What My Track Coach Told Me To Do

My track coach was the man who saved my life.
I had experienced momentary struggle and strife.
I was feeling faint and my face was turning blue.
This was a strange situation.  I did not know what to do.
He said to me, “Come over here, you!
What was the last thing I told you to do?
One more time you forgot to take a breath.
If you forget again, it might mean your death.
Open your nostrils and take some oxygen in.
I wonder how a loser like you can ever win.”
I replied, “Yes sir!”

A fictional account.  I wrote this piece a few years ago and posted it on another site 
after what a member of that site said about one of my entries.  Somebody on Poetry 
Soup made me remember this one when she commented on a poem of mine.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011


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Date: 1/14/2011 7:49:00 PM
well, I am glad you posted it. I like your matter of fact style!
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Date: 1/12/2011 4:39:00 AM
This is quite interesting and creative write on breathing, I have said the same thing in my epiphany poem, Robert.
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Date: 1/11/2011 9:36:00 PM
interesting piece, and it's snowing here too, thank you for all your comments this evening
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Date: 1/11/2011 7:01:00 PM
Wonderful advice whether a true story or not breathing is super important to the overall health of body... there is even a breathing diet ... thankxx for sharing with us Robert..with luv..
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