Carolyn Devonshire Poet Couplet

What the Bartender Heard

Please pass me a double with 100-proof zing
No, I’ve no money, but I’ll pay with this ring

Yes, it’s a diamond yet it lost its luster
I found him with her; my mind did fluster

So I tossed the harlot out of our house
And called him a thoughtless cheating louse

I’ll need more booze if you want to hear more
There are some trespasses you can’t ignore

Shot him in the kneecap, crippled that lout
So now there’ll be no more running about

Hey, that ring’s two carats, worth a refill
I’ll take another shot of this swill

I tossed him the cell to call 9-1-1
My goose is cooked; the law will soon come

Fill one more to go ‘fore I hit the road
And thanks for allowing me to reload



*Entry for Natalie’s “Confessions to a Bartender” contest

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Carol Sunshine Brown November 7, 2011 at 5:40 AM A belated congratulations I am sending you this morning for your win in Natalie's contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

Rosalyn Lampkin November 4, 2011 at 11:22 PM Congratulations on your win in this contest

Bob Quigley November 4, 2011 at 10:31 PM Very nice Carolyn. Congratulations on your win in the bartender contest.

Andrea Dietrich November 4, 2011 at 8:59 PM way to go, I just knew this was sure to win. Congrats, Carolyn.

Valerie Sherman November 4, 2011 at 1:38 PM Great win Carolyn!!!!.Congrats.Valerie

Gwendolen Song November 4, 2011 at 1:11 PM I can't even picture u at a bar darling! haha. This is fantastically fun with a hint of Carol Burnett somewhere......Congrats, Carolyn....make that a double.....

Natalie The Rogue Rhymer November 4, 2011 at 11:31 AM Carolyn-Many congrats. on your #3 win in my contest! Love the end-just brilliant!!!

Carrie Richards November 4, 2011 at 10:44 AM Ya don't mess around.....just get right to the culprit, and be done with it!! Ha ha...cute poem, Carolyn!! Congratulations on a well deserved win with this hoot of a poem.... ps...once again, I must thank you for you kind support and friendship. Your are always so generous, and it is truly appreciated. :)

Don Johnson October 24, 2011 at 5:08 PM Of Carolyns Confessions Bartender... Pistol packing momma lay that pistol down, as the old song goes:) sounds like the probby was suitably addressed, bullet in kneecap, just a little perplexed, back in ya corner you bitch cos your next, hold on while im sukkin me last cigarette ... on ya cobber, mine....Don

Jack Horne October 24, 2011 at 1:01 PM LOL, enjoyed this witty piece, my friend

Cyndi Macmillan October 22, 2011 at 6:39 AM Cool one! I really liked this. One thing, you may want to consider changing the last word to RELOAD, if you wanted to give it a wee bit more of sinister feel. My own for this one is a mystery and its getting a bit long. I like how YOU fit so much into so little. Way to go, cheers, Cyndi

Andrea Dietrich October 22, 2011 at 12:23 AM HAHAHAHA. this is great stuff. Wish I'd have thought of it. I've got NOTHING for this one!

Joe Maverick October 22, 2011 at 12:07 AM Good to read this slick and skillful write Carolyn all the best in the contest.!

Cory Long October 21, 2011 at 6:49 PM this was awesome.. Think I will give it a try.. good luck in the contest.. soup mail! have a great night. cory

Nancy Jones October 21, 2011 at 6:48 PM HELLYEAH!

Jesu Johnson October 21, 2011 at 6:45 PM I probably shouldn't laugh..... but hey.... LOVE is a funny thing, that makes people do some strange things..... I LOVE THIS PIECE OF ART!!!!! KEEP WRITING!!!!