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Two verse poem originally published: 19th March 2021

Amended to one verse on 21st March 2021

Image by JL G from Pixabay

This poem was placed 1st = in Brian Strand's "ALL YOURS" (Mar 23) Poetry Contest and

3rd = in Line Gauthier's "Surprise Me" Poetry Contest.


 

as rain extinguished embers of the long day's city heat blurred traffic light reflections painted puddles on the street.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021




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Date: 9/22/2021 6:24:00 AM
Yes Gary,reflections can produce intriguing images t a poet
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Gary Radice
Date: 9/22/2021 10:33:00 AM
Indeed and if I remember correctly Brian it was your good self that advised me to just keep the one verse - Thank you :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 9/12/2021 2:24:00 PM
Hello Gary, Your four short, sharp lines capture the city street scene superbly. A grand + delightful read. Best wishes, Brian
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Date: 9/12/2021 2:34:00 PM
Thank you Brian. It was these four lines that inspired my latest poem (12th Sept 2021). There's something about a wet night city scene that gets my muse flowing. Cheers - Gary
Date: 6/4/2021 1:51:00 PM
Last two lines are notable imagery at its best. Congrats.
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Date: 6/4/2021 2:01:00 PM
Thank you Greg. Originally there were 8 lines over 2 stanzas but keeping it to just 4 lines I think works well. Cheers - Gary
Date: 5/20/2021 4:08:00 AM
Wonderful imagery Gary, many congratulations on your win hugs Jan xx
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Date: 5/20/2021 5:07:00 AM
Thank you Jan. I think word for word this poem is probably my most successful I've written here in terms of comments received. :) Cheers- Gary
Date: 5/19/2021 11:23:00 AM
Back with congratulations on another win for this artistic gem. I agree, there is something about the rain that generates inspiration. It's like a cozy womb painting impressions on the wall of the soul. All the best my friend. I love this one.
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Date: 5/19/2021 11:32:00 AM
Thank you again Sam and Wow! I absolutely love your description about the rain and its inspiration. Cheers - Gary
Date: 5/17/2021 11:39:00 PM
Congratulations!
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Gary Radice
Date: 5/18/2021 12:04:00 AM
Thank you! :)
Date: 4/2/2021 3:56:00 PM
Well said! I experienced that for sure. I liked the title “Water Color” because I enjoy painting.
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Date: 4/3/2021 3:37:00 AM
Deborah, thank you so much for stopping by to read and for your comments. Cheers - Gary
Date: 4/1/2021 1:55:00 AM
Strikingly vivid images that excite the imagination with their originality of view. Well written! Gary
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Date: 4/1/2021 3:12:00 AM
Cheers Geoffrey. A case of being less is more with this one. Have a good easter.
Date: 3/29/2021 2:13:00 PM
Ahhh!! I really like this one. It has good rhythm, flow and rhyme. Congrats on it winning in a contest. Sara
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Date: 3/29/2021 10:51:00 PM
Sara, thanks for your visit, read and valued comments. Cheers - Gary
Date: 3/27/2021 1:30:00 PM
Good pen Gary, good expression and fine imagery too, well done!
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Date: 3/27/2021 1:57:00 PM
Thank you Gordon. After toying with the idea of either a two stanza poem or just the one stanza I decided / was persuaded to plump for the "less is more" theory. I'm glad I did. Cheers and regards to North of the Border - Gary
Date: 3/26/2021 10:00:00 PM
What a perfect title, you show the moods of weariness and relief so eloquently~
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Date: 3/27/2021 6:06:00 AM
Thank you Michelle for your equally eloquent words. Cheers - Gary
Date: 3/25/2021 11:25:00 AM
Love this one, Gary! Perfect picture and poem :)
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Date: 3/25/2021 11:36:00 AM
Thank you Angela. I hoped it would just capture a moment. Cheers - Gary
Date: 3/24/2021 1:53:00 PM
Water- colours Heartfelt emulsion
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Date: 3/24/2021 2:00:00 PM
Cheers Christopher. :)
Date: 3/23/2021 5:43:00 PM
Gary Congratulations on your win - I can see the imagery in my minds eye of the traffic light in the puddles - a great piece of work - David
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Date: 3/24/2021 1:15:00 AM
Thank you David! I love to try and conjure up imagery that everyone can identify with. Cheers - Gary
Date: 3/23/2021 10:56:00 AM
Watercolours - perfect title that reflects the "painted puddles" of "blurred" light. Love the way you set up your last line. This is as delightful as evening light on wet streets! Congratulations on your win. Way to go!
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Date: 3/23/2021 1:02:00 PM
Thanks Sam! I've always been inspired to write by the rain..I can't put my finger on why this is other than it creates an atmosphere all of its own. Cheers - Gary
Date: 3/23/2021 7:44:00 AM
Congratulations Gary, even your edited version still evokes New York to me, but could well be any city, Cheers David
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Gary Radice
Date: 3/23/2021 8:10:00 AM
Thanks David. Sometimes less is more when it comes to my poetry :) Cheers again Gary
Date: 3/23/2021 6:59:00 AM
So much imagery packed in one verse! Congrats on your win, Gary! Blessings, Kim M
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Date: 3/23/2021 7:23:00 AM
Thank you Kim- I really appreciate your comments.
Date: 3/19/2021 1:00:00 PM
Heya Gary, what a fantastic picture you evoke, and your final line brings it home perfectly, for some reason New York is screaming at me, cheers David
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Date: 3/19/2021 1:07:00 PM
David, yes..originally the first line was "the night lit yellow taxis".. but I decided I wanted to paint a picture of New York without mentioning any specific colours and hopefully the words painted the city instead. The poem was written in response to Brian Strand's blog today about art, colour and life. Thanks for your continuing support and valued comments. Cheers - Gary. EDIT 21st March 2021 - David, I wasn't happy with the first verse so changed it to a one verse poem. As a result my comments about yellow taxis etc are null and void :) Ah, the life and trials of a would-be poet eh? :) Cheers - Gary