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an ardent desire of flames was burning its passion held captive within our hearts the temple of bodies arced in yearning when fingers became restless like mozart's melodies played beneath flickers of love as sparks grew fuller than this moon tonight more lambent in glow than what shone above the gleam of those stars in your eyes alight lit the passageway of your soul therein I could feel the heat of love searing me as each glance sparked the flame that burned within its brilliance blinded me, i could not see the embers as they lie dying from sight its death left my soul with a lonely plight 02/09/2020 Sonnet True Love Contest Sponsored by Brenda Chiri

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Date: 3/6/2020 7:52:00 AM
Nicely written!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/8/2020 12:03:00 PM
Thank you so much Valerie :)
Date: 2/22/2020 6:17:00 AM
This is just gorgeous, Sandra, congratulations on your placement! Although may I echo your sentiment and say this should have been at the top ... substance, phrasing, word use, tempo, imagery - all at such a superb level - this is getting faved! Blessings, my friend! :o) <3
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/22/2020 7:29:00 AM
wow… thank you so much Greg...coming from a poet such as you I am honored by your kind words and the fave… hugs and blessings to you my friend :)
Date: 2/20/2020 9:50:00 PM
Back with congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/22/2020 7:28:00 AM
Thank you so much Eve :) hugs
Date: 2/20/2020 1:17:00 PM
Sandra, you had me at 'ardent desire'! Then, "temple of bodies arced in yearning", "fingers became restless like mozart's", "more lambent in glow", all these gorgeous phrases. The music, the celestial references, the flame/embers motif, the lonely ending... this is a fav for me. Great write, good to see you wearing your 'sonnet hat' once in a while. Hugs ~ John
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/20/2020 7:28:00 PM
Thank you John...I figure practice them every now and then and eventually you get better at it...right? :) hugs and thanks for the fave!!!
Date: 2/20/2020 10:45:00 AM
This reminds me of my first husband Sandra, true to life's sad end. This is beautifully composed and a top winner for me Sandra! Congratulations on your win! xxoo
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/20/2020 7:27:00 PM
thank you Connie...did he pass away? my first love did at a young age...hugs and blessings.... congratulations to you as well... soups been giving me problems during the day when I have my most writing time available... hugs
Date: 2/20/2020 7:05:00 AM
Congrats my friend on your placement in this contest though the fact that I had to look so low on the winner's list to find this was disappointing to me. Your poem was beautiful and that is proven by the number of wonderful comments you received below. Well anyway, it is a winner to me.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/20/2020 10:44:00 AM
Thank you Chris...it touched many and was even referred to as Shakespearean and faved… that it all that really counts is it not? I didn't expect a win with it.... :) hugs
Date: 2/20/2020 3:38:00 AM
Sandy congratulations on your placement! Beautifully done! I have been sick of Kate's or I would have commented sooner my friend!;)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/20/2020 10:40:00 AM
Thank you... not sure what kate's is but feel better
Date: 2/13/2020 9:38:00 AM
I really enjoy sonnets and this one is very Shakespearean. Sad that such ardent love had embers lying dying but maybe just a spark can re-ignite those flames that burned brightly. Reads like a good contender to me. Thanks for all your visits to my page. Sara
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:22:00 PM
thank you so much Sara...it was a young love, he tried to rekindle the flames too late... shortly before his death but left her with an emptiness and questions that will never be answered... hugs and blessings...
Date: 2/12/2020 8:27:00 AM
Nice. I like how you described making love and the embers that eventually die out, before you...
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:20:00 PM
Thank you so much Arturo.... I guess if its not real the embers will eventually die out... hugs
Date: 2/11/2020 3:17:00 AM
- A beautiful sonnet with your feelings, Sandra - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/11/2020 5:22:00 AM
Thank you so much Anne-Lise. Have a wonderful day my friend. Hugs
Date: 2/10/2020 10:17:00 PM
WoW! Sandra This is such a passionate and well written Sonnet. Love shines bright in this piece. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Have a great evening:-) Alexis
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/11/2020 5:21:00 AM
Thank you so much Alexis. Good to see you. Hope all is well. Hugs and blessings :)
Date: 2/10/2020 3:04:00 PM
Great poem!You write these so well! Congrats!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/10/2020 7:28:00 PM
thank you so much Krish :) hugs
Date: 2/10/2020 1:03:00 PM
So richly vivid in feeling, this is complex and breath taking, Sandra!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/10/2020 2:37:00 PM
Thank you so much Michelle :) hugs
Date: 2/10/2020 12:25:00 PM
Beautiful sonnet, I like the last two lines. Thank you for congratulations on potd if you don't mind. Hugs Eve
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/10/2020 2:36:00 PM
Thank you so much Eve and you are welcome :) hugs
Date: 2/10/2020 12:12:00 PM
A passionate sonnet that trickles all over the page with true love feelings.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/10/2020 2:36:00 PM
Thank you so much Caren. Hugs
Date: 2/10/2020 9:35:00 AM
An awesome write Sandy - best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/10/2020 2:34:00 PM
Thank you so much Jennifer. Hugs
Date: 2/10/2020 8:05:00 AM
Even true love doesn't always end graciously--a lovely write, Sandy. Best for a win.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/10/2020 2:34:00 PM
Thank you so much Vijay Perhaps then it wasn’t really true. Hugs
Date: 2/10/2020 7:05:00 AM
Beautiful though sad. The heart takes us on many journeys and some do not end up as we had hoped. Really nicely done. Best wishes in the contest Sandy
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/10/2020 2:33:00 PM
Thank you so much Chris. My muse never seems to leave traces of sad out :(. Hugs
Date: 2/10/2020 6:05:00 AM
Beautiful sonnet Sandra, good luck. Tom
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/10/2020 2:32:00 PM
Thank you so much Tom. Hugs
Date: 2/9/2020 11:58:00 PM
more lambent in glow than what shone above.. sheer poetry... I love your lines..
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/10/2020 2:31:00 PM
Thank you so much Jenish :) hugs