Watchman

Dark gray clouds amassed Sunlight beams rays through Moisture 'pon green grass Time when all things life renew The Mockingbird sings Loud and strong his song 'Pon the dead limb clings He the watchman headstrong Early one morning Seeds and water placed He spent hours singing All the birds came_raced His tune understood All's safe come one_all Even though some God forsook But judgment's soon pall The Watchman sings loud Enjoy life today And change from sin proud Or judgment must weigh. Finis'

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Randy Curry

Date: 5/6/2013 11:22:00 AM

sweet write. e a poe was all 3. there are other bios of him but this is my first read. will read others to ensure a balanced view. in this one he is; alcoholic, addicted to opium, depressed, obsessive, sarcastic, possibly fantasies of necrophilia, scathing, critical, always broke or nearly so, impotent, insecure, a mooch etc. On the + side he was; brilliant, worldly, devoted, a doting husband, and a masterful marketer, handsome, intelligent.

Kevin Callaghan

Date: 5/1/2013 7:23:00 PM

I think maybe we are the watchman looking to bring sunlight from rain health from pain very good thank you

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/25/2013 4:57:00 PM

I enjoyed this one. it almost feels like the watchman is symbolic of God!

Ndaba Sibanda

Date: 4/25/2013 4:41:00 PM

Powerful piece.

James Peranteau

Date: 4/25/2013 4:08:00 PM

Wow, really strong write dear poet, and just the wise 'ol owl is missing ! *smiles* I really enjoyed this write Sara ! I see from some of the comments below, that you have plans on continuing this...if so, I will be looking out ! Have a wonderful day my friend....much love, james

John Loving Iii

Date: 4/24/2013 7:35:00 PM

all the birds for a place they raced. maybe? john

Donna Jones

Date: 4/24/2013 5:41:00 PM

Wow if this is unfinished...I feel ashamed of my measly attempts!!!! Don't you wonder how those dead limbs do cling??? They fall just right entwined laced as if placed there...awesome...Sara..

Naji Almurisi

Date: 4/24/2013 9:57:00 AM

I am waiting .. so nice poem with high feelings

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/24/2013 9:47:00 AM

i am stunned no end, sara.. looking forward to the next lines... a beauty!...you okay?... got the soupy.. :) huggs!

Kim Van Breda

Date: 4/24/2013 7:22:00 AM

Such exquisite detail of the beauty of our Creator. Enjoyed the read.

Russell Sivey

Date: 4/24/2013 6:51:00 AM

I really loved what you have done so far, this will be a very awesome poem when completed, actually you could stop here and it would be a masterful poem! I truly enjoyed reading this delightful piece, Great Work!!

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 4/24/2013 6:49:00 AM

Unfinished and great... What will it bew like if you eventually finish the write.. Well done Ma¬A.O