
All those nights - when I dreamed deep 
My all-nighter's - I couldn't sleep
 
Remembering thoughts - from new, from old 
Good times, bad times - I still hold 
But tomorrow's sun - again will rise 
I may not see it - with my own eyes
 
For if I don't - and I... not awake 
I hope the sun - is yours to take 
To let you dream - into the night 
Savour memories - see the light
 
That will rise again - with tomorrow's sun 
And leave you memories - when the day is done 
Your thoughts in mind - that you hold true 
Your life - what you've been through
 
But if you don't - your eyes...not awake 
I hope the sun - is mine to take 
So that I can remember you - memories I'll keep 
All those nights - when I dream deep
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Scorpio Avatar
November 30, 2022 at 3:57 AM
Charlie you and I must be brothers in thought.... this is a great read and much enjoyed!
Peck Avatar
December 11, 2021 at 12:44 PM
I'm so glad to have found your poetry, Charles! This poignant poem is beautiful. "I hope the sun is yours to take"~love it.
Gelok Avatar
April 2, 2021 at 6:51 AM
I am finally taking time to read as many of your poems as I can. I have enjoyed evert one that I have read. You are so talented. I hope one day to be as good. I really like your style. I am only commenting here but I have read so many, It is meant for them all. Thankyou for the encouragement you've given me.
Chamberlain Avatar
March 24, 2021 at 10:40 AM
I read your poem this afternoon, I really enjoyed it. It's definitely a new favourite of mine. Thank you for sharing your amazing work. :-)
Morris Avatar
March 24, 2021 at 8:33 AM
Well done.
Calasibetta Avatar
March 24, 2021 at 7:58 AM
Hi Charles, I love the sentiment of your dreams, the flow of your words, and the story it tells. Superb! Blessings, Paulette
losophy  Avatar
March 24, 2021 at 7:25 AM
Hi Charles... Nice! Beautiful flow! Best! Phyl
Radhakrishna Avatar
January 27, 2020 at 1:27 PM
Exceptional write! So true and powerful!
Foster Avatar
July 26, 2019 at 9:55 AM
Sweet dreams... this was a great write. Hugs. Ann
De Beaulieu Avatar
September 19, 2018 at 3:24 PM
Hello Charlies, this is a beautiful written poem. So that is what yu dream,when in a sound sleep. Have a nice day my friend.
Cunningham Avatar
August 31, 2018 at 3:18 AM
Belated congratulations Charlie, just back from Florida, I'm still half asleep. Tom
Messina Avatar
September 4, 2018 at 4:10 PM
Thank you, Tom. Hope you had a nice vacation
Pett Avatar
August 30, 2018 at 5:23 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved POTD Charles with your beautifully written poem.
Messina Avatar
August 30, 2018 at 6:11 AM
Thank you so much, Roy. Much appreciated!
Nicole Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 11:18 PM
Congratulations Charlie, on Poem of the Day. Beautiful words from your heart. ~ Brandy
Messina Avatar
August 30, 2018 at 6:11 AM
Thanks again, Brandy :)
Wolf Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 9:48 PM
This is so giving, so selfless, so moving, so tender, so touching. The thoughts are priceless, eternal. Charles, you have written a poem of the day for the ages. Enter it into the poem of the ages contest. Bravo. A fave for sure! Best always, my friend ~ Gershon
Messina Avatar
August 30, 2018 at 6:14 AM
Wow, Gershon, what a great compliment. Thanks so much for your kind words my friend. I so much appreciate your comments and advise...All the best ~Charlie
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 3:28 PM
This is beautiful Charles! I felt tears forming in my eyes when I got to your last line. It is going into my faves! Congratulations on having it deservedly honored as POTD! : )
Messina Avatar
August 30, 2018 at 6:16 AM
I am sorry if I brought tears to your eyes, Connie...I hope they were tears of joy :) Thank you so very much...very much appreciated!
Andresen Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 2:08 PM
- Take care of beautiful dreams :) - Beautifully written - Congratulations on yours p.o.t.d., Charlie :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Messina Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 2:16 PM
Thank you, Anne-Lise :) hugs
Ashley Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 12:14 PM
Oh my dear friend Charlie, you have created such a beautiful and intimate poem from your giving heart and loving being.. your glorious poem is both deep and moving; soulful and emotionally generous. Congratulations on your well deserved recognition with POTD honors for your inspiring poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Messina Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 2:18 PM
Thank you, Susan for your always wonderful comments. Warmest wishes ~Charlie
Michael Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 12:03 PM
I like what you did with the spacing...it gives you the voice on screen...making it real... and it is...Congratulations...All the best Charles
Messina Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 2:19 PM
Thank You, Arturo. So glad you heard it like I did. All the very best!
Smith Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 10:40 AM
Good job Charles, congratulations for POTD honors...
Messina Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 2:19 PM
Thank You, Charlie. Much appreciated my friend...
Krampe Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 10:19 AM
Congrats on POTD, Charles.
Messina Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 2:20 PM
Thank you so much, Agnes. I appreciate your visit :)
Wanter Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 9:30 AM
Very nice! Congratulations!
Messina Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 2:21 PM
Thank you very much, SW. Much appreciated!
Williams Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 9:02 AM
A wonderful poem Charles, truly enjoyed from beginning to end. Congratulations on POTD, so well deserved....Maria hugs
Messina Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 2:22 PM
Thank you so much, Maria! Nice to see you back again! Hugs :)
Warrior Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 8:11 AM
Congrats!!! my friend on your POTD!...you are a true poet after all lol...excellent work, Charles...love & light...^WW^
Messina Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 2:24 PM
Thank you, WW. I am so glad you clarified that for me, I was staring to get a little worried about that myself (lol) Much appreciated...Charlie
Doll Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 7:57 AM
Congrats on POTD, Charles. A wonderful rhyme.
Messina Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 2:32 PM
Thank you very much, Warren. I really appreciate your kind words and visit!
Lindley Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 6:03 AM
Congrats my friend on this inspiring poem being awarded POTD honors.
Messina Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 2:33 PM
Thank you so much, Robert. Much appreciated!
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