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Two verse poem originally published: 19th March 2021

Amended to one verse on 21st March 2021

Image by Silke Lemcke from Pixabay

as rain extinguished embers of the long day's city heat blurred traffic light reflections painted puddles on the street.

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Karen Jones

Date: 12/31/2024 2:52:00 AM

Simply beautiful! Congratulations!

Gary Radice
Date: 12/31/2024 3:34:00 AM

Simply lovely comments Karen. Thanks so much. All the best. Cheers - Gary

Terry Miller

Date: 12/31/2024 1:18:00 AM

What a little gem, congratulations

Gary Radice
Date: 12/31/2024 1:51:00 AM

Thank you Terry. All the best. Cheers - Gary

Line Gauthier

Date: 12/30/2024 7:20:00 PM

Charming title and micro brevity. I wondered if you had considered the present tense for your poem: as rain extinguisheS embers of the long day's city heat blurred traffic light reflections paintS puddles on the street.

Gary Radice
Date: 12/31/2024 1:07:00 AM

Hi Line. Now that's Interesting.. :) I did consider doing so at the time (I played around with this poem a lot) but felt that the word 'extinguished' was easier to say than 'extinguishes' when I read it back. I was also keen to keep each line to the same number of syllables (I ended up with 7 in this case) to help the flow. Your sugestion did make me think on; many of my poems are based on imagery I remember seeing from my past that for some reason has stayed with me. That was the case in point here too. Thanks for the feedback and all the very best Line for the New Year. Cheers - Gary

Susan Ashley

Date: 4/27/2023 9:31:00 AM

Oh, dear Gary, this potent and precious poetic gem takes my breath away! So vivid and vibrant with many feelings and images that overflow from the small space of this verse. Dynamic and dramatic! As in in life and poetry, big things come in small packages! Love it! Congratulations for your wonderful win in Brian's contest. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan

Gary Radice
Date: 4/28/2023 4:05:00 AM

Hi Susan. Thank you for your lovely comments. I really like your description 'Dynamic and dramatic!' High praise indeed. Cheers - Gary

JCB Brul

Date: 4/26/2023 10:53:00 PM

What a spectacular imagery you created with a unique blend of hues! Congratulations! Best poem I've read so far today.

Gary Radice
Date: 4/26/2023 11:51:00 PM

That's very kind of you. Thanks so much! Cheers - Gary

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/26/2023 6:10:00 AM

Hi Gary, Good photo and poem. They meshed well together. Congratulations on your winning write. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Gary Radice
Date: 4/26/2023 6:58:00 AM

Thank you Alexis. If I remember rightly I scoured Pixabay for an age looking for a suitable image..much longer than it took me to write the poem in all honesty :) Glad you like both. Cheers - Gary

Sam Kauffman

Date: 4/25/2023 11:58:00 AM

Gary, what a delightful snapshot of city streets after the rain in a shimmering rain painting. These four lines really capture that feeling and vision! Congratulations on your win! Blessings and cheers!

Gary Radice
Date: 4/26/2023 5:25:00 AM

Hi Sam. Thank you for your lovely comments and your continued support. Cheers - Gary

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/25/2023 8:58:00 AM

- A wonderful painting in four beautiful lines, Gary ... congratulations on your win in the Brian Strand contest :) - hugs

Gary Radice
Date: 4/26/2023 5:20:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise. It was originally an 8 line poem but getting rid of the original first verse, I think, made it a more effective piece. It's always lovely, therefore, when fellow poets appreciate the 4 lines. Thanks again. Cheers - Gary

Brian Strand

Date: 9/22/2021 6:24:00 AM

Yes Gary,reflections can produce intriguing images t a poet

Gary Radice
Date: 9/22/2021 10:33:00 AM

Indeed and if I remember correctly Brian it was your good self that advised me to just keep the one verse - Thank you :) Cheers - Gary

Brian Sambourne

Date: 9/12/2021 2:24:00 PM

Hello Gary, Your four short, sharp lines capture the city street scene superbly. A grand + delightful read. Best wishes, Brian

Gary Radice
Date: 9/12/2021 2:34:00 PM

Thank you Brian. It was these four lines that inspired my latest poem (12th Sept 2021). There's something about a wet night city scene that gets my muse flowing. Cheers - Gary

Greg Gaul

Date: 6/4/2021 1:51:00 PM

Last two lines are notable imagery at its best. Congrats.

