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What My Track Coach Told Me To Do

My track coach was the man who saved my life. I had experienced momentary struggle and strife. I was feeling faint and my face was turning blue. This was a strange situation. I did not know what to do. He said to me, “Come over here, you! What was the last thing I told you to do? One more time you forgot to take a breath. If you forget again, it might mean your death. Open your nostrils and take some oxygen in. I wonder how a loser like you can ever win.” I replied, “Yes sir!” A fictional account. I wrote this piece a few years ago and posted it on another site after what a member of that site said about one of my entries. Somebody on Poetry Soup made me remember this one when she commented on a poem of mine.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 1/14/2011 7:49:00 PM
well, I am glad you posted it. I like your matter of fact style!
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Date: 1/12/2011 4:39:00 AM
This is quite interesting and creative write on breathing, I have said the same thing in my epiphany poem, Robert.
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Date: 1/11/2011 9:36:00 PM
interesting piece, and it's snowing here too, thank you for all your comments this evening
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Date: 1/11/2011 7:01:00 PM
Wonderful advice whether a true story or not breathing is super important to the overall health of body... there is even a breathing diet ... thankxx for sharing with us Robert..with luv..
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