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What Finally Set Me Off (part 1)

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What Finally Set Me Off (part 1)

(Although this was inspired by Olusequn Adelana's poetry challenge about betrayal, it is 
much too long to enter it; but I'm thankful for any poetic inspiration I can recieve!)

What Finally Set Me Off

Sometimes Mom would mildly chide me
for my seeming inability to stand up for myself.
I would call myself tolerant, mellow, and forgiving.
But she’d sometimes put it this way: You’re a doormat!
And sometimes when she saw my lack of self-assurance,
she’d heave a sigh. You see, she loved me.
And she suffered, with her daughters, when we endured injustice.
Which brings me to my own tale of betrayal
and what first-time betrayal meant to a young too-trusting girl.

I think it was in junior high, the time I was emerging
from my pre-pubescent shell, flowering, not just physically;
my mental faculties were blossoming as well.
I had a best, friend, Sheila, blue eyed Sheila,
A pint-sized world-wise, Alabama transplant to the heartland:
sweet Sheila, to whom I would confide 
all my teenage dreams, crushes, and beliefs.
And Sheila had a brother, older, pint-sized too, but oh my!
A wondrous gorgeous guy that Danny was!
And Sheila knew completely how I felt for him.
At our school was Margo, a “bad girl.” Rumors followed her.
In grade school, it was she who happily revealed to me
her hinted-at “real” knowledge of the birds and bees.
For just a while, she and I were friends, then parted ways.
But now in seventh grade, Margo was re-entering my life.
She had her eyes on Danny, and Margo wasn’t playing any games.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Date: 8/9/2017 4:16:00 AM
well done! i felt like i was in a warm, peaceful moment, that lasted for that few moments; couldn't wait to see how it ends. a longing for my youth too, i felt strongly; nice, nice, nice! cheers!
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Date: 8/8/2017 3:30:00 PM
Speechless!
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Date: 8/8/2017 12:50:00 PM
Now will have to find part two and see what happened to Margo. love phyl
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Date: 1/5/2013 12:22:00 AM
Now i have to search for part 2 another day...... always & forever ... good night... love ..the one and only ~ PD
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Date: 3/27/2012 9:44:00 AM
i'm off to part 2 right now. harry
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Date: 1/18/2011 4:31:00 AM
Yikes is Margo still around? Can we round her up? Ok, just kidding off to Prt 2 >>>>>
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Date: 2/1/2010 11:12:00 PM
hehe could this be any more suspenseful?? heading straight on over to part 2 now!!!
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Date: 1/25/2010 3:22:00 PM
i swear girls are so mean. your story keeps me wanting to read more. -Always Lynette [[and you were right "Purest Disney Prnicess Of All" is referring to Pocahontas^.^]]
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Date: 1/24/2010 9:11:00 AM
Enjoying thoroughly, this piece must relate to so many out there >> of to part 2 >> James
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Date: 1/23/2010 4:16:00 PM
hmmm llike William said in so many words... the math isn't right here... gotta turn the page...
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Date: 1/23/2010 2:26:00 PM
....headed to part two>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
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Date: 1/23/2010 1:06:00 PM
Two girls, one guy. Trouble. Gotta check out how this ends on the double. Great Write Andrea. Best Wishes Always, Bill PS Please excuse me, I must continue to the second half now.
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Date: 1/23/2010 2:25:00 AM
Andrea, Reading your poetry this morning has been an intriguing way to start the day. I can not wait to read the rest of the story. (You should have entered the contest anyway...) So far, I'm hooked on your words. Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 1/22/2010 6:26:00 PM
Interesting narrative .. off to read part 2.. good write.. clear and specific.. luv.. Linda-Marie
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Date: 1/22/2010 1:08:00 PM
oh no sounds bad...
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Date: 1/22/2010 9:10:00 AM
Enjoyed this great story let see how it ends Daniel
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Date: 1/22/2010 7:20:00 AM
Very nice Andrea...going to pt 2 now...Marty
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