Gary Radice
Date: 6/4/2021 2:01:00 PM

Thank you Greg. Originally there were 8 lines over 2 stanzas but keeping it to just 4 lines I think works well. Cheers - Gary

Jan Allison

Date: 5/20/2021 4:08:00 AM

Wonderful imagery Gary, many congratulations on your win hugs Jan xx

Gary Radice
Date: 5/20/2021 5:07:00 AM

Thank you Jan. I think word for word this poem is probably my most successful I've written here in terms of comments received. :) Cheers- Gary

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/19/2021 11:23:00 AM

Back with congratulations on another win for this artistic gem. I agree, there is something about the rain that generates inspiration. It's like a cozy womb painting impressions on the wall of the soul. All the best my friend. I love this one.

Gary Radice
Date: 5/19/2021 11:32:00 AM

Thank you again Sam and Wow! I absolutely love your description about the rain and its inspiration. Cheers - Gary

Christuraj Alex

Date: 5/17/2021 11:39:00 PM

Congratulations!

Gary Radice
Date: 5/18/2021 12:04:00 AM

Thank you! :)

Deborah Burrows

Date: 4/2/2021 3:56:00 PM

Well said! I experienced that for sure. I liked the title “Water Color” because I enjoy painting.

Gary Radice
Date: 4/3/2021 3:37:00 AM

Deborah, thank you so much for stopping by to read and for your comments. Cheers - Gary

Geoffrey Brewer

Date: 4/1/2021 1:55:00 AM

Strikingly vivid images that excite the imagination with their originality of view. Well written! Gary

Gary Radice
Date: 4/1/2021 3:12:00 AM

Cheers Geoffrey. A case of being less is more with this one. Have a good easter.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/29/2021 2:13:00 PM

Ahhh!! I really like this one. It has good rhythm, flow and rhyme. Congrats on it winning in a contest. Sara

Gary Radice
Date: 3/29/2021 10:51:00 PM

Sara, thanks for your visit, read and valued comments. Cheers - Gary

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 3/27/2021 1:30:00 PM

Good pen Gary, good expression and fine imagery too, well done!

Gary Radice
Date: 3/27/2021 1:57:00 PM

Thank you Gordon. After toying with the idea of either a two stanza poem or just the one stanza I decided / was persuaded to plump for the "less is more" theory. I'm glad I did. Cheers and regards to North of the Border - Gary

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 3/26/2021 10:00:00 PM

What a perfect title, you show the moods of weariness and relief so eloquently~

Gary Radice
Date: 3/27/2021 6:06:00 AM

Thank you Michelle for your equally eloquent words. Cheers - Gary

Angela Crabtree

Date: 3/25/2021 11:25:00 AM

Love this one, Gary! Perfect picture and poem :)

Gary Radice
Date: 3/25/2021 11:36:00 AM

Thank you Angela. I hoped it would just capture a moment. Cheers - Gary

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 3/24/2021 1:53:00 PM

Water- colours Heartfelt emulsion

Gary Radice
Date: 3/24/2021 2:00:00 PM

Cheers Christopher. :)

David Holmes

Date: 3/23/2021 5:43:00 PM

Gary Congratulations on your win - I can see the imagery in my minds eye of the traffic light in the puddles - a great piece of work - David

Gary Radice
Date: 3/24/2021 1:15:00 AM

Thank you David! I love to try and conjure up imagery that everyone can identify with. Cheers - Gary

Sam Kauffman

Date: 3/23/2021 10:56:00 AM

Watercolours - perfect title that reflects the "painted puddles" of "blurred" light. Love the way you set up your last line. This is as delightful as evening light on wet streets! Congratulations on your win. Way to go!

Gary Radice
Date: 3/23/2021 1:02:00 PM

Thanks Sam! I've always been inspired to write by the rain..I can't put my finger on why this is other than it creates an atmosphere all of its own. Cheers - Gary

David Kavanagh

Date: 3/23/2021 7:44:00 AM

Congratulations Gary, even your edited version still evokes New York to me, but could well be any city, Cheers David

Gary Radice
Date: 3/23/2021 8:10:00 AM

Thanks David. Sometimes less is more when it comes to my poetry :) Cheers again Gary

Kim Merryman

Date: 3/23/2021 6:59:00 AM

So much imagery packed in one verse! Congrats on your win, Gary! Blessings, Kim M

Gary Radice
Date: 3/23/2021 7:23:00 AM

Thank you Kim- I really appreciate your comments.