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Weaving Tears Among Saturn's Rings

She ventured far beyond Earth's realm
past cordoned confines of heart and soul
Tumbled,  as did Alice, down the rabbit hole
Drifted, like an Autumn leaf blown from an elm

She soared past distant planets, 
on paths lighted by effulgent moons
Weaved her tears among Saturn's rings
and all the while she was gathering stardust 
before they mingled with sand on Mars' dunes.

From mountain peaks of Jupiter, 
she bottled mist, to which she clings
And all these amazing interstellar things 
were collected as caressive tokens for him;
the one she had vowed to love more than life.

From far reaches of dark galaxies
she held treasures from her jaunt;
Mystical items she hoped he'd want
brilliant beacons of silvered moonbeams, 
fading light, captured as the sun dimmed.

She carefully wrapped her gifts to offer
in layers of cosmic flecks from a comet's tail.
Trussed with silken threads of time, unraveled,
she tied celestial troves she would soon proffer
to the one for whom she holds in fervent affection.

From his heart, she hoped would spill
the love that somehow waned to a trickle.
Then in abundance, once more it would flow
like a wildly churning river, Yes, she loves him still

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Date: 11/4/2018 7:29:00 AM
Hi Lin, once more it is an honor and a pleasure to dive into the oceans of your heart. Such wonderful content does fill this work. Wonderful images flood the mind as I read down your lines. I love the creativity that lies behind the piece. Your words have ever inspired the heart to sing Lin. This is an excellent poetic jewel. Have a wonderful Sunday. Hugs....Mike. XX. A fave.
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Date: 11/3/2018 7:13:00 AM
What a magical ride we just took together Lin, thanks for the lift...
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Lin Lane
Date: 11/3/2018 10:13:00 AM
I was delighted to have you along with me, Charlie. Thanks!
Date: 10/29/2018 8:38:00 AM
Got to stay clear from Saturn's rings...too much drama a Laney orbit...perhaps you might try Neptune...great write Lin...I see you orbiting the Soup-er Nova(love it) & light...^WW^
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/29/2018 5:05:00 PM
Neptune, eh? He's way out there. Maybe next trip. Thanks for sharing.the journey.
Date: 10/27/2018 5:11:00 AM
When sad and alone, wanting to my writing hone* I seek far better words, inked with pen* For inspiration given, true and free* Thy enchanting poetry sings, sweetly to me* Display with great ardor, thy heart, with poetic draft* Gift true unto others, reading thy mastery of thy craft.* My friend, your beautiful poetry always inspires me.. A fav..
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/28/2018 2:57:00 PM
You should turn it into a poem. Too beautiful not to give them a voice of their own. I may even use them within something and credit your thoughts.
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Robert Lindley
Date: 10/27/2018 3:17:00 PM
Those lines were spontaneously written, born from reading your poem my dear friend. Although perhaps, I could set about writing a sonnet from them- had not thought of that until reading your comment. Who knows may even do just that.....especially since you have rated them so highly....
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/27/2018 1:10:00 PM
Well, Robert, I do declare those are some of the most beautiful lines I've read from you. Are they from one of your lovely poems or were you actually inspired by poetry to write them? Either way, they are greatly appreciated. Your talent also inspires me.
Date: 10/26/2018 7:39:00 PM
what an enchanting magical journey Lin, so so glad you ares till here with us on soup sharing your wonderful words:-) hugs Jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/27/2018 1:08:00 PM
It's because of kindhearted people like you that I peek in and post once in a while. Sooo, I'm thanking you for comments like this one and those of others who encourage me. Hugs to ya, chick!
Date: 10/26/2018 12:42:00 PM
A fantasy voyage through the heavens with a touch of romance. Beautiful verse Lin.
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/26/2018 5:39:00 PM
Thanks so much, Tom. Sweet remarks.
Date: 10/26/2018 11:50:00 AM
Lin, your titles really hook me, this one was the best yet and the poem, wow, what an enchanted voyage I have just been on. This was beautiful, a little cosmic and definitely filled with affection. Beautifully composed and delivered my friend. Bravo!
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/26/2018 5:37:00 PM
Your comments are sincerely appreciated, Chris. Feel free to journey with me at any time.