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We Sail Away - Lei

We sail away beneath the sun - vows made. Our journey’s now begun. We glide till twilight’s tangerine drips into ocean’s azure-green. To shore we’re led by June’s light breeze. You give my hand a little squeeze. We wait for time most opportune for honey underneath the moon! Jan. 5, 2019 for the Lay It On Me - 8X8 Poetry Contest of charles messina rhyme pattern: aabbccdd

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Eve Roper

Date: 1/16/2020 10:32:00 PM

Back with congratulations your win. Eve

Charles Messina

Date: 1/16/2020 8:09:00 AM

So romantic, Andrea. Very well written and well done! Congratulations on your win! Hugs Charlie

Curtis Moorman

Date: 1/16/2020 7:29:00 AM

Andrea, I am honored to share a win with you. You made the poem truly exciting with the last two lines -- especially the last line! Congrats on your win!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/6/2020 2:39:00 PM

LOVE your romantic poem, Andrea, especially the last line's play of words on honeymoon. Best wishes in the contest, my friend! Hugs, Carolyn

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 1/6/2020 2:02:00 PM

Hello Andrea, I like this poem you have created. Have a nice day my friend.

Constance La France

Date: 1/5/2020 11:20:00 PM

Andrea, your poem is truly lovely, wonderful writing and well done, best of luck in the contest _ Constance

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/5/2020 11:00:00 PM

Excellent Andrea! I love the romantic imagery. xxoo

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/5/2020 9:47:00 PM

I like the way this reeks of a romantic honeymoon Andrea.

Sandra Adams

Date: 1/5/2020 8:37:00 PM

you have always been so great at penning beautiful romantic stories in your poetry... adore this :) hugs

John Watt

Date: 1/5/2020 6:59:00 PM

Love your little honey/moon serenade, Andrea! Romantic, poetic, descriptive, perfect cadence, short and sweet... it's a winner to me. Hugs ~ John

Quoth Theraven

Date: 1/5/2020 6:47:00 PM

Andrea, Enchanting Lay in your poem 'We Sail Away'. -Richard

Joseph May

Date: 1/5/2020 5:58:00 PM

I like 'twilight's tangerine', Wonderful write Andrea..best wishes

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/5/2020 3:48:00 PM

Enjoyed the sweet romantic tone--beautifully done, Andrea.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 1/5/2020 3:42:00 PM

such beautiful rhyming, andrea! lovely!

Line Gauthier

Date: 1/5/2020 3:34:00 PM

Very sweet, Andrea.

Rico Leffanta

Date: 1/5/2020 3:29:00 PM

Thank goodness you were not on the same sea as Trump! Aloha! Rico

Juliet Ligon

Date: 1/5/2020 3:28:00 PM

Beautiful romance, Andrea.

Eve Roper

Date: 1/5/2020 2:56:00 PM

Reading yours I know I did my wrong .. good luck in the contest.

Eve Roper
Date: 1/5/2020 7:00:00 PM

thank you for reading my poem I do appreciate it. You tell more of a story and I think that is the way the form is suppose to be and all together. I split them because I thought it sounded better.