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Suzette Richards Pirouette poetry contest, 9/3/2025

Watercourse

Watercourse

Invisible to eye,
not because I don’t see,
but I refuse to look,
be baptized by water.
   I drink gin;
   kin to pride.
   I won’t win;
   sin is sly.
   Satan’s grin.

Copyright © Kim Rodrigues | Year Posted 2025

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October 2, 2025 at 2:26 PM

...or prince Valium..thus bite size piece is going into my fav's for sure, Kimmy!. Congratulations on a Suzette specialty win! xXhugs

October 2, 2025 at 2:41 PM

Thank you so much, Anaya!

Suzette Richards

September 30, 2025 at 11:07 PM

Congratulations, Kim. It was innovative to use "invisible" as the first word - and the first syllable therefore gave you rather a nice group of rhyming words to work with. The wry element and natural flow made that it was a pleasure to read. There is a saying that gin is "mother's ruin." Thanks for the smile. :)

October 2, 2025 at 2:43 PM

I enjoy your contests. I wrap my mind round them. So glad this made you smile! Hugs and thank you!

September 30, 2025 at 8:12 PM

Congrats Kim. Invisible is a great start word when the form needs 4 short rhyming in words. The mid-way twist is clever :)

October 2, 2025 at 2:43 PM

Thank you kindly, Jeanette,

September 30, 2025 at 7:39 PM

Very nice, Kim. Well done. Congrats on your win.

October 2, 2025 at 2:43 PM

Thank you, Randy!

September 30, 2025 at 5:23 PM

Congratulations, Kim, this is it, huh? You did the 'it' that fit and I'm delighted for you.

September 30, 2025 at 5:43 PM

Thank you so much! Hugs

Reason A. Poteet

September 30, 2025 at 5:10 PM

Cute pirouette, Kim. Congrats on your top placement. Safer not to drink around a river/creek.

September 30, 2025 at 5:43 PM

Thank you, Reason!

September 11, 2025 at 4:24 PM

Hmmm, interesting...gin, huh? wow lol

September 11, 2025 at 6:03 PM

Not me…just a write ;)

sara Etgen-Baker

September 3, 2025 at 4:56 PM

Fabulous 'pirouette' poem and contest entry! best wishes with the contest, hugs, Sar a

September 4, 2025 at 8:56 AM

Thank you!

Anne-Lise Andresen

September 3, 2025 at 12:31 PM

- the cunning old snake ... - hugs

September 3, 2025 at 2:26 PM

Truly! Thank you ~ hugs

Hilda Greenhough

September 3, 2025 at 12:13 PM

I enjoy this poem. Temptations are out there.

September 3, 2025 at 2:26 PM

Thank you! I enjoyed using this form: Pirouette

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