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What Did I Do Wrong

what did i do wrong?
one minute we were riding high
that crest of euphoria
the next
i was tumbling in the water
pummeled by the waves
unable to breathe
to see
to....be

what did I do wrong?
how did I change?
didn't I give you my all
maxed out love and care

what else is there to give
how can I live
without a heart and soul?
I gave you....all
was it not enough
to fill your empty spaces?
how did I lose 
those enchanting graces

shocked disbelief
gnawing gently to grief
rejection sated
insides churning
with the bile of betrayal brewing
spewing pain
burned esophageal refrain
acid lined life

what did I do?
what did I say?
why did you go away?

away...away....away.....

You don't hear a word I say
Gone with the wind of wistful wanting
daunting
the life bound to me...haunting

You went away....away....

took away my voice
left me no choice
but to shrivel and die
goodbye

good? bye?


it's been so very long
and yet....

I cry!

Eileen Manassian

Copyright © Eileen Manassian | Year Posted 2016

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Dah Dahlusion Date: 9/5/2016 9:56:00 AM The strength of feeling here is explosive in all of it's creative reverberation. Bravo! –-)) Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 6/28/2016 10:50:00 AM This is emotionally gripping, Eileen. But who said that it was your fault? Your only fault could have been giving your all to someone who did not appreciate it. Hugs // paul Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/22/2016 8:18:00 AM Has Tim left your class?? Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 6/22/2016 8:31:00 AM I taught him last semester, Richard. He's left our university. :( Found something elsewhere. Hope he comes back. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/21/2016 7:33:00 AM Good morning, where have you been? Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 6/17/2016 3:44:00 PM When you have had this happen to you your heart bleeds from the remembrance of it with only time being that healing balm that will help to heal the pain. I can relate. Beautifully expressed Eileen! 7 ; ) Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/16/2016 10:01:00 AM Good morning Eileen. Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/15/2016 8:34:00 AM You have done a great job so far. Check out mu recent Collab with Liam when you have a chance. Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 6/14/2016 5:28:00 PM So much sentiment ..emotion...This poem evokes a deep feeling of loss, want, sadness , changes and beauty too..I am touched sweet Baklava. Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 6/15/2016 1:51:00 AM We write of joy....we write of sorrow....we write ....we write....we write....Thanks my sweetest sister. It's so good....SO GOOD....to have you post a comment. I responded to your message. Hugs, dear one

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 6/14/2016 8:18:00 AM What a painfully romantic and emotional writing that makes the heart bleed yet one cannot overlook its poetic beauty dear, Eileen! Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 6/15/2016 1:54:00 AM Thank you, my dear esteemed poet. Life gives us a taste of joy and sorrow...and gives us no choice but to drink what it offers. Thanks for the visit. I hope all is well. Filakia

Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/14/2016 12:53:00 AM Powerful emotions! You made this feel real. Being rejected by someone we love deeply would be the worst kind of suffering. Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 6/15/2016 2:00:00 AM Thank you, Richard. I'm glad my words were able to covey that. Hope all is well with you. :) I'm excited. Tonight I'm recording more programs. I'm trying to pick and choose with care. Hugs, dear.

Arthur Vaso Date: 6/13/2016 6:36:00 PM I refuse to admit you are the Queen of romance, to me you will always be the princess, beautiful in all ways, your words and voice are like sugar! hugs! Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 6/15/2016 2:01:00 AM OH!!! Sugary sweet!! What a treat!!! Thanks, Arthur. You know I thrive of words of affirmation. :) Hugs

Lenny Gazbowski Date: 6/13/2016 1:47:00 PM A wonderful write which is reveals how vulnerable we really are. Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 6/13/2016 3:35:00 PM Yes, Lenny....Some of us are more vulnerable than others. That's why the heart becomes hardened...at times. Thanks for the visit.

John Hamilton Date: 6/13/2016 1:07:00 PM You do love lost like no other, really really good Eileen. Hope fictional and not real although really feels real, raw emotions and despair, been there, don't wish it on anyone. A7 Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 6/13/2016 3:41:00 PM Thank you, John. I think people that just bail from a relationship without having the fortitude to offer closure....really have no clue of the damage that they do to others. We write of joy....we write of pain....the blessing and the curse of being a poet. :)

Casarah Nance Date: 6/13/2016 12:53:00 PM Oh I feel the emotions! Wow...well done... Hugs x Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 6/13/2016 3:42:00 PM Thanks, Cas. I'm glad the emotions came across well. Hugs

Kim Merryman Date: 6/13/2016 12:37:00 PM So much anguish and heartache portrayed here. Well expressed, Eileen! Love, Kim Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 6/13/2016 3:43:00 PM Thank you, Kim. Heartache is something we all experience at one time or another....In a way...we are all walking wounded, but we pick ourselves up and carry on. Hugs