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We Loved Her In Vain

We Loved Her In Vain The bones of your life lay there you were gifted far too fair You travelled a path far alone before we saw, you were gone The castles you left so pure truth was part of your allure Did you gift us your very best? or save that for your new quest Sunday morns you would go walk there, strange dancing as you talk Your return consumed us with glee loved in your sight only me You are now very deeply missed we adored you, were not kissed! Robert J. Lindley, 09-14 2014 Syllables Per Line: 7 7 8 7 0 7 7 8 7 0 7 7 8 7 0 8 7 Total # Syllables: 102 Total # Lines: 17 (Including empty lines) Total # Words: 87 Note: I am deep into math, love numbers and patterns. I wanted to create a poetry form . So I took two special years of my life to start the foundation for a new form. Years 1977 and 1987, thus I chose 77, 87. Developed the form as sonnet type based with 14 lines but with a syllable count as shown above comprised of three four line stanzas, followed by a two line conclusion. Rhyme scheme to be aa, bb, cc, dd, ee, ff with ending couplet gg Perfect form would be to hit the max number of word count of 87. with each stanza syllable count flowing as shown above, 7,7,8,7 , 7,7,8,7 7,7,8,7 8,7 Total words(perfect) to be maxed at 87 and minimium word total to be 77 words. If interested give it a try... to stretch your poetic muscles.

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Date: 9/17/2014 7:58:00 PM
Trying to come up with a name for this form. Any suggestions? Anybody?
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Date: 9/16/2014 3:24:00 PM
Such a NEAT O idea, Robert!! and a lovely tribute poem out of it. I love playing with forms that vibrate with my personal numbers. I really love tanka and sonnets(with 14 lines, they are actually a 5 and I have written hundreds of them!) Here is something interesting about etheree, a form I love so much, I did a book of them. Etheree totals 55 syllables! my number doubled AND 5 plus 5 = 10 or 1, my NAME number. I am doubly lucky when I write this form!! I just love seeing patterns too!
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Date: 9/15/2014 2:27:00 PM
Lovely poem. Congrats on the new format. Still on holiday. Thanks for your visits today. Sweet of you.
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Date: 9/15/2014 4:54:00 AM
This reflects the master in you, creativity is the real gem, followers are many like me.. ;) it was nice experience reading you again, i will give your novel form a try... God Bless... Malik
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Date: 9/15/2014 4:33:00 AM
I am too ignorant my fiend, Robert, to conceive the mathematics but I can truly appreciate the poem's beauty and hidden meaning! An excellent piece of poetry, indeed!
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