Kelly Deschler Poet Monorhyme

Weep Willow Weep

Weep willow weep your weary winter woe
At the sight of your icy, new trousseau,
Above the frosted brook, a mirror faux
Her reflection was horribly so-so,
With rigid branches laced in flakey snow 
White, a favorite color, not hers though,
Clear crystals clung, dressing her to and fro
All stitched on by a hand who did not sew, 
Frozen stiff, her tears slow their new tempo.



(November 8th, 2022)

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Sam Kauffman December 2, 2022 at 10:37 AM So plaintive and melancholy a picture of the willow in winter Kelly. Interesting rhymes. Congratulations on your win. All the best. Kelly Deschler December 30, 2022 at 3:42 PM Thank you so much, Sam

W J Clarke December 1, 2022 at 12:11 PM I can feel the cold mood surrounding this beautiful written poem. Really well expressed. Congratulations! Kelly Deschler December 17, 2022 at 10:28 AM Thank you so much!

Len Gasun December 1, 2022 at 8:02 AM Such a very beautiful and well-crafted monorhyme poem with alliteration my dearest friend, Kelly. I extremely enjoyed reading your poem this evening. Congratulations on your win! Thank you so much for sharing. God bless. Hugs Kelly Deschler December 16, 2022 at 4:04 PM Thank you for taking the time to read and comment so kindly, my dear friend, Len... Glad you enjoyed this one... Hugs :)

Susan Ashley December 1, 2022 at 7:52 AM Dear Kelly, your poetic finesse captures the mood of the wintry weeping willow with finesse. I enjoyed your rich textured imagery, especially, "Above the frosted brook, a mirror faux" - whoa! Such great monorhymes throughout. Congratulations for your excellent win in William's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Kelly Deschler December 16, 2022 at 3:49 PM Thank you so much, Susan... Glad you enjoyed this one!

Christuraj Alex December 1, 2022 at 5:13 AM Beautiful writing. Hearing from you after a long time. Congratulations! Kelly Deschler December 16, 2022 at 3:48 PM Thank you very, very much!

Heidi Sands December 1, 2022 at 4:06 AM Congratulations for your win :) Kelly Deschler December 16, 2022 at 3:46 PM Thank you, Heidi :)

William Kelii Kekaula November 30, 2022 at 9:50 PM An eloquent metaphorical monorhyme you have penned, Kelly. My compliments on your top placing win, Aloha William Kelly Deschler December 16, 2022 at 7:57 AM Thank you, William... It was a pleasure to participate in your contest. I enjoyed the challenge!

Sara Kendrick November 15, 2022 at 3:52 AM So very descriptive is this one. I do enjoy seeing weeping willows. I had one my back yard, but it started dying and we had to remove it. You have done a very good job on giving some personification to this willow and the ice and snow. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara Kelly Deschler December 4, 2022 at 10:17 AM You're welcome, my friend, always a pleasure... Thank you, too, for taking the time to read and comment so kindly on my poems...

Eve Roper November 8, 2022 at 9:20 PM Great verse, Kelly. It is chilling cold Kelly Deschler November 19, 2022 at 4:06 PM Thank you Eve... This poem was inspired by my Mom. She doesn't mind the winter, but she dreads having to drive in the snow and the freezing cold.

Stephan McBride November 8, 2022 at 5:52 PM Very good, love it Kelly Deschler November 19, 2022 at 3:34 PM Thank you Stephan