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We Eclipse As Sun and Moon

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Gatherings from my heart fervid thoughts as they seep from its depths they are churning my love runs fathoms deep Flowing from pointed nib of pen evocative words alight I envision you reading them in your dreams tonight Do I fulfill your masculine cravings your most erotic desires Have I kindled flames of passion until they are blazing fires I've tasted your moistened lips as they whispered low moans in plea and felt your body tremble with its alluring need of me Are you engulfed by tumultuous waves of yearning when I draw near Do you ache, needing my touch when my voice you hear If you are impatient for the eclipse of our joining as sun and moon Then I'll know you feel as I do and love is equally in attune

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Klio Tsitsikroni

Date: 7/19/2017 12:13:00 PM

Excellent!

Lin Lane
Date: 7/19/2017 2:17:00 PM

Thanks so much.

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/19/2017 9:34:00 AM

Passionate write, Lin. Beautifully written. I too wonder:)

Lin Lane
Date: 7/19/2017 2:17:00 PM

Thank you for such kind remarks.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/19/2017 2:44:00 AM

Lin....I loved this write. So sweet and sensual....so full of fulfillment of need and longing. Beautiful.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/19/2017 4:01:00 AM

Thanks so very much, Eileen. Glad you like the sentiments.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/18/2017 5:55:00 PM

phwoarrrrrrrrrr Lin this is hot hot hot... passionate and sensual I love it:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/18/2017 6:01:00 PM

Your reaction is more than enough, Jan. lol Thanks so very much.

Frederic Parker

Date: 7/18/2017 5:55:00 PM

A deep tenderness reflected in this poem, sensual in its spiritual sense...the phrase sun and moon pay homage to a line in the Neil Diamond song" Play Me" ...a beautiful poem...Poet

Lin Lane
Date: 7/18/2017 5:59:00 PM

"You are the sun/I am the moon...You are the words/I am the tune...Play me." I know the song well, Frederic. Thank you for such lovely comments.

Tim Smith

Date: 7/18/2017 5:49:00 PM

Such passion is a rare gift Lin...very beautiful write.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/18/2017 6:00:00 PM

Your thoughts are a gift in themselves, Tim. Thank you.

Chris Green

Date: 7/18/2017 5:42:00 PM

Such a beautiful and sensual poem. This one reads as if it is a dream. It is very deeply emotive and enchanting. Your words flow so smoothly that while reading I became lost in the visions this created and forgot I was reading. Really nicely done Lin. Romance and desire definitely fill your pen my friend.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/18/2017 5:46:00 PM

It's written from the viewpoint of a woman who has just been loved, and as he sleeps she writes what's in her heart. Thank you for such wonderful remarks, Chris.