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Third and final part to the 'promise' trilogy

 

I tried to create a poetic dream, to fulfill our promise, but we became a victim to fate's wounding ways. My flower garden lies in ruins, suffering in silence - my lips unable to kiss her back to life. In the demise of our destiny, there is no reincarnation. Hope fades with each withering petal, perishing to our unfulfilled vow. Stench of regret pollutes dark, damp air. Winds wander, weeping woefully, whispering condolences for our tragedy. Delicately, as if it was your soul, I place the last blooming rose, close to my heart - hoping, one day, to reunite it with you. I can see butterflies, drowning in puddles of lament - helpless in this unforeseen storm. I sense the angst of disorientated bees. Their queen deprived of nectar, they pine in distress - yearning to be close to her. Sun rises, veiled in a black blanket. Birds sing songs of sorrow, soaking in sombre sadness. A mournful chorus, which only increases the pain. Her image reflects through my eyes. Her voice echoes in my mind. I crave for darkness, tired of shadows, look to the heavens....  Wondering why? In this dead end of dreams, soul bangs against my chest, crying like stinging winter rain. I collect each sacred tear, to keep our last rose hydrated - to lay it upon your resting place. A promise has no guarantee. A poet's pen cannot create forever... Third and final part to my 'Promise' trilogy Simple Musing Silent One 6 June 2020

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Date: 11/26/2020 3:17:00 PM
Very beautiful and sad :(
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Date: 9/25/2020 11:03:00 AM
Simply gorgeous . so moving. I just want to delve into the emotions the poems evoke, even the sadness feels like a place of beauty. As per previous post your poems come alive you experience them not read them
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Date: 7/3/2020 5:22:00 AM
So much optimism here. "hoping, one day, to reunite it with you." A gorgeous pen.
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Date: 6/21/2020 9:28:00 AM
I'm sorry it ended sadly but life isn't always a bed of roses - however your poem is brilliant - a heartfelt trilogy. Blessings and hugs my friend. Jennifer.
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Silent One
Date: 6/23/2020 5:23:00 PM
I thought I would go for a tragic ending... Lol... Thanks
Date: 6/15/2020 3:57:00 PM
Remarkable lines, true words, amazing piece from a very deep and wise mind. I love every bit of this. Great work
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Silent One
Date: 6/23/2020 5:24:00 PM
Thank you Funom..
Date: 6/15/2020 1:28:00 PM
Wow. Well penned my friend. "The stench of regret,' what a powerful line. You have captured the agony of loss perfectly. I hope this is not a personal experience, if it is, you have my condolences for your loss. Stay well my friend.
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Silent One
Date: 6/23/2020 5:25:00 PM
There is no stench like regret. . Thank you
Date: 6/14/2020 9:12:00 PM
Enjoyed the depths of your promise series. Creative and touches the heart.
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Silent One
Date: 6/23/2020 5:29:00 PM
Thank you Juliet..
Date: 6/14/2020 3:30:00 PM
A very moving poem with a special ending that sums it all up in a nutshell! Excellent writing Silent! Blessings xxoo
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Silent One
Date: 6/23/2020 5:29:00 PM
Thank you Connie..
Date: 6/12/2020 10:10:00 AM
Silent One, the depths of despair so poignantly crafted are palpable. I really am so impressed by what you can create! it is just so beautiful. Happy Friday SO!!
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Date: 6/10/2020 7:43:00 AM
Hope it's not the end! Need some happy ending. How about promise rejuvenation! :) So well written but sad!
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Date: 6/8/2020 8:24:00 PM
Great ending! For sure, a promise has no guarantee, nor the poet's pen and heart a truth beyond the feverish rush of a creative moment. The poet totally surprised when his poem lives on, him still seeking the once steadily flowing verses of love that he now must struggle to reclaim: not for lack of wanting, nor for the sincerity of his caring, but Time lacks the soul of its occupants, its mind reducing all to seconds and minutes of reduction.
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Date: 6/8/2020 12:04:00 PM
"I collect each sacred tear, to keep our last rose hydrated " - touching. Deeply moved!!
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Date: 6/8/2020 3:00:00 AM
Beautifully written tragic poetry. Your trilogy touches the soul. I'm drawn to the line, "Winds wander, weeping woefully, whispering condolences". You and i share a love for alliteration. Well done, SO.
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Date: 6/8/2020 12:11:00 AM
A tragic ending to such lovely promises... Well expressed thoughts, SO:)
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Date: 6/7/2020 10:43:00 PM
Absolute magic! A melancholy tale of the death of a beautiful dream. Best of wishes, Evelyn
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Date: 6/7/2020 8:37:00 PM
"My flower garden lies in ruins, suffering in silence - my lips unable to kiss her back to life." This part just sinks into my heart.
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Date: 6/7/2020 5:52:00 PM
Poetic sorrow and real sorrow. See no difference. Imagery of sorrow has become very real as if it happened in recent past or happening now. You have concluded a fine series with a heavy heart. Take care S.O. Best. Mohan
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Date: 6/7/2020 3:57:00 PM
I agree with WW . what a dramatic finish. Love that ending. The last two lines say SO MUCH.
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Date: 6/7/2020 12:08:00 PM
A poet in lament...a wonderful write
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Date: 6/7/2020 9:37:00 AM
What a deeply touching piece this is my friend. So beautifully written and well expressed. The tune is an elegant touch. Words fail. God Bless, JB
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Date: 6/7/2020 7:57:00 AM
Dramatic finish...take a bow my Silent friend...meow! :o)
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Date: 6/7/2020 6:26:00 AM
Wow, whatever nectar you are sipping today, I want some my friend, Your the best, have a great day , Love and prayers xo
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Date: 6/7/2020 5:51:00 AM
Especially vivid amidst this lament: I can see butterflies, drowning in puddles of lament - helpless in this unforeseen storm./ Love the stinging imagery which one can feel and almost see! Great one! Hugs...Kim
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Silent One
Date: 6/7/2020 6:03:00 AM
Thank you Kim, that is the scene I wanted to set..
Date: 6/7/2020 3:03:00 AM
I feel the angst in your words, only a brilliant writer can do that. You took your reader on a journey, sadly it ended tragically. Still, such is life, we cannot predict the journey only Fate can. Bravo Si....Maria Hugs
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Silent One
Date: 6/7/2020 6:03:00 AM
Thank you Maria..
Date: 6/7/2020 12:47:00 AM
Add my admiration to the glowing comments that are well deserved, in this your wondrous classic poetry...
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Silent One
Date: 6/7/2020 6:04:00 AM
Thank you..
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