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We Two Aged Friends

We two aged friends were caught today, By shared glance. Words I could not say entranced. Not you, new friends looked on, As old friends spoke. The grey false dawn Broke thoughts while round us sunset played Once enemies trapped in the fray, Alike, but souls between us lay, When we our disparate colours donned. We two aged friends. Freed, parted, only you could pray Cold comfort: if we’d met halfway Then emptiness would be foregone, Time would let quarrels be withdrawn. You loved not, yet this eve you stayed. We two aged friends.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 1/9/2012 3:14:00 AM
Wonderful Rondeau. Congrats on ur win. One Love~O.O.
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Date: 1/5/2012 4:34:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work..Sara
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Date: 1/5/2012 4:26:00 PM
Congratulations on your beautiful write Best regards, Jon
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Date: 1/5/2012 4:10:00 PM
congrat on your lovely win .......n5oe
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Date: 1/5/2012 9:37:00 AM
What a beautiful flowing poem, congrats on a deserved winner. harry
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Date: 1/5/2012 7:56:00 AM
Grace, congrats on your win, loved it great flow..David
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Date: 1/5/2012 6:10:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in ~Cyndi's~ "Gifts Given--Received" contest Grace. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/4/2012 10:52:00 PM
Loved this poem. This year my wife lost an aged friend. They had stayed close across the miles for 40 years. Congratulations.
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Grace Williams
Date: 1/5/2012 9:21:00 PM
I am so sorry to hear about that. You can give her my deepest condolances if they will mean anything comming from me. I know how sad it is to lose someone like that. Thank you for your comment!
Date: 1/4/2012 6:35:00 PM
Congratulations Grace!An excellent Rondeau.
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Date: 1/4/2012 3:41:00 PM
You make me want to write an rondeau right now..you have graced it's form so perfectly. Congrats on this special win. Gwendolen
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Date: 1/3/2012 10:45:00 PM
what a beautiful portrayal of life and friendship! Congratulations on your win...it's well deserved...love,Deb
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Date: 1/3/2012 10:00:00 PM
Grace, this poem just dazzled me. Please, when you can, read my blog. Your poem won first place, and I have provided feedback on why it landed its top placement. Congratulations. I am so looking forward to reading more of your work. Keep writing! You have a fabulous voice!
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Grace Williams
Date: 1/5/2012 9:31:00 PM
Thank you so much for that constructive feedback! I am very honoured that you chose my poem as the winner of your contest. I feel a bit stupid for leaving out the line, but I don't know if I'll add it back in. Honestly I am a bit afraid to mess it up now.
Date: 12/30/2011 1:10:00 PM
This is one of the best poems I've ever read! You're so talented :) Great depth and diction, I love the way you tied everything in together at the end and furthermore, your name is gorgeous! Keep writing, Love, J.
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