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watermelon

(A vignette I wrote in 11th grade 2020)

The breathless, Georgia, summer heat retreats with the sun. 
People come out after dusk - like nocturnal animals. 

We’re hunting ice-cream, at a carnival-painted shop. 
There are four serving windows, hundreds of flavors and crickets serenading from the dark.

My BFF Kim and I are with my older brother (Brice) - we run to the line and he follows. 
We’re waiting in line when the noisy muscle car roars up. 

The driver is Kim’s ex-boyfriend - Rob. 
Dumped but still, somehow, on the planet.
We fear the contamination of simple ice-cream pleasures with sour drama. 

We turn our backs as they park and join a nearby line. 
I feel Rob watching us, we’re tense, like maybe there’s a spider nearby.

Rob comes over - he wants something from her - she’s bored with understanding. He stands close - private-space-invader close - he’s high-school-junior smooth. 

His assertions have no creativity - just history repeating itself - the talk is brief. 

After a minute, he storms off - his friends are disappointed - I think they wanted ice-cream. Tire squealing and motor roaring announce his departure - his reputation is upheld.

I got two gigantic scoops - one Watermelon the other Key Lime pie.  YUM
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A song for this:
Levitating by Dua Lipa
Copyright © | Year Posted 2026

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Fallica Avatar
July 3, 2026 at 9:10 AM
In the 11th GRADE! Geeze! . . It’s probably a good thing you’re not world-famous because if you were, I don’t see how any other writer wouldn’t just toss their pencils away after reading your stuff! . Or I suppose you could be an inspiration. / Now I want watermelon ice cream. / Question, who are YOUR favorite writers? / <3
Vionet Avatar
July 3, 2026 at 12:46 PM
Vin, you're my biggest (only?) fan. My favorite writers are James Kirkwood (Good Times/Bad Times, There must be a pony!), Robert Jordan, Brandon Sanderson and Orson Scott Card. No poets need apply.
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