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We Sail Away - Lei

We sail away beneath the sun -
vows made. Our journey’s now begun.
We glide till twilight’s tangerine
drips into ocean’s azure-green.
To shore we’re led by June’s light breeze.
You give my hand a little squeeze.
We wait for time most opportune
for honey underneath the moon!

Jan. 5, 2019
for the Lay It On Me - 8X8 Poetry Contest of charles messina
rhyme pattern: aabbccdd

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Eve Roper Date: 1/16/2020 10:32:00 PM Back with congratulations your win. Eve Login to Reply

Charles Messina Date: 1/16/2020 8:09:00 AM So romantic, Andrea. Very well written and well done! Congratulations on your win! Hugs Charlie Login to Reply

Curtis Moorman Date: 1/16/2020 7:29:00 AM Andrea, I am honored to share a win with you. You made the poem truly exciting with the last two lines -- especially the last line! Congrats on your win! Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 1/6/2020 2:39:00 PM LOVE your romantic poem, Andrea, especially the last line's play of words on honeymoon. Best wishes in the contest, my friend! Hugs, Carolyn Login to Reply

Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 1/6/2020 2:02:00 PM Hello Andrea, I like this poem you have created. Have a nice day my friend. Login to Reply

Constance La France Date: 1/5/2020 11:20:00 PM Andrea, your poem is truly lovely, wonderful writing and well done, best of luck in the contest _ Constance Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 1/5/2020 11:00:00 PM Excellent Andrea! I love the romantic imagery. xxoo Login to Reply

Caren Krutsinger Date: 1/5/2020 9:47:00 PM I like the way this reeks of a romantic honeymoon Andrea. Login to Reply

Sandra Adams Date: 1/5/2020 8:37:00 PM you have always been so great at penning beautiful romantic stories in your poetry... adore this :) hugs Login to Reply

John Watt Date: 1/5/2020 6:59:00 PM Love your little honey/moon serenade, Andrea! Romantic, poetic, descriptive, perfect cadence, short and sweet... it's a winner to me. Hugs ~ John Login to Reply

Quoth Theraven Date: 1/5/2020 6:47:00 PM Andrea, Enchanting Lay in your poem 'We Sail Away'. -Richard Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 1/5/2020 5:58:00 PM I like 'twilight's tangerine', Wonderful write Andrea..best wishes Login to Reply

Vijay Pandit Date: 1/5/2020 3:48:00 PM Enjoyed the sweet romantic tone--beautifully done, Andrea. Login to Reply

Ilene Bauer Date: 1/5/2020 3:42:00 PM such beautiful rhyming, andrea! lovely! Login to Reply

Line Gauthier Date: 1/5/2020 3:34:00 PM Very sweet, Andrea. Login to Reply

Rico Leffanta Date: 1/5/2020 3:29:00 PM Thank goodness you were not on the same sea as Trump! Aloha! Rico Login to Reply

Juliet Ligon Date: 1/5/2020 3:28:00 PM Beautiful romance, Andrea. Login to Reply

Eve Roper Date: 1/5/2020 2:56:00 PM Reading yours I know I did my wrong .. good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Eve Roper Date: 1/5/2020 7:00:00 PM thank you for reading my poem I do appreciate it. You tell more of a story and I think that is the way the form is suppose to be and all together. I split them because I thought it sounded better.